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Date: Sun, 21 Jul 2002 22:10:03 -0400
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The Annex Reviews, 7/20/02
by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com)
Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh 




The stories:

Betsy's Finest Hour (Alexis Siefert): M/F rom

The Machine (Brian): F spank, machine

Titos' Adventures (Paladin): M/M, fantasy

Paces (Trilby Else) : F/F, mind control, slave

Callback (Trilby Else): F/F, mind control, slave

Best of Show (Norm DePloom): F, D/s, exhib




Betsy's Finest Hour [A]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 7/14/02
Author: Alexis Siefert
Author address: ealexissiefert@yahoo.com
Type: M/F, rom

Betsy is a young homeless woman who works in an all-night diner and lives
out of a locker at a bus station.  When she's attacked by three thugs one
night a thin, nondescript man named Howard comes to her rescue, and she
takes him back to the diner for some coffee.  The two become acquainted.

   I didn't think this story was too promising at first -- it began in a
purple-prose way too much like a bad romance novel, with the girl tripping,
and being rescued in the nick of time by the alpha male -- but when the two
protagonists reveal themselves as real people with real problems, things
picked up.  They begin to dance to the diner's big-band radio station,
their desire growing in an honest, heartfelt, well, romantic, way: 

__________________________________________________________________

Apparently I wasn't the only one. Because of the difference in
our heights, his crotch was at the bottom of my ribcage and I
could feel a distinctive hardening under his jeans. I couldn't
help myself. I held tighter against him and I could feel him
pulse beneath the fabric.

His arms clenched around me, grinding me against his body. My
nipples, hard from the friction of his jacket, were crushed under
the pressure. The air around us was suddenly thick with desire
and tension and unspoken promise, and I found myself having
difficulty breathing.

__________________________________________________________________

Their attraction grows...  but fate intervenes when they stop for a quickie
in an alley.  I'm not going to spoil it for you, but I didn't see it
coming, and it ties back in with the title of the story.  Very neatly, in
fact.  You might have a tear in your eye.  

So read this one, but I do recommend that the writer watch the length of
her "setup" for bringing two characters together, as the second half of the
story was more interesting than the first.  



The Machine [B+]
Where posted: SSSB
When posted: 7/12/02
Author: Brian
Author address: switchmaybe@blueyonder.co.uk
Type: F spanking

Young Sarah has broken up with her boyfriend and is feeling down, so when 
she sees a fortune telling booth outside Toys R Us -- a device common in the 
United Kingdom I guess, and similar to the b&w photo taking booths we have 
here in the US -- she decides to have her fortune told to cheer herself up. 
Surprisingly she is not too phased when the machine tells her: "This machine 
uses a revolutionary new process for reading your future, and to function
to the greatest accuracy, it needs the customer's bottom to be bare.  If
you do not want total accuracy, then you can remain clothed, otherwise,
remove the garments from your lower body, and place your bare buttocks on
the seat, and fasten the waist and thigh straps." A spanking follows, which
the author intends as penance for her argument with her boyfriend.  

This was an original concept, but could have been done better; the
protagonist goes along with it way too easily.  I mean, a fortune telling
machine that reads your *butt?* Who's gonna fall for that?  



Titos' Adventures [A-]
Where found: Tales from the Paladin
URL: http://members.aol.com/Nesrie/Titos.html
Author: Paladin
Type: M/M semicons, fantasy

I found these stories (Life as a Warlord, In a Darkened Land, Ryn in
Captivity, A Man's Tribe) on the author's website.  They are the first four
chapters of the much longer "Titos' Adventures" series about the same
character.  

Titos (not Tito) is a barbarian mercenary in the Conan or Fafhrd mode, with 
sexual appetites he is unashamed about. While employed as a captain under the 
warlord Rath he captures a pretty elf prince named Ryn who is there on a 
diplomatic mission, and semi-rapes him (with the elf's consent; this is not a 
brutalization tale.) Realizing later that his boss is sure to abuse the
prisoner, Titos deserts the dark armies and takes Ryn with him, selling him
later into whoredom with a dwarf friend of his: "60/40 of profits only. 
Very high prices and few customers but well worth the rate.  No more than
one a night and no rough stuff.  If the guy looks bad, don't sell." If all
this makes him sound mercenary, he is, but he also has a moral code of his
own, made apparent when the rest of the stories are read...  the brothel
was his way of keeping Ryn protected while in enemy territory.  Well, his
heart's in the right place, at least: 

__________________________________________________________________

The dwarf nodded. "Agreed, I'll take good care of him lad." 

Titos nodded and then looked at Ryn.  He had been absolutely still and
quiet as they talked about him.  The dwarf took his leave promising fresh
supplies on his horse.  Titos slowly removed the gag and waited.  But the
prince said nothing, so Titos spoke first.  "He means it.  You'll be well
taken care.  Trohan takes care of all his employees." 

Still the elf said nothing. 

Titos sighed best leave now.  But first.  Firmly he grabbed Ryn's chin and
turned him towards him.  Drawing him into his fierce and passionate kiss,
again Ryn responded instantly kissing back with deep need, but Titos
withdrew.  

The warrior paused as he walked out the door. "Don't forget me. I will 
return."

Behind him he heard the sweet voice whisper. "Never shall I ever forget... 
never could I."
__________________________________________________________________

Awww.

Later adventures deal with the emotional anst generated by the first two
stories as Ryn deals with an insistent orc at the brothel and Titos meets a
virginal young priest who takes him to a desert tribe with strange customs.
The writing was surprisingly sensitive and eloquent for the Howardesque
subject matter (the writer also does slash in the Highlander and anime
fandoms, so I'd guess she is female) with the captured prince scenario
reading more yaoi than hack n' slash.  

These stories weren't as polished as some of the gay fantasy fiction I've
read (they were rife with spelling errors, for one thing) but they had a
friendly, charming tone; I could tell the author invested extensively in
the characters, which gives a piece of fiction a certain 'magic' even if it
is rough and full of plot holes.  I was sufficiently involved to return to
the site and read on to see how things turned out, the real proof of the
pudding for any writer on the net.  



Paces [A+]
Callback [A+]
Where found: The Mind Control Story Archive
URL: http://mcstories.com/Authors/trilby-else.html
Author: Trilby Else
Type: F/F mind control, slave

The mind control genre of sex stories offers some of the best net reading
around.  And it's not just for those into this fetish or even sex...  for
character development and psychological depth, a good MC story can't be
beat.  

Not surprisingly, most of the better authors are female.  Trilby Else came
to my attention in 2000 with the excellently written rape story "Fighting
Words" which I praised for its sensual yet disturbing examination of the
consequences of rape.  Since then, she's written a whole stories of F/F
mind control stories that are even more fantastic in premise.  In contrast
to "Fighting Words," which was firmly rooted in the real world, her more
recent stories veer off into alternate world science fiction of the type
commonly utilized by writers of slave fiction...  plausible near-future
scenarios where sinister activities are accepted or go on unimpeded,
allowing the writer's imagination full rein.  

In "Paces," for example, attractive female criminals are enslaved and
brainwashed into being ponygirls or 'bitches' -- slavish girldogs who
faithfully service their mistresses in bed and out, with the tacit approval
of straight society.  This concept -- a high one in movie terms -- provides
a frame for a story told from one bitch's point of view, as her
owner-mistress trains both her and her companion and copes with problems
caused by a third bitch who is not being so readily assimilated.  Some of
the most compelling parts were those where the bitches are being 'walked'
in the park by their owner-mistress, naked and on leads: 

__________________________________________________________________

"Capella, come." Capella followed Mistress as She took Altair to the tree.
Capella watched the blonde bitch squat, blushing a bit in embarrassment
under her erotically-planed cheekbones--she wasn't too new to be
housebroken, but Mistress was still training her--as she waited for
permission.  

"Yes, Altair.  Now." At the command she tensed and relaxed, and they
listened to her stream hit the moist earth.  

When the last of it petered out, Mistress murmured "Good girl!" and Altair
smiled up at Her uncertainly.  

"Stay, girl. Capella, clean."

Capella dropped to her knees, suddenly below the other bitch's eye level.
She leaned forward and breathed onto the other's belly before balancing and
leaning further, between her thighs.  Delicately she licked the sour piss
that beaded around Altair's smooth cleft, and worked her tongue into it,
tasting the other bitch's flavor gradually strengthen over the sourness. 
As she heard Altair start to moan, stimulated beyond her training, Capella
slowed down, and when the other's thighs weakly tried to trap her head her
own training drew her away to kneel again, facing the other bitch.  

Holding Altair's eyes, she slowly licked her lips, and smiled as warmly as
she could.  It was Mistress' alone to praise and reward Altair, if She
chose, for being so good on her first walk out on a leash, but Capella
liked the other bitch and wanted to help her obey and earn Mistress'
praise. 

__________________________________________________________________

Thoughout the story the writer keeps in the hypnotized victim's POV so that
she never wonders why she's a bitch, and how and when these changes to
society happened.  She overhears the transitory conversations but she
doesn't understand them, though the reader does...  letting us, but not
her, piece together the plot.  This plot device is masterfully handled and
a real accomplishment -- not just for a mind control sex story, but for any
sort of story.  

"Callback" was slightly more complicated, again set in a near-future
universe where females are kidnapped, reprogrammed in mind-control pods,
and set to work as playtoys and pussylickers for an all-female organization
that is never named.  The twist comes when some of the victims are yanked
out of the process halfway through the process and must deal with not only
the physical rigors of escape but their feelings of disorientation at being
left amnesiac, horny, and half-brainwashed in alarming ways.  The author
handles both with skill as the escapees bond as a unit and make their way
through the woods, the protagonist of the story finding she's becoming
uncomfortably infatuated with the rescue team's surviving member, who is
female.  All in all the psychological twists and turns were very well done
and will keep you reading.  There's a shocking ending you'll never see
coming, but I warn you, it's not happy.  

Very well done, and recommended.



Best of Show [A-]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted:  7/13/02
Author: Norm DePloom
Author address: normdeploom@hotmail.com
Author website: http://www.asstr-mirror.org/ftp/pub/Authors/normdeploom/
Type: F, D/s, exhib

I chose this story to contrast with the girldog tale "Paces" above. With some 
more fleshing out and some introduction of mind control techniques, it could 
have been written by the same author.

Girl (she has no other name) is leashed and trotted around in an arena
setting reminescent of a dog show, but one for submissive females rather
than pets.  ("The judge walked slowly around Girl, stopping to place a hand
firmly on her buttock then move the hand down the back of her thigh,
squeezing gently to check her muscle tone.  Walking back around to Girl's
front the judge thoroughly examined her breasts and nipples to confirm that
no surgical procedures had been used to enhance their appearance.") Like
the stories above, this state of affairs was never explained.  

Curious and curiouser, as a writer friend of mine would say.  But for a D/s
vignette, it was pretty hot, if not exactly original.  I'm sure someone has
done it, somewhere, before.  How could they not?  

I guess Girldog fiction is officially a new genre of sex story now.

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