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Date: Sun, 22 Jun 2003 17:10:05 -0400
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The Annex Reviews, 6/22/03
by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com)
Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh 



The Stories:

Chosen Love (Gryvon): M/M, slash, tg

A House in the Woods (Shakes Peer2B): M/F, M/M, BDSM, 
    Fdom, oral, anal, best, toys, pierce, cbt

Dear Bill (Smilodon): M/F, fetish, humor

The Prize is Tight (Bert Prefect): M/F, TV spoof, humor

Horny High School Freshman, Part 1 (D.F.): M/F, teen

Nightmares and Visions (46-50) (Monocle): M/F, bond, 
    impreg, vignette, dark

The Bondage Perils of Supergrrl (expanded version) 
    (FastFist): F/F, bond, superhero, fetish, entombment

Curiosity (Ryric): F/F, bond, emtombment, forniphilia

The Box (Thndrshark): M/F, BDSM, slave, pierce, shave, 
    tort, severe, entombment




Chosen Love [A-] 
Where found: Digital Paper
URL: http://www.geocities.com/khyrs/original/chosenlove.html
Author: Gryvon
Type: M/M, slash, tg

Sometimes slash is profound, sometimes derivative. 
Sometimes, like here, it's just plain... silly.

Airynn is a... well, it's hard to figure out, but he is 
a male, and soon to be given in a goddess-mandated 
marriage: "Airyn knew little of the other man beyond his 
name and profession. Laers Ghelan, Blademaster from the 
Sakano village of Khyden in the Eastern Hills." I don't 
think we're in Kansas anymore, Toto. 

As it turns out Airynn is a faradhim, "a man who turned 
away from the warrior lifestyle to live as a woman" and 
he's therefore as nervous as any blushing bride in a 
prudish pagan society, concerned about his husband's 
violent temper and whether he will be pretty enough to 
please him. The rocky road to wedded bliss proceeds from 
there.

I like slash, and some kinds of trannie fiction, but 
this combo was pretty hard to swallow, even though it's 
not unheard of for some men in primitive societies to 
live as women (e.g., the Sissy Men of the Lakotah.) 
Specifically, I just couldn't swallow a cross-dressing 
man that acts and emotes exactly like a Romance-novel 
heroine, right down to the choreographed blushes and 
sidelong peeks at his tall and handsome "groom." It's 
like the author cribbed a chapter from any one of dozens 
of romantic action/adventure fantasies written for 
female tastes, and switched the gender of the female 
lead. 

Silly, very silly, but if you like slash and like the 
idea of this, go to it... the author wrote it very well, 
and it certainly delivered the goods.




A House in the Woods [A] 
Where posted: ASSM 
When posted: 06/14/03 
Author: Shakes Peer2B
Author email: shakes-peer2b@sbcglobal.net
Type: M/F, M/M, BDSM, Fdom, oral, anal, best, toys, 
pierce, cbt

College students Katy and Josh pull up to the backwoods 
home of a lifestyle dom so he can train Katy in the arts 
of submission. Katy, not having been informed of this by 
her boyfriend, balks, and the dom, sensing an injustice 
(and perhaps a dislike of smug football-player frat 
boys) stuns poor Josh with a taser, making him the 
victim in this classic BDSM scenario, while innocent 
Katy is invited to watch his training.

This was an excellent BDSM kidnap/slave training story, 
with a twist in that the young girl winds up being the 
top, and enjoying it. Poor Josh is taken to the dungeon 
and suspended, caned, pierced, and all that other good 
stuff while being raped at both ends by his honey and 
his captor (and later, two dogs.) It's rare to find a 
bisexual dungeon story, and the dom also gives Katy some 
sage advice:

>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
"You're a very lucky person Katy. You've discovered early 
something that most people never know about themselves.  Of 
those who eventually discover their true sexual nature, most 
are already trapped in lifestyles that prevent them ever 
realizing the joys of that discovery. You're at the beginning 
of your sexual life, and now have the freedom to make choices 
that will allow you have what you need sexually, while 
getting on with the rest of your life. You're lucky in 
another way, too."

She looked at me quizzically.

"Josh is just discovering his own true sexual nature.  It's 
hard on him because it goes against everything he's been 
taught to believe about himself, but by the time you two 
leave here, he will have realized that he NEEDS to be under a 
woman's heel.  If you want him, you can enslave him for as 
long as you like."
>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

I enjoyed the story, but I did think that Josh's 
conversion to the joys of subhood could have been more 
convincing -- I half expected the couple to go their 
separate ways after the ordeal, instead of uniting in 
their new roles. But the "happy" ending did charm, if a 
slave-training story can be said to charm.




Dear Bill [A] 
Where posted: ASSM 
When posted: 06/04/03 
Author: smilodon
Author email: smilodonREMOVE@postmaster.co.uk
Type: M/F, fetish, humor

Steve writes a casual letter to his friend Bill: 
"Thought I'd drop you a line to let you know how things 
are with me. You may remember Jessica, that girl I was 
seeing? I think you met her when last you came down for 
the weekend. Well, the simple truth is, we're not 
together anymore." And why not? A serious of sexual 
escapades gone wrong, each played for laughs: "No, 
things stared to go wrong when she introduced the 
whipped cream and strawberries. She put on about ten 
pounds in a week and I got so drained I swear my cheeks 
were hollow."

This was a short but amusing story by Smilodon, an 
author I've been meaning to read for some time now, but 
whose posted stories were just too long for a reviewer 
with limited time. A nice combo of fetish and low-key 
humor.




The Prize is Tight [B+] 
Where posted: ASSM 
When posted: 06/20/03 
Author: Bert Prefect
Author email: canyonero@excite.com
Type: M/F, TV spoof, humor

This story was a spoof of the old daytime game show 
staple "The Price is Right" with perpetually perky, 
geriatric host Bob Barker. I don't know if it's still on 
TV, but it was a mainstay of the sweltering east coast 
summers of my youth, my precious days of unschooled 
freedom spent slack-jawed in the dark cocoon of air-
conditioned living rooms, forced to watch this dull, 
cheesy show because there was nothing else on (this 
being the BC days -- Before Cable) and going outside was 
like walking into a polluted Turkish sauna. Yes, I have 
no small amount of hate for this show.

The author spoofs it in the obvious way here (you can 
tell by the title) with host Big Porker, and male -- and 
only male -- contestants with manly-man names like Rob, 
Rick, and Ryan who try to guess the price of various 
prostitutes' services. The prizes are sexual access to 
young high school girls, porn stars, and ever-ready 
female anuses lubricated with Anis-all, commercials for 
which are repeated at every station break.

The concept was amusing for the first quarter of the 
story, but then became tedious. Like a feature-length 
movie spawned from a SNL sketch, it went on too long. 
The author's anal sex and schoolgirl obsessions also got 
tedious and made me wonder just what kind of person he 
was. Which you shouldn't when reading a spoofy sex story 
designed to be humorous; you're supposed to be 
concentrating on the laughs.




Horny High School Freshman, Part 1 [D] 
Where posted: ASSM 
When posted: 06/14/03 
Author: D.F.
Author email: storywriterdf@yahoo.com
Type: M/F, teen

Every so often I like to review a story that shows just 
how far we've come from earlier days on the net when the 
quality of writing was often low. Of course, you can 
tell right away by the title that this isn't 
Shakespeare, or even M1ke Hunt. The story is more like 
someone's idea of a story, a someone with very limited 
imagination and experience, and even fewer writing 
skills.  The freshmen of the title are two "well 
devolped young girls" one of which has a pair of 
sentient, domineering buttocks ("She also had a rather 
large ass, which made her wear thongs by seventh Grade") 
and the other a boyfriend whom she services ("John 
ripped his pants off and she started to give him head 
through he boxers." -- Hmm, guess she likes the taste of 
wet lint). The story ends with the immortal kicker: "She 
decied she couldn't wear her thong home, it would be to 
obvious. She toot it off and went commando home."

My suggestion to the author: Toot it off and go commando 
home.




Nightmares and Visions (46-50) [A-] 
Where posted: ASSM 
When posted: 06/12/03 
Author: Monocle
Author email: monocle_o@NOTTHIS.hotmail.com
Type: M/F, bond, impreg, vignette, dark

Monocle has been posting a series of short stories he 
says are "strange, short e-mails from anonymous 
addresses by parties unknown." They're more like 
vignettes, female fantasies in the purest sense of the 
word, as they concentrate on the sensations of the 
female body and feelings of shame, exhibitionism, and 
forbidden pleasure. All are dreamlike, disquieting, yet 
keenly erotic.

In #46 the narrator is attacked by a series of candy-
colored ghost men who ravish her, turning her into a 
ghost like themselves; #48 has a spread-eagled woman on 
a rack who watches as her body causes men to masturbate 
wildly against a glass partition, then is ravished in 
turn by a strange machine that pumps her full of cum. In 
#50, the ravisher is a mirror that sends out silver 
pseudopods. Numbers 47 and 49 were less interesting as 
they didn't contain any novel elements, focusing on pure 
sensation; while well written, they didn't say anything 
new to me. 

Different from the usual sex story, and intriguing 
enough to read more. I wonder how long these unknown 
writers can keep the series going.




The Bondage Perils of Supergrrl (expanded version) [B-] 
Where found: Sweet Chastity
URL: http://www.sweetchastity.com/supergrrl.shtml
Author: Ryric
Type: F/F, bond, superhero, fetish, entombment

Curiosity [B+] 
Where found: Sweet Chastity
URL: http://www.sweetchastity.com/curiosityryric.shtml
Author: Ryric
Type: F/F, bond, emtombment, forniphilia

The Box [A+] 
Where found: Thndrshark
URL: http://www.gwenmedia.com/thndrshark.htm
Author: Thndrshark
Type: M/F, BDSM, slave, pierce, shave, tort, severe, 
entombment


There's a very small subgenre of mummification fiction 
(which in turn is a subgenre of bondage fiction) that, 
for lack of any other term, I'll call entombment fic. 
These stories center on a fetish of being embedded alive 
in substances like plaster of paris or cement, like the 
unfortunate workman who's said to have fallen into the 
wet concrete at Hoover Dam, and remained there to this 
day. 

There aren't many writers working in this genre and they 
tend to be scattered, some on the bondage or 
mummification sites, some on ASFR sites. FastFist wrote 
one of the all-time great entombment stories with his 
Supergirl (now wisely retitled Supergrrl) series which 
featured all sorts of fly-in-amber, or girl-in-amber, 
embedding scenarios. The story has been expanded since I 
reviewed it last but has degenerated badly. Once a 
grand, apocalyptic tale of a supervillain's conquest of 
the world, and the types of revenge she gets on the good 
guys (and the decadent form of governance she installs) 
it's petered out into round-robin series of random 
fetish ficlets, with nary a superheroine to be seen, or 
any sort of overriding plot or conclusion. Too bad.

On the same site, Ryric's "Curiosity" deals with the sad 
story of Chrissie, who lets curiosity get the better of 
her when she peaks over the estate wall of a deranged 
sculptress. The artist sports a tattoo of a cement mixer 
over her pussy -- a spooky touch -- and it turns out her 
concept art consists of capturing female slaves, 
training them, then covering them in concrete... in one 
memorable scene revealing a series of beringed nipples 
and clits protruding from a wall, all that's to be seen 
of her former proteges. In the end, the poor protagonist 
is entombed alive in a pit in the floor. Not much of a 
story, but the concept gives it an interesting Stephen 
King flavor.

Thndershark's "The Box" also deals with entombment but 
in a more conventional BDSM sense. His stories have 
severe torture and degradation themes -- the enslavement 
and bodily modification of young attractive females, who 
most often go along with it out of anomie or a lack of 
alternatives. There's an element of jerkfic (explained 
in the 4/30/03 reviews) in this writer's style as well, 
as the female victims are usually presented as fresh-
faced subs out to fulfill their wildest fantasies, only 
to get more than they bargained for when those fantasies 
become real. In this case the sub has asked to be 
shaved, pierced, bound into a painful hogtie, then 
buried alive in a steel box that is filled with cement. 
I could almost imagine the writer smirking as he writes 
passages like:

>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
"Well, Jane, the cement is pretty much solid now," I 
said to the camera again, as I pressed against the solid 
mass in the box. "You're probably feeling the weight of 
all the stuff on you, and maybe even panicking a bit 
because you find yourself absolutely immobile. Well 
guess what? That's how you'll be forever now."
>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

The box is then buried again in a pit of concrete, only 
the slave's feeding and waste elimination tubes 
connecting her to the outside world. She's to be 
maintained for a while (the other female slave gleefully 
administering electrical tortures via remote control) 
but eventually, in the ultimate act of indifference,

>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
The truth of the matter was one day we would all tire of 
her. The time would come when, as she had requested long 
ago, her pussy, ass,  urethra, and stomach would be 
filled with cement as well, sealing her completely in 
her tiny coffin, beneath the ton of concrete that now
rested above her.
>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

This jerkfic tone was not very morally appealing to me 
as a person, in fact it right angered me, but I do admit 
it fit in well with the story's theme of sexual horror 
and excess, if it wasn't as two-dimensional and likeable 
as Toran's and Jenny's similar entombment fic "Do You 
Want to Continue?" It's also the shortest of this 
author's stories, and the most succinct; which makes it 
the best of the bunch, as its particular thrills aren't 
belabored -- they're short and sharp.

An A+ for going way, way out; if you like sexual horror, 
give this a read.

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