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The Annex Reviews, 9/26/03
by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com)
Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh 



In these reviews I turn again to original slash stories, 
a longtime favorite of mine. Rare when I first started 
reviewing them -- a year or so back -- they've since 
multiplied, in part due to the popularity of yaoi and 
Japanese manga and anime series, but also, I think, to 
the writers themselves, many of whom are maturing and 
growing bored with the limitations of fanfic. Also, I 
think, from the feedback they've acquired on self-
posting archives such as Fictionpress and 
slashfanfiction.com.

So slash... and slash again!



The Stories:


Heart of Tribus (lildragon): M/M, original slash, 
   fantasy

Arrangements (Moniquill): M/M, bond, original slash, 
   fantasy

For Lord and Land (Delilah DeSora): M/M, original slash, 
   fantasy

Of Unicorn Flesh (Kristene Sweep): M/M, original slash, 
   myth

Bloodraven, Chapters 1 - 3 (PL Nunn): M/m, ncon, rape, 
   original slash, slave, fantasy, viol, extrm

Devotion, Chapters 1 and 2 (Bright Angel Aetherius): 
   M/M, original slash, slave, fantasy, nosex

Tarnished Armor, Chapters 1 and 2 (Pluto): M/M, original 
   slash, fantasy, nosex

Delight (Katie Viecei): M/M/M, slave, Narnia fanfic

Kings Love (Mel Blue): M/m, slave, Narnia fanfic, nosex




Heart of Tribus [B+/B] 
Where found: Adultfanfiction.net
URL: http://adultfan.nexcess.net/aff/story.php?no=3629
Author: lildragon
Type: M/M, original slash, fantasy

Adultfanfiction.net has picked up the slash gauntlet 
where Fanfiction.net left off, allowing many writers to 
continue to post their fanfics and fantasies. Here's a 
slash ficlet described by the writer as "randomly 
thought up."

Imathaen is a (elvish?) dancer chosen to perform for 
"Kamkari, emperor of Zilgaldous" a name which might make 
some with less self-control than I break out into 
giggles. Struck by the young emperor's beauty, the 
dancer sneaks into his bedchamber later that night even 
though "laying with royalty is punishable by death." For 
dancers I guess, or males? And is it laying or lying? 
Overcome with feelings of slashy lust, he ties the 
empower hand and foot to the posts of his bed; but 
surprisingly, the emporer isn't too upset at this. You 
see, no one ever treats the emporer like a normal human 
being, only like royalty... though why he would think 
being treated like a normal human being includes being 
tied to the bedposts, I don't know. 

For a light read this was OK; it was pretty literate for 
a piece made up on the fly, the first-person tone was 
engaging, and it was easy to digest. But it didn't go 
anywhere, and it was pretty silly. If it lost me at any 
point, it's that an emporer's bedchamber would be better 
protected from break-ins of this sort. Wouldn't he have 
bodyguards?




Arrangements [A-] 
Where found: Fictionpress.net
URL: 
http://www.fictionpress.com/read.php?storyid=1279416
Author: Moniquill
Type: M/M, bond, original slash, fantasy

Moniquill is a prolific original slash writer who used 
to post on the FanFiction.com site before the purge; now 
she's switched over to its sister site, Fictionpress, 
ostensibly for original fiction rated R and below. I say 
ostensibly because there is still plenty of kink and 
smut available if you're willing to sift. She impressed 
me on the former site, so finding she had jumped ships, 
I decided to read some more of her work.

"Arrangements" is a continuing slash serial about young 
Lord Giles and the elven slave he buys to share his bed. 
As such, it's a classic power differential setup. The 
elf, a civilized being who's had some hard luck, has a 
reputation for savaging his owners and Giles thinks he 
can tame him, so he ties him to the bedpost and comes up 
with some novel torments... knowing elves are allergic to 
silver, he puts a silver earring on him. However, 
things are not as dark or serious as such a setup would 
imply... as serious as they would be in, say, a 
Francesca Bathory slash story. Lord Giles is a youthful 
and light-hearted sort, characteristics rather out of 
place for a slave owner, and after a while the elf 
decides to be light-hearted too -- tired of being tied 
to the bedposts (a repeated theme in these stories) he 
decides to become more aggressive with his master. This 
turnabout is portrayed in a teasing, whimsical way that, 
to my taste, is out of place for a slave fic, which 
should by its nature be more serious. And as usual for 
slashy slave fics, there's nary an explanation of how or 
why this pseudo-Renaissance society maintains slavery as 
a societal institution.

This was light, fluffy slash reading (think a well-
beaten meringue, flavored with lemon) and Moniquill 
writes it well. But I wish there had been more 
originality and maturity. In a genre this young, with 
such young writers, those are qualities difficult to 
find.




For Lord and Land [A/A-] 
Where found: For Lord and Land
URL: 
http://angelfire.com/dragon/delilah/forlordandland.html
Author: Delilah DeSora
Type: M/M, original slash, fantasy

This author has come up with a story that treads the 
middle ground between yaoi and original slash, with 
excellent visual writing that made me imagine it as a 
lushly detailed manga or animated series. The land of 
Ardae is ruled by the red-haired, twinkish young Emporer 
Ardel Aidan, also known as the Dragon, a being of 
absolute sovereignty who has an elemental, inherited 
control over fire that makes him a living God in the 
eyes of his people. Unfortunately, he's nuttier than a 
fruitcake and prone to irrational hissyfits. To fix 
things his loyal knights decide he needs the (male) 
reincarnation of the Leviathan, who has elemental 
control over water, to cool him down and stabilize him. 
Two young knights, Cian and Dante, are dispatched to 
search for this individual, who will be the Emporer's 
bed-slave as well as his nurse. Things are complicated 
when one of the knights turns out to be the Leviathan 
they're searching for, and is not thrilled at all about 
serving as a slave. Meanwhile the Emporer is having his 
psyche twisted by an underling who has control over the 
element of Air.

This all adds up to a very interesting plot which was 
one of the busiest and most ambitious I've seen in this 
genre, with a derivative but fascinating worldsetting, a 
number of well-defined characters, and plenty of 
slashiness including slavery, semiconsensual M/M sex, 
teasing flirtations, and tearful confessions. It 
succeeded in most of what it did, but I would have liked 
to have seen, as in Moniquill story above, less 
restraint and more maturity; also, the plot seemed to 
rush by at times, with critical events happening off-
stage (such as the two heroes fighting off the 
treacherous underling) while other plot points were not 
explored at all. In fact these five chapters could have 
easily been ten. I also grew annoyed at how the author 
broke down the sexual roles between males into male and 
female, doer and done by, even though she was careful to 
point out the lovers do switch off on occasion. Many 
slash writers do this, and it seems to be a growing 
trend -- a replay of the uke-seme rules from manga, I'm 
afraid.

However, for a an original slash fantasy, there was lots 
and lots of promise here, particularly in how the author 
handled her characters. I encourage her to continue 
writing in the universe she has created and watch the 
tendency to skim over and rush her plots.




Of Unicorn Flesh [A] 
Where found: Yaoishrine
URL: 
http://www.yaoishrine.com/fictions/ofunicornflesh.htm
Author: Kristene Sweep
Type: M/M, original slash, myth

Here's a slash fairy tale which is interesting because 
instead of being based on real-world elements its based 
on fictional ones, the unspoken laws of slash. An 
unwanted foundling is given over to the church of his 
village to be raised, his unluck inspiring rejection and 
derision from the other children. One day he has enough 
of it and runs off into the Forest of Monsters, where he 
meets a dragon who tells him what he must do to never be 
unwanted again. Unfortunately, it turns him into a 
stereotypical yaoi hero ("sturdy arms, a tapered waist, 
high legs, and the frame of youth.  His hair swept over 
his broad shoulders in the color of a polished blade, 
smooth and sleek.  His skin glowed in the sunlight as if 
dusted with silver... his eyes were like blue pearls 
even from thirty feet away") who is wanted, for sexual 
use, by everyone he meets, which leads to him being 
serially enslaved, and serially raped, by the powerful 
males of his kingdom all the way on up to the emporer.

This was an interesting take on yaoi cliches that came 
out, I think, more slyly amusing than the author meant 
it to be, at least to my sensibilities. It could almost 
have been a cruel alternate-world fairy tale in the "be 
careful what you wish for" vein, though it ended on a 
confusing note that seemed thrown in simply to bring the 
story to a close. But what came before was a smart, 
lovely hoot.




Bloodraven, Chapters 1, 2, 3 [A+] 
Where found: Bishonenworks
URL: http://www.bishonenworks.com/ogre1.htm
Author: PL Nunn
Type: M/m, ncon, rape, original slash, slave, fantasy, 
viol, extrm

This story was one of the more... extreme let's say, 
featuring intense interspecies rape and tons of violence 
and cruelty. And as such the author goes way, way out 
with it, taking it to an orbit I never thought possible, 
at least until I read it.

The author is, first of all, somewhat of a prodigy in 
yaoi circles, a self-published writer with an 
astonishing number of fanfic and original stories to her 
credit. Plus, she's a helluva artist as well, one of the 
finest manga/doujinshi amateurs out there, featuring on 
her website dozens upon dozens of pretty yaoi boys in 
athletic X-rated contortions. (Thank God for Poser 
software.) She also has her own style, halfway between 
the traditional bug-eyed manga and the tighter, more 
realistic 'American' look with its broad shoulders and 
six-packs. 

But back to the fiction. "Bloodraven" is an ongoing 
multichapter serial (and they are long chapters) set in 
a fantasy world of Medieval kingdoms, druidic forests, 
ogres, and half-ogres. The hero is Yhalen, a guilt-
ridden teen who gets captured by some orgrish raiders 
and is promptly made into a slave of them, and it ain't 
pretty. For one thing, they've got *fingers* the size of 
baseball bats, so you can imagine what their dicks can 
do:

>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
The one with the earrings leaned over, grinning and 
tipped the mouth of his wineskin up, dribbling strong 
red wine over Yhalen's thighs. It dribbled over his 
balls and down the short channel to his anus, making the 
cuts sting and his ball shrink. The one at his bottom 
laughed and smeared his big finger in the wine, then 
pressed the tip of it against Yhalen's opening. It was 
thicker than Yhalen's penis engorged and considerably 
longer. The nail was blunt, but ragged and tore flesh as 
the ogre twisted it into Yhalen's resisting body. 

The wine lubricated nothing so well as the thick blood 
that began to flow, hot and stinging down Yhalen's spine 
and across his thighs. 

He did scream then, when the bulge of the knuckle 
threatened to split already torn muscle. Cried and 
cursed and spasmodically tried to jerk his body away 
from the intrusion and failed. And hopelessly, miserably 
failed. He did nothing but scrape his arms and hands 
against the bark of the tree and amuse the gathered 
monsters.
>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

Fortunately the hero has a magical ability that lets him 
heal quickly, but there's plenty of sheer terror as he's 
sexually molested and carted through the woods to their 
camp, where Bloodraven, the physically smaller but more 
intelligent half-ogre leader of the tribe, claims him as 
his prize. The depiction of slavery was pretty raw 
compared to most yaoi stories: there's plenty of pain 
and discomfort, not to mention fear. It's also the real 
thing, the BDSM and D/s elements lacking, and candid in 
its depiction of feces, blood, sweat, and dirt. The 
story was more of a situational one than one with a 
strong plot or characters, but what an intense situation 
it was, and it gets its A+ rating from its sheer 
appetite in depicting some very dark aspects of fantasy.

If there was a flaw in the story, it's that the first 
1,800 words or so were almost unintelligible. Something 
about Yhalen cavorting in the forest with friends who 
initiate a lover's triangle that is interrupted by the 
ogres, causing Yhalen guilt for the rest of the story. 
It could, and probably should, be skipped, for the 
reader to pick up the story at the ogre-capture part.

Highly recommended if you like abusive yaoi stories, or 
wild and intense fantasy tales.




Devotion, Chapters 1 and 2 [B+] 
Where found: The Celestial Noodle House
URL: http://home.earthlink.net/~aetherius/e_main.htm
Author: Bright Angel Aetherius
Type: M/M, original slash, slave, fantasy, nosex

This story was one of the more typically yaoi ones, as 
such followed one of the more popular slashy plotlines: 
young guy is sold as a slave and has to adjust to his 
new situation. Not escape or protest: adjust. I've seen 
it used dozens of times, in fanfics ranging from Gundam 
Wing to N'sync, and on the Nifty Archives as well. It 
obviously strikes a chord in both gay men and straight 
women.

The author tackles it in typical yaoi style, first of 
all setting up her world: Trivea, a decadent city with a 
distinct upper class and underclass, ruled by the 
mysterious nobles who live on the guarded isle of 
Sefiros. The nobles periodically swoop down on the city 
to buy attractive pleasure slaves, and therein lies our 
story. Cyan (a recurring name in yaoi stories) is the 
fey, useless son of a wealthy family who is sold by his 
own father to pay off a bad debt, and so off he goes 
into slavehood, purchased by a lord who takes him to the 
island. There he's put into a male harem of sorts with 
other yaoi boys, who are all thoroughly, and tediously 
at times, described by their skin, hair and eye color 
and typical mode of dress. This introductory part goes 
on too long maybe, and the reactions of the harem slaves 
to each other are somewhat junior high (and probably 
inspired by some junior high anime) but there's 
intiguing possibilities in the idea of male whores 
putting up with each other the best they can. However, 
like the Moniquill story, it does all come across as 
juvenile; the nastier aspects aren't touched on, and 
there's plenty of tears and helpless whinging from the 
protagonist, who acts all of nine or ten. Another 
annoyance I found was that the story's writing style was 
too long on the visual descriptions and too short on the 
action. I found myself skipping over the lengthy 
summations of halls and rooms, trying to get to a place 
where the characters are actually advancing the plot.

In sum, how much you'd like this depends on your 
tolerance for fluffy, well-sweetened yaoi stories. 
Whatever the meringue level, though, it was promising in 
that it introduced some interesting characters and the 
potential conflicts among them.




Tarnished Armor, Chapters 1 and 2 [A] 
Where found: Chrysanthemum Vows
URL: http://thatdamncat.com/yaoi/armor
Author: Liz Cheng
Type: M/M, original slash, fantasy, nosex

Liz Cheng (aka Pluto) is another multitalented 
writer/artist. She started out in the anime fandoms but 
has also branched out into Lord of the Rings, Harry 
Potter, and original slash.

This story was in fact more slash than yaoi, and more 
mainstream fic than slash, in the style of Ellen Kushner 
and the more modern pro-gay fantasy writers. Marcus is 
an ordinary soldier in a Medieval world who is sent on a 
mission to serve Geran, the King of Mirivir. He's wowed 
by the exotic splendor and beauty of the court, and by 
the equally exotic and beautiful boy-king himself 
("...like a dragon, golden and exotic, with sleek-sharp 
features that made him look neither young nor old. His 
hair was no one color, but mottled and streaked like a 
wild animal's mane in varying shades of gold and copper 
and brown. It was swept back away from his face and 
tumbled just past his shoulders") who, in addition to 
his slashy attributes, is also an Ifuldrin, a sacred 
dragon warrior of sorts. Their story is told in the form 
of flashbacks from a present day viewpoint when it's 
revealed things have not gone down well between the 
pair: an adult Geran has invaded Marcus' kingdom and 
captured him in battle.

The story was smoothly and professionally written and I 
enjoyed reading it, particularly the teasing dialogue 
between Geran and Marcus. Their relationship was at the 
center of the story, and its progress was affectionate 
and believable. Overall, though, the story was trying 
very hard to be mainstream fiction and not slash. As 
such, most of the colorful and histrionic elements were 
missing, and it was perhaps too boring. Marcus goes on 
and on about his low birth, his physical plainness, and 
his unworthiness to be a companion to the beautiful and 
noble boy-king; it got to be tiring. Since we only heard 
what he had to say, I really had no idea why the king 
was enthralled with this guy. At several points he even 
wants to break off the relationship, only to be pushed 
into continuing it by the commander of the diplomatic 
mission, in the hopes he'll influence the king to look 
more favorably on their country; it's also suggested 
that he whore himself for the mission's good. But while 
this part was written well, it just didn't have the 
vicious sting and emotional impact it could have. In 
sum, the main character was a lump, bound by duty, with 
few attractive qualities, and the intriguing one, the 
king, wasn't given the words he needed to shine (such as 
why he seems to be so perenially unhappy) at least not 
in these chapters, where we're stuck with Dullboy.

The story also lacked the detail and color, both 
emotional and descriptive, that one gets from yaoi and 
slash; I suspect it was edited out for space or 
'professional' reasons, which is too bad, as some 
wildness might have livened things up.

I can't rate the story badly, however, because as I said 
it was an entertaining read, and I'm motivated to read 
the rest of the chapters. But I think the writer put too 
many chains on herself.




Delight [A] 
Where found: Silverlake
URL: http://silverlake.imjustsayin.net/katiev-
delight.html
Author: Katie Viecei
Type: M/M/M, slave, Narnia fanfic

Despite writing a series that could be considered the 
"Harry Potter" of its day Narnia creator C.S. Lewis 
(fellow Inkling to J.R.R. Tolkien) hasn't received much 
attention in slash circles. This is too bad, because as 
a longtime fan of Narnia I would say it is supremely 
slashable, with more than a few opportunities for angst, 
h/c, kink, mind control and especially fur (the many 
sentient animal and mythological creature characters.) 
It even has two of slash's indisputably vital fandom 
ingredients: a somewhat Medieval, magic-using 
worldsetting (with one of its societies a slave-based 
Middle Eastern one) and a television miniseries with 
young, attractive stars that is available on VHS and 
DVD. Furthermore, it is soon to gain a third: a movie is 
in the works, inspired by the success of the Potter 
books, and there is also talk of the books' publishing 
house commisioning new works in the series and even 
daring to excise Lewis' Christian references from the 
originals. The stage seems to be slowly setting itself 
for a Tolkien-style fanfic explosion in which both media 
and literary material are referenced. (Lewis' other 
works are slashable as well, particularly his "Out of 
the Silent Planet" trilogy with its morally upright, 
hapless male protagonist, exotic landscapes, and 
psychologically intimate encounters with other species.) 

This story was found on the Silverlake multifandom site 
where the author has posted other Narnia fanfics. It 
picks up on the Calormen motif of the books, Calormen 
being the vaguely Persian, heathen, expansionist slave-
owning country to the south the Narnian characters 
ocasionally clash with. It takes place sometime in the 
first book, in the untold history when the four Pevensie 
siblings (Peter, Susan, Edmund, and Lucy, for those who 
don't remember) are reining as adult kings and queens of 
Narnia. Here they attend a state fuction in Calormen at 
which Queen Susan is being wooed by the Tisroc's 
(Calormenese for Emporer) son. Edmund is separated from 
the others on this mission and provided entertainment in 
the form of two male slaves, doing things Lewis, like 
Tolkien, would be scandalized at:

>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
Edmund took the time to examine them both, for they were 
wonderful to look at, well-formed and slender, both 
obviously chosen for their beauty. They were both clean 
shaven, in contrast to the bearded Tarkhaans, which 
might have been the mark of a slave, and their chests 
were bereft of hair. Edmund suspected they had been 
shaven there as well, and wondered how far that went.
When he looked at them, they met his gaze his moment, 
then looked away in a obviously learned manner. Though 
they might have been trained to appear so, they seemed 
kind and good, and he was cheered that such men existed 
in Calormen.

While his mind was content with his company, his body 
was restless, and as his gaze dropped to Tashda's groin, 
he could see the erection there, pressing against the 
thin silk of his trousers. Sensing the attention, Tashda 
shifted and started working at the ties of the pants, 
finally standing so as to be able to remove them 
entirely. He dropped them by Arleesh who had also shed 
his clothing, and knelt again. Edmund looked at the now 
revealed cock with open curiosity and not a little lust. 
It was surrounded by well-kept dark hair and covered in 
the same fine golden powder as the rest of the man, 
which made the veins on it stand out. His own penis 
stirred at such a sight, and Tashda immediately moved 
forward and straddled his thighs.
>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

The "Delight" of the title refers to Turkish Delight, a 
sweet Edmund has a weakness for, well described in "The 
Lion, the Witch, and the Wardrobe." The character of 
Edmund has a special attraction for Narnfic writers; 
he's the Boromir of the bunch, the morally conflicted 
one who tries to do good and fails, and therefore he 
gets all the interesting plotlines. (The author has also 
written a very dark Narnia hetfic, "The Traitor, the 
Witch, and the Lovers" posted on the same site, which I 
definitely recommend as a NC-17 take on what would have 
happened to the Pevensies if the White Witch had won.)

This author has done a very good job in capturing the 
flavor, if not quite the exact tone, of Lewis' prose, 
bringing it into the more adult realm of slash if not 
that of Lewis' adult fiction. The story was little more 
than a sexual encounter, yet the pastiche was handled 
very well, particularly in its use of lush, descriptive 
language. Worth a look for those who have fond memories 
of Narnia and wouldn't mind seeing it in a different 
way.




Kings Love [A] 
Where found: Mel Blue's Narnia Fanfic
URL: http://www.melblue.com/narnia.html
Author: Mel Blue
Type: M/m, slave, Narnia fanfic, nosex

If C. S. Lewis wrote angsty slash it would read just 
like this.

The writer of this story has taken an incident from the 
third book of the series, "The Voyage of the Dawn 
Treader," and deftly inserted her own plot between the 
lines. To summarize, Edmund and Lucy Pevensie, and their 
odious cousin Eustace, have been called into Narnia to 
aid Prince Caspian in his exploration of the Eastern 
Sea. Edmund is already haunted by an encounter from the 
previous book (or rather, inserted by the author between 
the lines of the previous book) where he witnessed his 
older brother Peter and Caspian sharing a same-sex 
romantic encounter:

>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
After their battle with the Telmarines, there had been a 
great feast, and it was after this feast that he had 
seen Caspian and Peter kissing in the moonlight. He had 
not thought of that moment for a long time and now he 
felt a slight flush rise in his cheeks as the pictures 
replayed in his mind. He still did not understand why 
Aslan had wanted him to see it, and he still did not 
understand why he had felt so horrified at the time. At 
school, he had sometimes glimpsed similar incidents and 
in Narnia those sorts of relationships did not meet with 
the same disapproval as they did in his own world.
>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

In a fascinating twist this incident has apparantly been 
approved by Aslan, the all-powerful god/lion ruler of 
this world: could he have been pro-gay? This only adds 
fuel to the fire of the story's main plot, which 
involves the heroes being captured by slavers during a 
layover in the Lone Isles. This being slash the author 
addresses the possibilities which Lewis did not:

>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
The merchant immediately yanked on the rope and Edmund 
fell forward, his face smashing into the merchant's 
chest. He struggled for a moment, but then a strong arm 
came around his waist and tightened, holding him in 
place. Panic suddenly ripped through Edmund and he was 
gasping for air, trying to clear his head, when a hand 
was placed under his chin and his face was roughly 
forced up. 

It was for only a moment that he saw the merchants face, 
because the next thing he knew the merchant had lowered 
his head and his lips met Edmund's, pressing on them 
painfully. Edmund froze in shock, and in that moment the 
Calormene forced Edmund's lips open and pushed his 
tongue deep into Edmund's mouth. 
>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

The rest of the story is taken up with both Edmund's 
reaction to the incident and his growing attraction to 
Caspian, an attraction that isn't acted on until the 
last few paragraphs. No sex here (only some heated 
kissing) but ohmigosh, it was very well done. A mature 
spin on a children's story while keeping faithful to the 
tone of the originals; now THAT is very hard to do, but 
the author pulled it off.


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