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Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} Sigh Gone in 68 Seconds' RomFest by the Split-DiscipleN
Date: Sun,  4 Aug 2002 23:10:02 -0400
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WARNING: writing the sour Uncle Mudgeon is a lot more fun than sweet 
Aunt Courage. So please apply filters against his brow-beating style.


Last night, I went to bed reading another romance festival submission. I 
think the pipes in the building were talking to each other all night 
long. I had the strangest dream.


Aunt Courage Whips Uncle Mudgeon

Do be still, he's trying to sleep.

Who wouldn't? After reading an FF story titled 'Remembering Saigon in 
the Summer of '68'. Oh yeah, that'll get a lot of play with our sell-out 
nation of Guerrophiliacs. (That's WAR LOVERS to any children of 
creationists out there.) Vietnam is like an alcoholic's lingering 
hang-over that drives her back to drink. The protesters who changed 
America thirty years ago changed it right back into a nationalistic 
bastion of Faci...

Dearest, we're her to review the story not our democratic way of life.

We'll this story should bring nightmares to the few peacemongers lurking 
here, encoding their revolutionary plans into porno pics and stories in 
order to escape homeland security. (smart move, <chortle>) The story's 
about two pre-sexual revolution lesbians in the military during the war. 
Get it? LOVE from WAR.

If I have to get the switch to keep you on topic tonight, honey, I will. 
This is a wonderful story that contrasts forbidden lesbian love and 
today's much more tolerant atmosphere.I was swept along by it's clean 
prose and visceral description. The main character finds herself 
reminiscing about a past love as she and her current lover are returning 
from their vacation.

I don't know what you mean by clean prose, but I spotted a weak 
redundancy, an overused passive verb, and a comma splice in the first 
few paragraphs.

The story flowed along, and it's few technical flaws were never 
distracting enough to bother casual readers. I think it's a shame that 
so many good writers punish themselves terribly when they discover a few 
techincal errors after posting their hard work.

Yeah, we're SO lucky to have Mr. Self-Forgivness as our Lord and 
Master.Talk about distractions. Leave it to a lesbian to use a phallic 
metaphor to introduce the love interest. {'Terry Jane Lawton', I said 
out loud to myself as I popped the cap off and stuffed the nozzle in.}

I thought the characters and settings were very realistic. I actually 
believe this story happened to the author. It's a delightful work, and I 
was sucked into it's world.

<choke> Believe what you want, but the sex was nearly non-existant. Who 
was the author writing this for, the Ladie's Home Erotica? We get a 
quick finger-fuck and some second mention of {To avoid detection, we 
would meet after work at the fuel point and go back to my quarters for 
some of the wettest sex that I have ever had.} The only wet I got, 
reading this story, was from being bored to tears. At least it was over 
quickly. The author should have spent more effort on the FF. Not that 
I'm a girl on girl fetishist by any standard, but if that's what they 
got, FLAUNT IT! I'm reading for the heat on this newsgroup. Also, it 
could have used a lot more description of the main character's 
trepidations, and the love interest's boldness. Sgt. Dyke seducing 
Officer Fem sounds damn hot to me, but it's power inversion potential 
was wasted in a couple quick lines.

This was a love story, my love, a whiff of memory, romance, and 
nostalgia, just the right length to stop for a fill up. It's about how 
love changes and never changes.

Meanwhile the nation changes from facist regime supporting to facist 
regime invading, but only those facist regimes who make our facist 
leader look bad.

[LASH!] My dearest darling hypocrite, WHO's acting like a nationalist? 
Remember usenet is a WORLD wide communication system.And here you go on 
and on about American concerns. [LASH!]

I'm sorry mommie.


Conclusion: 3 dildos. (out of 4)

DN

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