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Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} Peaches and Cream Reviews: #19
Date: Tue, 20 Aug 2002 16:10:05 -0400
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Hi! We're Peaches & Cream. We're just two ordinary Joes who like
reading and romance. Recently, there was a Summer Solstice Romance
Festival on ASSM, and it caught our attention. We started discussing
the stories and our reviews were born. Our format is simple: one of us
starts the review, the other chimes in, and then the starter finishes
it off. Because this is all about romance, we'll be scoring with 0-5
kisses. We're changing our format to include more than one story per
issue. There is a website devoted to the festival where you can find
all the stories we will review. 

http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Rui_Favorites/www/RomFest

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Peaches & Cream Reviews: #19

Romance should never begin with sentiment. It should begin with
science and end with a settlement.
--Oscar Wilde (1854-1900), Anglo-Irish playwright, author.

Stories to be reviewed:

Lingerie An Instant Messenger Chat 
     by Father Ignatius and Selena  Jardine 
Love Tree (a romance through the eyes of Cercis Siliquastrum) 
     by Musenik 
Loving April in Summer: A Wagga Wagga Story 
     by Alessia Gerini 
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Lingerie An Instant Messenger Chat by Father Ignatius and Selena
Jardine
(MF rom)
http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2002/36898

***

Cream:

This is an extremely entertaining conversation between Lisa and Mark
about lingerie, seduction, and sex.  It's fun and it's clever and
maybe it has some useful romantic tips for the would-be lover.  I
think I've learned some things.  But I do think it goes on a little
too long.  The real charm is the chemistry (or potential) between
these people. We need to see them connect.  The difficulty they have
making that full connection may very well be the underlying point of
this story, but to a degree it's also its undoing. Cool paradox.

Oh, of all the stories we've done so far, this has my favorite line:

>Only one paintbrush and _I'm_ driving it.


4.5 kisses.

***

Peaches:

I like the banter between this couple. Lisa tries to keep things
light, but Mark's description of seduction and sex finally wear her
down. The how-to lesson should be required reading for anyone
attempting cunnilingus.

However, I agree, Cream. It goes on a shade too long. The teasing got
me hot & bothered, but by the time we were at the end, I was wondering
when it would be over. If it had stopped at hot & bothered, I would
have given this story 5 full kisses. As it is, I have to subtract 0.5
for going beyond the call of duty and nearly missing the climax.

4.5 kisses

***

Cream:  

Ideal sex teases just long enough. Ditto for idea sex fiction.  That
this story "lingers too long" might be making another point--I kind of
like the irony.

***

Peaches: 4.5 kisses
Cream: 4.5 kisses
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Love Tree (a romance through the eyes of Cercis Siliquastrum) by
Musenik
(FM rom, sex)
http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2002/36957

***

Peaches:

A story told through the eyes of a tree, but not just any tree. It's a
tree that has been around a long time, and been witness to many
things.

The tree tells us how a woman struggles to receive the gift of life,
literally, from her injured husband. It's an unusual tale. The imagery
is very vivid:

>Passions wrestled blood away from his wounds.

The language used takes you back to a different era, one from long
ago. Language that maybe a tree would use. It's creatively done.
Especially in the venue of Romance through the eyes of...

4.0 kisses

***

Cream:

I have some difficulties connecting the introduction and ending to the
larger middle of this story.  The middle seems where it's at, but the
tree fades into the background. Because of the beginning, I keep
thinking that the tree should be more than an observer. Nothing says
narrators must be characters in their stories; the end here, however,
suggests that the narrator is a character--luckily (or perhaps
unluckily) not one made into a ship or a flight of arrows or firewood
for pagan feasts.  I agree that the language is apt, the idea clever
and generally well executed.

4 solid kisses.

***

Peaches:

The tree for me is a character. A character that sees everything, and
has to live with everything he has seen. Not an easy task. Though,
keeping in character, the tree doesn't show any emotion, it just tells
us what it's witnessed. I can't help thinking about the weeping willow
tree in Disney's "Pocahontas", or the Apple trees in "Wizard of Oz."
Giving a tree a personality can make it cartoonish. This story had me
imagining a huge old oak or elm tree, thinking about the majesty of
nature, and the wisdom it could share..

***

Peaches: 4 kisses
Cream: 4 kisses
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Loving April In Summer: A Wagga Wagga Story by Alessia Gerini
(FF rom)
http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2002/36959

*** 

Cream:

A woman is given another woman to be her slave for a day.  We follow
the two women to a shopping mall and then to a park where they make
love.


>My panties soon became saturated as my groins ached for her tongue.  Quickly looking 
>around I could see nobody looking although I was almost beyond caring I hitched up 
>my skirt and sat on her face. Within seconds she had nuzzled my panties to one side and 
>was taking into her mouth my drenched pussy lips tonguing them wildly. 


The main tension in the story is getting to this point--it's very much
like a seduction. We have attractive characters, good enough plot, a
romantic setting, and hot sex--the biggest problem is that the writing
is rather rough, amateurish.  And yet the writing doesn't really get
in the way of us following the story or enjoying the scenes. It has
somewhat the feel of reading a private journal.  The ending is
wishy-washy. Lop off the last paragraph, and I think I'd give this
story a full extra kiss.

2.75 kisses.

***

Peaches:

I couldn't get interested in this story. The plot sounds interesting
when you try to sum it up: 2 female submissives being ordered together
by their mistresses. And there are moments of titillation:

>I saw her looking out the window realizing as I did that she was exposing herself but 
>she seemed to enjoy showing herself although there probably were only a few people 
>returning from Christmas shopping in town. In her demeanour there was the nervous 
>tension of getting 'caught' in the window blatantly in her nakedness.

But mostly, my attention lagged. The sex was nice in a female-female
sort of way, but I wanted something to dazzle me. And it never did.
The image at the end was vivid, but by then I was too unfocused to
enjoy it. 

2.5 kisses

***


Cream:

When the rest of the story has faded away, I think I will still have
good feelings about the overall tone as well as those nice moments:
changing in front of the window, sex in the park.  I thought the final
image, or what should have been the final image, was dazzling.  For
romance it's hard to beat a lover who becomes the sunset:

>Her face was a picture, flushed pink and wet from my honey dew. Her hair dishevelled. 
>Her breasts pink and heaving. Her smile a mile wide. Her gaze caring and loving. ... I 
>could see her pussy, its lips glistening in the last lights of a beautiful sunset.

***

Peaches: 2.5 kisses
Cream: 2.75 kisses

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