Message-ID: <36673asstr$1022847002@assm.asstr-mirror.org> Return-Path: <LadyCyrrh@aol.com> From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com X-Original-Message-ID: <8c.1903027c.2a281858@aol.com> MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit X-ASSTR-Original-Date: Thu, 30 May 2002 20:05:44 EDT Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} The Annex Reviews, 5/30/02 Date: Fri, 31 May 2002 08:10:02 -0400 Path: assm.asstr-mirror.org!not-for-mail X-Is-Review: yes Approved: <assm@asstr-mirror.org> Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories,alt.sex.stories.d Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d X-Archived-At: <URL:http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2002/36673> X-Moderator-Contact: ASSTR ASSM moderation <story-ckought69@hotmail.com> X-Story-Submission: <ckought69@hotmail.com> X-Moderator-ID: gill-bates, IceAltar The Annex Reviews, 5/30/02 by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com) Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh The stories: Who Wants to Rule the World (Farleven): M/F, F/F, mc, SF, slave The Paramour Island Club Parts 1 and 2 (Goblin King): F/f, slave, minor Liquidity (Adrian Hunter): Bond, SF, humor Website Review: Couture Who Wants to Rule the World, Part 1 [A-] Where posted: ASSM When posted: 5/18/02 Author: Farleven Author Address: farleven@yahoo.com Author Website: http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/farleven/www/ My reviews of slave fic continue in this story and the two others that follow. A mysterious man trails two fresh young college coeds on a shopping trip. Feigning a fall, he injects one, then the other, with nanobyte machines that take over their minds. When they wake up from strange dreams later that night they find they have already been transported to the Master's lair, where first one, then the other, go into a lustful frenzy and have unbridled yet rather conventional sex with him. We learn later their fate is to be turned into sex slaves for sale to the highest bidder, their bodies transformed into porn-star perfection: >>>[His] eyes were instantly drawn to her chest. Two perfect orbs jutted out from her chest, each a precise half-sphere slightly larger than a grapefruit and topped with a taught nipple rising precisely from the center. Even as she writhed wildly on her back, her breasts neither sagged or bounced, but somehow still looked perfectly natural. Her entire body was completely hairless, aside from a mane of long brown hair that flowed almost to her waist. The girl's pussy was the last thing Marcus took note of, and it too was unlike anything he'd seen. Her outer lips were completely naked, and much larger than normal. The true oddity was her clit, it rose from the top of her slit as a huge bulb, and Marcus could imagine just how sensitive it was from the girl's quaking body.<<<< Surprisingly, neither coed is too upset at this turn of events. With a bod like that, I might not be too upset either. The chapter ends with two investigators from the Special Affairs Bureau ("the last refuge for law enforcement") preparing to dive into the case; since one of them is a beautiful bisexual woman, you can bet your bippy she's going to get the same treatment in some later chapter. (The complete version of this story is available on the author's website.) This was a workmanlike mind control story that didn't break any new ground, but what it did, it did very well. The sex scenes were a definite turn-on, and the mingled arousal/shame of the two girls was excellently and sensitively handled. I question, though, why coeds in these stories always seem to be fixated on shopping for 'hot' clothing at the local boutique. Twenty-year-old women can be very stupid and shallow (as anyone who's watched TRL can attest) but c'mon, let's have them think about their classes or world hunger once in a while. The character of the Master was likewise shortchanged -- he was never really described, so we don't know why he inspires such lust. On the other hand, for a story like this, perhaps character development isn't so important... it's the naughty themes and situations that stoke the fire. And for that any puppets will suffice. The Paramour Island Club, Parts 1 and 2 [B] Where posted: ASSM When posted: 5/23/02 Author: Goblin King Author Address: beyondthelaberynth@yahoo.com Fourteen-year-old Julie runs away from home to attend a cheerleading camp in Southwest Texas and winds up in a heap o' trouble; the camp is a front run by Brad and Joanna, a couple with a taste for sweet young things, whom they kidnap and ship to their island resort to serve as underage sex slaves. Joanna tries the kid out herself, her gentle lovemaking peppered by platitudes like "Sex is a beautiful and exciting thing, and that it can be very enjoyable" and "Masturbation is a normal, natural part of your sexuality." I guess being a sex slave isn't as bad as it's been made out to be. This was an interesting idea (and unfortunately, one that the writer or poster may be busted for, under internet child porn laws) but, as with the story above, the character of the girl was more than a little cliched. To begin with, what teen would defy her parents and run away from home to attend a (square) cheerleading camp? These days she'd be more likely to split to follow the Blink182 tour. Also problematic was sexual vocabulary that switched from the naive "My date for the eighth grade dance played with my boobies" to the sophisticated "I want you to put your fingers back into my pussy and fuck me with them until I cum" which is the sort of phrase most young teens wouldn't know unless they're regular consumers of explicit commercial porn. In sum, could have been better. Liquidity [A] Where posted: ASSM When posted: 5/16/02 Author: Adrian Hunter Author Address: adrian (underscore) hunter (at) hotmail (dot) com Author Website: http://www.adrianhunter.com A pair of insectoid aliens slumming on Earth crashes "a fantasy- fulfillment ritual that was traditionally held between the autumn equinox and the winter solstice" -- otherwise known as Halloween -- in search of human females for their nefarious plans. Such plans include keeping the females for their 'silk' which we later understand to be their vaginal secretions, and which the aliens consider a euphoric drug. The two are amused by one partygoer's provocative dress: >>>>His sensors reported she was clothed from head to toe in the processed mammal hides known in the region's language as "leather," adorned with metal containment devices that served as both decoration and function; all sorts of hooks and clasps and buckles and padlocks keeping the material pressed close to her body. Switching to analog vision, he noted her costume was representative of the peculiar style called "bondage" that he and Steev had examined in great detail on the global network.<<<< The aliens decide she is to be their next victim, in part because she has been packaged for transport so neatly. This story was humorous, slightly squicky, and definately needed a second reading to catch all the jokes, which poked fun at BDSM fetishists as well as science fiction tropes. I would only suggest that it needs a sequel about what happens when the victim wakes up and becomes fully aware of her plight. Website Review: Couture Address: http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Couture/www Reviewed 5/30/02 Oral sex and humiliation receive a good workout from this author, in a modest website whose looks don't hint at the depravities within. I was initially drawn to it because of the "Harriet Hotter" series, which, as anyone who has a half a brain knows, is an obvious spoof of Harry Potter, but with a difference. Shy teenage Harriet is just as awkward, geeky, and mistreated as Harry is but she's a sexual firecracker as well, her unchecked desires -- as well as the machinations of her smug cousin Chloe -- leading her into various episodes of exhibitionism, humiliation, and sexual exposure. To make things worse, every time she comes, havoc occurs: toilets flush, doors slam, and electricity flashes. Here the naive but frantically masturbating Harriet is the victim of itching powder in her panties, and scheming cousin Chloe talks her into exposing herself in the family car to make her 'skin condition' better: >>>>[Harriet] noticed that Chloe was right. It did appear that the wind relieved her condition, but it still itched rather badly. Just not the insane itching she experienced earlier. Unknowingly, her finger had began to tease her slit, while she sat with her hand over her lap. Chloe was beginning to grow aroused herself, as she watched with great interest, while Harriet continued masturbating with greater and greater obviousness. "Stop it you little freak! Wait till I tell mom!" Chloe warned. Harriet snatched her hand off her sex and pulled her skirt back down. "Please don't tell. Please," she begged. "Maybe I won't, but first, put your hands behind your back, since you obviously can't control yourself, pervert." Harriet sat with her hands behind her back, in utter humiliation the rest of the way home, her skirt blowing in the wind and her sex visible to anyone who passed their car. "Please God, don't let anyone see me. Please God, don't let anyone see me," she whispered over and over again. She knew she shouldn't be feeling aroused from being displayed this way and wondered what was wrong with her. <<<< The clueless Harriet bumbles from humiliation to humiliation, never quite catching on. I was hoping she would later get revenge on her awful cousin, but in three chapters, it didn't happen. Oh well, there's at least eight more to go, during which we can assume, if this series follows the first Rowling book, that Harriet eventually gives Chloe her comeuppance and goes off to school. The other stories I read dealt with the same themes. In "Rosa" a wealthy woman who gets turned on by reading online porn about F/F watersports becomes the ambivalent victim of them herself when her Latino maid finds out about her kink; humilating role reversal games follow. In "Blowing Betty" and "The Icing on the Cake" the victims are man who are lured into oral sex by calculating females; they find out later that giving into their desires carries a price... which is being the female's 'bitch,' to use a currently popular gangster term. In all these stories the tension between sexual pleasure and sexual shame is very well handled; these characters *know* they're getting into trouble for their desires, yet this doesn't stop them. Stupid human animals, as Terk the Psychlo would say. "Blowing Betty" in particular gets a lot of mileage out of its femdom plotline... young Betty equates her clit with a cock and becomes the master of her tutor, who is reduced to a cringing femslave with a girly name, and is powerless to resist. I was impressed with all the stories I read, but "Betty" and "Harriet" are the best, doing what they do very well... dishing up hot, plausible, detailed humiliation with the victims as thinking, conflicted human beings and not two-D cookie cutouts. But still victims. The author obviously took a lot of time and care in writing these, and it shows. Highly recommended if you are a fan of this particular kink. Interface: B+ Content: A+ to A Will I visit again: Maybe. ________________________________________________________ Comments to: ladycyrrh@aol.com Website---> http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh -- Pursuant to the Berne Convention, this work is copyright with all rights reserved by its author unless explicitly indicated. +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+ | alt.sex.stories.moderated ----- send stories to: <ckought69@hotmail.com> | | FAQ: <http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/faq.html> Moderator: <story-ckought69@hotmail.com> | +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+ |Discuss this story and others in alt.sex.stories.d, look for subject {ASSD}| |Archive at <http://assm.asstr-mirror.org> Hosted by <http://www.asstr-mirror.org> | +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+