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From: nexuswilson@nightmail.com
Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} nexuswilson review8
Date: Sat, 23 Dec 2000 14:10:04 -0500
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Hi everybody, I'm still in Turkey with a fair bit of 
time on my hands continuing to read some longer stories
on disk from the archives.  I have invited one of the 
writers here to write with me, I liked what they'd done
so much, and thought their style would match what I do
at www.pornoz.com/alterotica.  You'll have to guess which
one though!  Thanks to the 2 of 3 writers who replied 
thanking for their reviews in Novembers nexuswilson 
review 7.
Here's the latest reviews.

Hotsprings

from	delta @ nym . alias . net

Yet another top quality tale from Delta, a great story line with
a heap of sub-plots.  Ends slightly weakly with the explaination
of how Jake is going to be kept in his place seeming very shaky.
Kats initial subjugation of Stacey and Mel is brilliant, but Tom
is slightly less believable.  Also as I recall Jennie's antagonism
to Kats appointment by Jake was written as real when it would have
been feigned.  How did he come to employ her anyway if it was all 
Jennie's plan in the first place?  So much was made of Fred's 
suspected past, but nothing ever came of it!  So what was it he 
was running/hiding from? 

Overall a great sex story with a little bit of virtually
everything tied into it.

Marks (out of 10)

Reading enjoyment	9
Style			8
Spelling/Grammar	9
Storyline		8
Originality		9
Wood factor		7

 
Suzi and Lisa: Gang-Bang Sluts (anal,M+/FF, i/r)
                 
by : 	The Midnight Lurker
	TML@EroticStories.com
        TMidLurker@aol.com

Suffers slightly from excessive ejaculation syndrome,
particularly the black friend.  Great sex description
and just about every combination possible on one woman
are used.  If anything the sex goes on a little too 
long after Suzi returns really.  Story does contain 
some spelling and composition errors.

Overall TML shows again why he/she is about the best 
compliant gang bang stroke writer around once again.

Marks (out of 10)

Reading enjoyment	9
Style			7
Spelling/Grammar	8
Storyline		8
Originality		7
Wood factor		9


Kathleen (Slave #39)

from	unknown

conscience - spellcheck error
Kathleen has been employed by a sex club for some time
and tells stories of 3 of her assignments.  A brief 
description of how she got into the job is given but it
could well be expanded upon as an obvious prologue, with
more stories added in between.  Writing is very good, 
sex action very well done.

Overall a nice sex worker fantasy and perfect stroke 
material.

Marks (out of 10)

Reading enjoyment	8
Style			8
Spelling/Grammar	8
Storyline		7
Originality		6
Wood factor		8

 
My Sister is a Stripper - Part One of Two(MF F voy solo
- MF voy - MF inc exhib solo/mast)

from	jeffzeph@hotmail.com
        http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/jeffzephyr/www/
        http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/jeffzephyr/


died her hair  - spellcheck error
Well what a fantastic sexual suspense story this is, building
all the way through.  This story is about teasing, the
incest is merely used as a vehicle for it.  There are a 
few errors and some of the grammar/wording is a bit 
suspect in the second 5th of the story.  Not quite sure 
what's gone wrong there, just that it's not quite as the
author intended.

Overall a great story that builds fantastically, with 
great sex and leaves you gagging to get hold of part 2.

Marks (out of 10)

Reading enjoyment	10
Style			9
Spelling/Grammar	8
Storyline		7
Originality		6
Wood factor		10

 I'm stuck in turkey with a sex ban on my only internet 
connection and dying to read part 2.  I would be so so
grateful if you would mail me part 2 so I don't have to 
wait till I get home!


SWEDE OLA (MF, Rom, Oral)

From: galluslong@yahoo.com

"I assure you, Ola, you've looked like an 
elephant to me," I said - Missing the word 'never'?
several other small errors.
Old man gets himself younger lover and she saves him 
when her ex comes to shoot them both.  Some quite 
interesting sex scenes (including one act I've never
previously seen or read of)and a very real feel to it 
make this worth reading but the heavy reference to sick 
old people may put most people off.

Overall a readers digest story with some unusual sexual
practices added in.

Marks (out of 10)

Reading enjoyment	6
Style			7
Spelling/Grammar	7
Storyline		9
Originality		8
Wood factor		5


Slut Match (teen, humil, pain, nc, f/f, mmm/f, oral)


from	S_Bockman@Hotmail.com
	http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/The_Lazy_Cup/www/



A really good piece of nc humilliation turning to life
changing enjoyed compliance.  nicely written in believable
style with excellent description and story build up.  One
of the highest levels of pain I've seen in a story while
still maintaining main stream eroticism.

Overall on of the best strokes I've read for a long time. 
material.

Marks (out of 10)

Reading enjoyment	10
Style			8
Spelling/Grammar	9
Storyline		8
Originality		7
Wood factor		10


Young Wife's Dilemma - I (m/f, i/r, n/c)

By Black Demon


Very little is actuallly made of the wifes dilemma in
this story as it is actually written as though she has
no choice.  Beautiful white wife is raped using drugs
and blackmail by ugly old black employer and made 
pregnant (probably) by deception. Not nice stuff but 
pretty well written.

Overall typical of this rather stereotyped genre, not 
really living up to the promise of the title.

Marks (out of 10)

Reading enjoyment	7
Style			7
Spelling/Grammar	8
Storyline		7
Originality		6
Wood factor		7

Young Wife's Dilemma - II inc Blackmailed Beauty 
(m/f, i/r, n/c)

soon at a lost when - grammar error 
'Raheem had always wanted to sample a beautiful American 
woman' - Seems rather unlikely for a rich white slave
trader. This is similar in content to YWD1 with a
different setting but much worse plot and grammar.  The
sex is still well written though.  Story relies on the
existance of a mythical drug which is just too 
unbelievable and the woman faces no dilemma at all until
the sequel(Blackmailed Beauty) when nothing whatever is 
made of it, she just goes along with him.  The sequel is
in fact much better written and is developed into quite
a good blackmail/humilliation story.

Overall a much more promising storyline, very poorly
developed, at first but rescued somewhat by the sequel.

Marks (out of 10)

Reading enjoyment	7
Style			7
Spelling/Grammar	5
Storyline		6
Originality		8
Wood factor		9

 
Read my own work at
www.pornoz.com/alterotica

review by Mark
aka 
nexuswilson@hotmail.com
 


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