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The Annex Reviews, 9/29/02
by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com)
Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh 


In this week's reviews I'm critiquing stories written for the ASSM 
September Sapphic Erotic Festival challenge. These F/F sex stories were 
posted to the ASSM newsgroup in four different categories: poetry, a last 
line challenge, a first time sex story, and a story concerning the any or 
all of the Greek muses. All the entries can be read at 
http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/sapphic/www/. By the timing of the festival, it seems 
Sappho is a Virgo. What a coincidence! So am I.

I don't usually preface these reviews with my commentary, preferring 
to do so in the body of the reviews themselves. But it has recently come 
to my attention that Fanfiction.net, the subject of my Fanfic Nation I 
website review, has recently pulled all NC-17 content from its website, 
rendering, I guess, most of my review pretty useless. To refresh your 
minds a little, Fanfiction.net is the monster post-it-yourself story site 
catering to the fanfic community... at an estimated half million stories 
strong, it was one of the largest story sites, erotic or general, anywhere 
on the net. In retrospect it's easy to see why the site's creator got 
squeamish about the adult content: too many juveniles were posting and 
reading there, many of them intent on imitating more mature writers' 
work. As I said in my review the results were often delightful, but there 
was also a lot (and I mean A LOT) of poorly written dreck. There has 
been lively debate about it on various newsgroups; do a Google search if 
you're interested. A petition to keep the fics online may be seen and 
signed at this site 
(http://www.petitiononline.com/keepnc17/petition.html) but I doubt 
it'll do much good. In this world, lawyers and liability reigns. (I wonder 
if Fanfiction.net's creator really knew what he was getting into when 
he created the site.)

I am disappointed, myself, as the site introduced me to a lot of good 
authors I wouldn't have otherwise discovered; but as for the 
"unfairness" of it all, I believe that if writers believe in their work and 
are motivated they will seek out alternate venues, such as  the 
sympathetic Fandominion.net, as well as Yaoi no Hentais (http://vidrio-
negro.net/yaoi) and the Femgeeks Real Person Slash website 
(http://www.femgeeks.net/rs-x), all good sites to get your bandslash, 
yaoi, and anime kicks.



The stories:

Punished for My Sins (Suzy Suburbanite): F/F first, interr, BDSM,    
    humil, viol
The Bra That Got Away (Faibhar): F/F, interr, D/s
An Open-minded Discussion (J. Darksong): F/F, mc, first
Hilary's Muse (Kelly Adams) F/F, teen, first




Punished for My Sins [A-]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 9/5/02
Author: Suzy Surburbanite
Author address: suzy999999@yahoo.com
Type: F/F first, interr, BDSM, humil, viol

Poor Maureen is a Naval conscript stationed in Nowheresville, Canada, 
thousands of miles from her boyfriend and the cock she knows and 
loves. Lonely, oversexed, and aggressively heterosexual, she has nightly 
"cum sessions" with her vibrator and engages in phone sex to keep the 
fires of passion strong. But then she meets Shiandra ("a very big black 
woman: big butt, big boobs, big legs...the woman was big, not fat, but 
very big") a fellow soldier who turns out to be a lesbian, and who comes 
on to her persistently:

_______________________________________________________________

"Maureen baby, I hear you every night buzzing away with your toy. 
Now why would you want to do that when my lips can turn you inside 
out and make your tight, white, pussy cum and cum?  C'mon baby, 
nobody will know. It'll be our little secret.  Let me suck on your big 
titties and tight pussy.  No one will ever know and we can both get what 
we need."

I was very shocked to say the least, 'Lisa was right after all,' I realized.

"Shi, I'm not gay," I tried to explain.

"I didn't say you were baby.  I'm not asking you to suck my twat.  I just 
want to taste your pretty white pussy.  Nobody will ever know baby.  All 
the white girls say I do it best baby.  It'll be just between you and me."
_______________________________________________________________

This is all very amusing, until she gives into temptation, and Shiandra 
winds up mopping the floor with her in butch-femme D/s sessions that 
include canings, BDSM, and verbal and sexual humiliation, mostly 
centering on how easily a big black "Daddy" can dominate a "stupid 
white pussy." The story goes that far and then farther, as the heroine 
decides she enjoys the abuse.

Whether you like this or not is up to you; but for what it was, it was an 
intense, engaging read. I finished it to the very end, though I wasn't 
comfortable with the violence or racial aspects of the story -- I found 
the horny female soldier-in-the-boonies more interesting, and frankly 
more believable, as it was never fully explained exactly why the 
heroine decided to give in to Shiandra's persistence, especially as she 
kept insisted she wasn't that attracted. On the other hand, the aspects of 
her submission were handled well: "I needed the punishment--the pain 
and the hurt--in order to enjoy the pleasure without guilt.  I needed her 
degradation and defilement to reinforce her dominance over me.  My 
will was not my own, but a plaything for this woman who is, at once, the 
most sensual, sexual lover I've ever encountered and within the same 
breath, the most vicious and cruel personality I would ever dare meet." 
The submissions leads her, later, to accept even hospitalization and a 
demeaning gang-rape pregnancy from her lover; this I questioned, as 
the heroine seemed to prefer being punished than to come to terms with 
her attraction to females. But up to then, it was a worthy ride.



The Bra that Got Away [A+]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 9/7/02
Author: Faibhar
Author address: faibhar@yahoo.com
Type: F/F, interr, D/s

This story was one those in the 'last line' Sapphic Festival category. Mel 
and Jennifer are two young San Francisco lesbians who are into risky 
sex, and in this case risky means gaining access to a broadcast tower on 
the edge of town and having sex at its apex in the wind and the sun. Mel 
is the tough, leather-clad butch (she rides a motorcycle) and Jennifer 
the whimpering femme, and the sex, though mutual at first, takes a D/s 
turn when they get to the top:

________________________________________________________________

    Hungrily the two kissed inside the elevator high above the fog until 
Mel at last broke away.  She knelt to one knee and swung her small 
knapsack off of her shoulder as Jennifer panted and sat bemusedly with 
her back against one corner of the cramp compartment.  The new girl's 
blue eyes widened as she watched her mocha-skinned companion busily 
begin to remove things from the knapsack.

   Mel looked back at Jennifer.  Maybe this girl from the sticks knew 
more than she had suspected.  There was one way to find out.  "Take off 
your parka."

   The baby's sweatshirt hid many charms Mel thought as she watched 
Jennifer reluctantly shed what warmth her coat offered.  Mel pointedly 
glared down at the thin gym shorts riding high above the long pale 
legs.  "Those too."

   Jennifer started to protest when Mel swung her arm.  The blow 
knocked a stunned Jennifer back into the corner.  Long thin fingers 
covered a cheek that already was blossoming red.  Mel leaned toward 
her and her victim cowered more.

    Mel grabbed a shock of the raven hair and yanked its owner close to 
her face.  She savaged the plump lips until she felt them again relax.  
Satisfied, she let the hair go and went back to her bag.  "You heard me.  
Drop 'em."
_______________________________________________________________

As Mel is black and Jennifer white, the roughness had stereotypical 
racial overtones of dominance similar to those evinced by the previous 
story, and it made me uncomfortable. (Are only black dykes truly 
butch? And are they butch only as long as the non-minority dykes -- 
the white ones -- allow it?) Interesting questions, these. But the writing 
here was excellent, and the way the last line was worked in was truly 
clever. 




An Open-minded Discussion [A]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 9/7/02
Author: Jonothon Darksong
Author address: jdarksong@yahoo.com
Type: F/F, mc, first

Straight Beth has never entertained the possibility that she might be 
gay, even as she accepts an invitation from Sharon, an openly gay co-
worker, for a night out in a club. It turns out to be a lesbian club, and 
Sharon's intentions soon becoming clear: she uses her voice and rather 
confusing sense of logic to bring Beth around to her way of thinking in 
a scene that, while it wasn't tagged as mind control, was as hypnotic as 
you could get in a sex story:

_______________________________________________________________

My head seemed to throb with her words, and the realization that I was 
on the verge of truly understanding myself. I stared deeper into those 
deep green eyes, seeking the answers Sharon was only too happy to 
supply.

"I think what a part of you, way down deep, knew all along what it is 
you sought. You want more than just sex, Beth. Sex is only physical 
pleasure." Her hand slid under the table, caressing my silk encased leg, 
sending goose bumps across my flesh. "What you've been seeking, the 
thing you've been missing, Beth, is more spiritual in nature." Her hand 
circled my thigh, causing me to whimper, making my sex begin to 
moisten. "You seek someone who can fill you with pleasure, joy, 
happiness, contentment, and security all at once. You want someone 
who can fill that void in your life, fill you to the brim, and beyond, until 
the sheer pleasure within is overflowing."

_______________________________________________________________

She winds up submitting, of course. Couldn't you guess?

Though not categorized as mind control, this was definitely mind 
control; the author has a knack for it, and should write some longer 
fantasies in the same vein. This author has also written other stories in 
different categories for the festival which are worth checking out.



Hilary's Muse [A]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 9/7/02
Author: Kelly Adams
Author address: kelly_h_adams@hotmail.com
Type: F/F, interr, D/s

One co-ed prepares another to seduce her girlfriend in this story, and 
the seduction entails dressing up as a muse -- Erato, the muse of 
Romantic poetry, which I guess includes erotic poetry as well:

_______________________________________________________________

"Suckle on my sweet bosom," Jo told Hilary.

Hilary giggled.

"What?" Jo asked sharply.

"You said 'bosom,'" Hilary said.

"I'm trying to get into the spirit of things."

"But I don't think you're chesty enough to have a 'bosom,'" Hilary 
explained.

Jo gave Hilary's ass a short spank. "Just shut up and suck my tits then."

"Okay." Hilary moved her mouth down to Jo's breasts and began to
lick her nipples. Jo felt her arousal grow as Hilary's tongue
circled her sensitive nubs.
_______________________________________________________________

The story was short, but that one section was very funny, dealing as it 
does with a neo-Classical way of speaking (as freshmen who first 
encounter Classic Lit 101 might parody it) as well as the Lesbos/Sappho 
aspect (her island was a sort of school for young girls, I gather) and 
combined with 'Greek' aspect of collegiate life, it all fit very neatly 
together. Nice, very nice.


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