Message-ID: <28010asstr$977598604@assm.asstr-mirror.org> Return-Path: <nexuswilson@nightmail.com> From: nexuswilson@nightmail.com X-Original-Message-ID: <20001222110810.12081.qmail@box211.nightmail.com> Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} nexuswilson review8 Date: Sat, 23 Dec 2000 14:10:04 -0500 Path: assm.asstr-mirror.org!not-for-mail X-Is-Review: yes Approved: <assm@asstr-mirror.org> Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories,alt.sex.stories.d Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d X-Archived-At: <URL:http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2000/28010> X-Moderator-Contact: ASSTR ASSM moderation <story-ckought69@hotmail.com> X-Story-Submission: <ckought69@hotmail.com> X-Moderator-ID: gill-bates, dennyw, RuiJorge Hi everybody, I'm still in Turkey with a fair bit of time on my hands continuing to read some longer stories on disk from the archives. I have invited one of the writers here to write with me, I liked what they'd done so much, and thought their style would match what I do at www.pornoz.com/alterotica. You'll have to guess which one though! Thanks to the 2 of 3 writers who replied thanking for their reviews in Novembers nexuswilson review 7. Here's the latest reviews. Hotsprings from delta @ nym . alias . net Yet another top quality tale from Delta, a great story line with a heap of sub-plots. Ends slightly weakly with the explaination of how Jake is going to be kept in his place seeming very shaky. Kats initial subjugation of Stacey and Mel is brilliant, but Tom is slightly less believable. Also as I recall Jennie's antagonism to Kats appointment by Jake was written as real when it would have been feigned. How did he come to employ her anyway if it was all Jennie's plan in the first place? So much was made of Fred's suspected past, but nothing ever came of it! So what was it he was running/hiding from? Overall a great sex story with a little bit of virtually everything tied into it. Marks (out of 10) Reading enjoyment 9 Style 8 Spelling/Grammar 9 Storyline 8 Originality 9 Wood factor 7 Suzi and Lisa: Gang-Bang Sluts (anal,M+/FF, i/r) by : The Midnight Lurker TML@EroticStories.com TMidLurker@aol.com Suffers slightly from excessive ejaculation syndrome, particularly the black friend. Great sex description and just about every combination possible on one woman are used. If anything the sex goes on a little too long after Suzi returns really. Story does contain some spelling and composition errors. Overall TML shows again why he/she is about the best compliant gang bang stroke writer around once again. Marks (out of 10) Reading enjoyment 9 Style 7 Spelling/Grammar 8 Storyline 8 Originality 7 Wood factor 9 Kathleen (Slave #39) from unknown conscience - spellcheck error Kathleen has been employed by a sex club for some time and tells stories of 3 of her assignments. A brief description of how she got into the job is given but it could well be expanded upon as an obvious prologue, with more stories added in between. Writing is very good, sex action very well done. Overall a nice sex worker fantasy and perfect stroke material. Marks (out of 10) Reading enjoyment 8 Style 8 Spelling/Grammar 8 Storyline 7 Originality 6 Wood factor 8 My Sister is a Stripper - Part One of Two(MF F voy solo - MF voy - MF inc exhib solo/mast) from jeffzeph@hotmail.com http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/jeffzephyr/www/ http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/jeffzephyr/ died her hair - spellcheck error Well what a fantastic sexual suspense story this is, building all the way through. This story is about teasing, the incest is merely used as a vehicle for it. There are a few errors and some of the grammar/wording is a bit suspect in the second 5th of the story. Not quite sure what's gone wrong there, just that it's not quite as the author intended. Overall a great story that builds fantastically, with great sex and leaves you gagging to get hold of part 2. Marks (out of 10) Reading enjoyment 10 Style 9 Spelling/Grammar 8 Storyline 7 Originality 6 Wood factor 10 I'm stuck in turkey with a sex ban on my only internet connection and dying to read part 2. I would be so so grateful if you would mail me part 2 so I don't have to wait till I get home! SWEDE OLA (MF, Rom, Oral) From: galluslong@yahoo.com "I assure you, Ola, you've looked like an elephant to me," I said - Missing the word 'never'? several other small errors. Old man gets himself younger lover and she saves him when her ex comes to shoot them both. Some quite interesting sex scenes (including one act I've never previously seen or read of)and a very real feel to it make this worth reading but the heavy reference to sick old people may put most people off. Overall a readers digest story with some unusual sexual practices added in. Marks (out of 10) Reading enjoyment 6 Style 7 Spelling/Grammar 7 Storyline 9 Originality 8 Wood factor 5 Slut Match (teen, humil, pain, nc, f/f, mmm/f, oral) from S_Bockman@Hotmail.com http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/The_Lazy_Cup/www/ A really good piece of nc humilliation turning to life changing enjoyed compliance. nicely written in believable style with excellent description and story build up. One of the highest levels of pain I've seen in a story while still maintaining main stream eroticism. Overall on of the best strokes I've read for a long time. material. Marks (out of 10) Reading enjoyment 10 Style 8 Spelling/Grammar 9 Storyline 8 Originality 7 Wood factor 10 Young Wife's Dilemma - I (m/f, i/r, n/c) By Black Demon Very little is actuallly made of the wifes dilemma in this story as it is actually written as though she has no choice. Beautiful white wife is raped using drugs and blackmail by ugly old black employer and made pregnant (probably) by deception. Not nice stuff but pretty well written. Overall typical of this rather stereotyped genre, not really living up to the promise of the title. Marks (out of 10) Reading enjoyment 7 Style 7 Spelling/Grammar 8 Storyline 7 Originality 6 Wood factor 7 Young Wife's Dilemma - II inc Blackmailed Beauty (m/f, i/r, n/c) soon at a lost when - grammar error 'Raheem had always wanted to sample a beautiful American woman' - Seems rather unlikely for a rich white slave trader. This is similar in content to YWD1 with a different setting but much worse plot and grammar. The sex is still well written though. Story relies on the existance of a mythical drug which is just too unbelievable and the woman faces no dilemma at all until the sequel(Blackmailed Beauty) when nothing whatever is made of it, she just goes along with him. The sequel is in fact much better written and is developed into quite a good blackmail/humilliation story. Overall a much more promising storyline, very poorly developed, at first but rescued somewhat by the sequel. Marks (out of 10) Reading enjoyment 7 Style 7 Spelling/Grammar 5 Storyline 6 Originality 8 Wood factor 9 Read my own work at www.pornoz.com/alterotica review by Mark aka nexuswilson@hotmail.com ________________________________________________________ Get Your Free, Private Email at http://www.nightmail.com *********************************************************************** Nightmail is sponsored by Friend Finder Personals. With over 5.0 million free personals ads, Friend Finder is the largest personals site on the Internet. Get your free ad and meet people today at http://www.friendfinder.com Never forget a date again! 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