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Date: Fri, 31 May 2002 08:10:02 -0400
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The Annex Reviews, 5/30/02
by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com)
Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh 


The stories:

Who Wants to Rule the World (Farleven): M/F, F/F, mc, SF, slave

The Paramour Island Club Parts 1 and 2 (Goblin King): F/f, slave, minor

Liquidity (Adrian Hunter): Bond, SF, humor

Website Review: Couture


Who Wants to Rule the World, Part 1 [A-]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 5/18/02
Author: Farleven
Author Address: farleven@yahoo.com
Author Website: http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/farleven/www/

My reviews of slave fic continue in this story and the two others that 
follow. 

 A mysterious man trails two fresh young college coeds on a shopping 
trip. Feigning a fall, he injects one, then the other, with nanobyte 
machines that take over their minds. When they wake up from strange 
dreams later that night they find they have already been transported to 
the Master's lair, where first one, then the other, go into a lustful 
frenzy and have unbridled yet rather conventional sex with him. We 
learn later their fate is to be turned into sex slaves for sale to the 
highest bidder, their bodies transformed into porn-star perfection:

>>>[His] eyes were instantly drawn to  her chest.  Two perfect orbs jutted 
out from her chest, each a precise  half-sphere slightly larger than a 
grapefruit and topped with a taught nipple rising precisely from the 
center.  Even as she writhed wildly on  her back, her breasts neither 
sagged or bounced, but somehow still  looked perfectly natural.  Her 
entire body was completely hairless,  aside from a mane of long brown 
hair that flowed almost to her waist.   The girl's pussy was the last thing 
Marcus took note of, and it too was  unlike anything he'd seen.  Her 
outer lips were completely naked, and  much larger than normal.  The 
true oddity was her clit, it rose from  the top of her slit as a huge bulb, 
and Marcus could imagine just how  sensitive it was from the girl's 
quaking body.<<<<

Surprisingly, neither coed is too upset at this turn of events. With a bod 
like that, I might not be too upset either. The chapter ends with two 
investigators from the Special Affairs Bureau ("the last refuge for law 
enforcement") preparing to dive into the case; since one of them is a 
beautiful bisexual woman, you can bet your bippy she's going to get the 
same treatment in some later chapter. (The complete version of this 
story is available on the author's website.)

This was a workmanlike mind control story that didn't break any new 
ground, but what it did, it did very well. The sex scenes were a definite 
turn-on, and the mingled arousal/shame of the two girls was excellently 
and sensitively handled. I question, though, why coeds in these stories 
always seem to be fixated on shopping for 'hot' clothing at the local 
boutique. Twenty-year-old women can be very stupid and shallow (as 
anyone who's watched TRL can attest) but c'mon, let's have them think 
about their classes or world hunger once in a while. The character of 
the Master was likewise shortchanged -- he was never really described, 
so we don't know why he inspires such lust. 

On the other hand, for a story like this, perhaps character development 
isn't so important... it's the naughty themes and situations that stoke the 
fire. And for that any puppets will suffice.



The Paramour Island Club, Parts 1 and 2 [B]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 5/23/02
Author: Goblin King
Author Address: beyondthelaberynth@yahoo.com

Fourteen-year-old Julie runs away from home to attend a cheerleading 
camp in Southwest Texas and winds up in a heap o' trouble; the camp is a 
front run by Brad and Joanna, a couple with a taste for sweet young 
things, whom they kidnap and ship to their island resort to serve as 
underage sex slaves. Joanna tries the kid out herself, her gentle 
lovemaking peppered by platitudes like "Sex is a beautiful and exciting 
thing, and that it can be very enjoyable" and "Masturbation is a normal, 
natural part of your sexuality." I guess being a sex slave isn't as bad as 
it's been made out to be.

This was an interesting idea (and unfortunately, one that the writer or 
poster may be busted for, under internet child porn laws) but, as with 
the story above, the character of the girl was more than a little cliched. 
To begin with, what teen would defy her parents and run away from 
home to attend a (square) cheerleading camp? These days she'd be more 
likely to split to follow the Blink182 tour. Also problematic was sexual 
vocabulary that switched from the naive "My date for the eighth grade 
dance played with my boobies" to the sophisticated "I want you to put 
your fingers back into my pussy and fuck me with them until I cum" 
which is the sort of phrase most young teens wouldn't know unless 
they're regular consumers of explicit commercial porn. 

In sum, could have been better.



Liquidity [A]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 5/16/02
Author: Adrian Hunter
Author Address: adrian (underscore) hunter (at) hotmail (dot) com
Author Website: http://www.adrianhunter.com

A pair of insectoid aliens slumming on Earth crashes "a fantasy-
fulfillment ritual that was traditionally held between the autumn 
equinox and the winter solstice" -- otherwise known as Halloween -- in 
search of human females for their nefarious plans. Such plans include 
keeping the females for their 'silk' which we later understand to be 
their vaginal secretions, and which the aliens consider a euphoric 
drug. The two are amused by one partygoer's provocative dress:

>>>>His sensors reported she was clothed from head to toe in the 
processed mammal hides known in the region's language as "leather,"  
adorned with metal containment devices that served as both decoration 
and function; all sorts of hooks and clasps and buckles and padlocks 
keeping the material pressed close to her body. Switching to analog 
vision, he noted her costume was representative of the peculiar style 
called "bondage"  that he and Steev had examined in great detail on the 
global network.<<<<

The aliens decide she is to be their next victim, in part because she has 
been packaged for transport so neatly.

This story was humorous, slightly squicky, and definately needed a 
second reading to catch all the jokes, which poked fun at BDSM fetishists 
as well as science fiction tropes. I would only suggest that it needs a 
sequel about what happens when the victim wakes up and becomes fully 
aware of her plight. 



Website Review: Couture
Address: http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Couture/www
Reviewed 5/30/02

Oral sex and humiliation receive a good workout from this author, in a 
modest website whose looks don't hint at the depravities within. 

I was initially drawn to it because of the "Harriet Hotter" series, which, 
as anyone who has a half a brain knows, is an obvious spoof of Harry 
Potter, but with a difference. Shy teenage Harriet is just as awkward, 
geeky, and mistreated as Harry is but she's a sexual firecracker as well, 
her unchecked desires -- as well as the machinations of her smug 
cousin Chloe -- leading her into various episodes of exhibitionism, 
humiliation, and sexual exposure. To make things worse, every time she 
comes, havoc occurs: toilets flush, doors slam, and electricity flashes. 
Here the naive but frantically masturbating Harriet is the victim of 
itching powder in her panties, and scheming cousin Chloe talks her 
into exposing herself in the family car to make her 'skin condition' better:


>>>>[Harriet] noticed that Chloe was  right.  It did appear that the wind 
relieved 
her condition,  but it still itched rather badly.  Just not the insane  
itching she experienced earlier.  Unknowingly, her finger  had began 
to tease her slit, while she sat with her hand  over her lap.  Chloe was 
beginning to grow aroused herself,  as she watched with great interest, 
while Harriet continued  masturbating with greater and greater 
obviousness.

"Stop it you little freak!  Wait till I tell mom!" Chloe warned.

Harriet snatched her hand off her sex and pulled her skirt back down.  
"Please don't tell.  Please," she begged.

"Maybe I won't, but first, put your hands behind your back,  since you 
obviously can't control yourself, pervert."     Harriet sat with her hands 
behind her back, in utter  humiliation the rest of the way home, her 
skirt blowing in  the wind and her sex visible to anyone who passed 
their  car.  "Please God, don't let anyone see me.  Please God,  don't let 
anyone see me," she whispered over and over  again.  She knew she 
shouldn't be feeling aroused from  being displayed this way and 
wondered what was wrong with  her. <<<<


The clueless Harriet bumbles from humiliation to humiliation, never 
quite catching on. I was hoping she would later get revenge on her 
awful cousin, but in three chapters, it didn't happen. Oh well, there's at 
least eight more to go, during which we can assume, if this series 
follows the first Rowling book, that Harriet eventually gives Chloe her 
comeuppance and goes off to school. 

The other stories I read dealt with the same themes. In "Rosa" a wealthy 
woman who gets turned on by reading online porn about F/F 
watersports becomes the ambivalent victim of them herself when her 
Latino maid finds out about her kink; humilating role reversal games 
follow. In "Blowing Betty" and "The Icing on the Cake" the victims are 
man who are lured into oral sex by calculating females; they find out 
later that giving into their desires carries a price... which is being the 
female's 'bitch,' to use a currently popular gangster term. In all these 
stories the tension between sexual pleasure and sexual shame is very 
well handled; these characters *know* they're getting into trouble for 
their desires, yet this doesn't stop them. Stupid human animals, as Terk 
the Psychlo would say. "Blowing Betty" in particular gets a lot of 
mileage out of its femdom plotline... young Betty equates her clit with a 
cock and becomes the master of her tutor, who is reduced to a cringing 
femslave with a girly name, and is powerless to resist.

I was impressed with all the stories I read, but "Betty" and "Harriet" are 
the best, doing what they do very well... dishing up hot, plausible, 
detailed humiliation with the victims as thinking, conflicted human 
beings and not two-D cookie cutouts. But still victims. The author 
obviously took a lot of time and care in writing these, and it shows. 
Highly recommended if you are a fan of this particular kink.

Interface: B+
Content: A+ to A
Will I visit again: Maybe.

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