Message-ID: <27130asstr$972961807@assm.asstr-mirror.org> X-Original-Message-ID: <39FDE556.C9FB0306@zipcon.net> From: Celeste <Celeste801@aol.com> X-Accept-Language: en MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=us-ascii Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} CR 373 - Celestial Reviews--Special Halloween Issue Date: Mon, 30 Oct 2000 22:10:07 -0500 Path: assm.asstr-mirror.org!not-for-mail X-Is-Review: yes Approved: <assm@asstr-mirror.org> Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories,alt.sex.stories.d Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d X-Archived-At: <URL:http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2000/27130> X-Moderator-Contact: ASSTR ASSM moderation <story-ckought69@hotmail.com> X-Story-Submission: <ckought69@hotmail.com> X-Moderator-ID: dennyw, gill-bates Subject: {ASSM} CR 373 - Celestial Reviews -- Special Halloween Issue Date: Mon, 30 Oct 2000 11:03:20 EST From: Celeste801@aol.com ------------------------------------------------------------------ Celestial Reviews 373 - Oct 28, 2000 Note: Here are the Top 10 Reasons Trick-or-Treating is Better than Sex 10. Guaranteed to get at least a little something in the sack. 9. If you get tired, wait 10 minutes and go at it again. 8. The uglier you look, the easier it is to get some. 7. You don't have to compliment the person who gave you candy. 6. Person you're with doesn't fantasize you're someone else. 5. 40 years from now, you'll still enjoy candy. 4. If you wear a Bill Clinton mask, no one thinks you're kinky. 3. Doesn't matter if kids hear you moaning and groaning. 2. Less guilt the next morning. AND.... 1. If you don't get what you want, you can always go next door!!! Second note: In the spirit of the season, I am reposting some reviews of stories that combine sex with Halloween-like themes. I interpreted this topic loosely -- including stories with ghosts, vampires, and costume balls, as well as specifically Halloween stories. Many of these are old reviews {marked by an asterisk *}, and I have not revised the originals. For some of the reposts we were unable to find links. Perhaps the original authors will repost these stories. Watch out for your local incubus or succubus tonight! THIS WEEK'S JOKE: Did you hear that next week Tipper Gore is going on the Presidential Campaign with her husband? To prepare herself she shaved off all the hair from her private parts. She will sit on the stage with him and have her legs apart without any panties on. Her message? "Read my lips. No more Bush". BONUS HALLOWEEN JOKE: An intrepid photographer went to a haunted castle determined to get a picture of a ghost, which was said to appear only once in a hundred years. Not wanting to frighten off the ghost, the photographer sat in the dark until midnight when the apparition became visible. The ghost turned out to be friendly and consented to pose for one snapshot. The happy photographer popped a bulb into his camera and took the picture. After dashing into his studio, the photographer developed the negative and groaned. It was underexposed and completely blank. Moral: The spirit was willing, but the flash was weak. THINGS YOU HEAR AROUND HALLOWEEN THAT SOUND DIRTY BUT AREN'T: I'd like to get a little something in the sack tonight. Can I eat your Zagnuts? Have your mom check it before you put it in your mouth. You scared me stiff! Just get on your hands and knees and bob your head. She's got a couple of nice pumpkins on her porch. He's got Candy spread out on the living room floor! ===================== Celestial Reviews Index: ===================== "The Music of the Night" by Tiramisu (operatic sex) 9, 8, 8 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Rui_Favorites/www/Halloween/the_music_of_the_night.htm "Witches" by Maria Gonzales (Sexual Armageddon for witches) 10, 10, 10 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/MariaGonzales/www/ "Halloween Party" by artie (ceremonial sex) 9.5, 10, 10 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/artie/www/hpv01.html "Eternal Rest " by Jack of All Trades (graveyard sex) 10, 10, 10 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/j/wwwoat/ OR Rui's Halloween page "A Wife's Gift: A Halloween Romance" by Redman (melancholy romance) 10, 9.5, 9.5 "Succubus in Blue Checks" by DrSpin (succubus sex) 10, 9.5, 9.5 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/Rui_Favorites/Halloween/ "Welcome To The Hotel California" by Mr Slot (horror story) 9.5, 10, 10 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/Rui_Favorites/Halloween/ "Dark was the Path" by Delta (mysterious sex) 10, 10, 10 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Delta/Dark%20was%20the%2 0Path "Only in My Dreams" by Pami (mysterious sex) 9.5, 8, 8 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Pami/www/only_in_my_dreams.html "Gamma: A Tale From The Dork Side" by JVB (sex in numbers) 10, 9, 9 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/jvb/www/ "Home in time for Melrose" by Pariah Dog (violence) 10, 10, 10 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Rui_Favorites/www/Halloween/home_in_tim e_for_melrose.htm "Halloween" by Lyndon Brown (Halloween sex) 9.5, 9, 9 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Rui_Favorites/www/Halloween/halloween.ht m "The 70th Sin" by Shon Richards (witch sex) 10, 10, 10 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Rui_Favorites/www/Halloween/the_70th_sin .htm "Threefold Return" by Dreamfire (witches & sex) 10, 9, 8 "All Hallows Eve" by blankpage (FF dreamlike sex) 10, 9, 9 http://x65.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=686654545 "Come With Me" by Tiramisu (romance) 10, 10, 10 http://x60.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=686759092 ===================== Reposted Reviews: ===================== "From Whose Bourne No Traveler Returns." by Trey Gallant (hypnosis) 10, 10,10 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=540838211 "Masks" by Ann Douglas (ff Halloween party cumming out) 9, 10, 10 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Ann_Douglas/www/masks.htm "The Kiss: A Ghost Story" by Desdemona & Poison Ivan (spooky sex) 10, 10, 10 http://members.tripod.com/files/Authors/poisoniv1/www/ or http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Desdmona/www/ "A Night at Indian's Hollow" by Shon Richards (unusual sex rituals) 10, 10, 10 http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2000/26360 "Trick or Treat" by Saucy Wench (Halloween sex party) 10, 10, 10 http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2000/23801 "Trick and Treat: Halloween 1980" by Celeste (Halloween sex) 10, 10, 10 http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1997/5020.txt "Halloween Party" by WifePose (wife watching) 7, 8, 8 "Costumes" by Lord Malinov (Halloween orgy) 10, 10, 10 http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1997/5182.txt "Going Home" by Kim (romantic ghost story) 10, 10, 10 http://baird.pair.com/kim/home.htm "Predator: A Tale for Halloween" by The Bear (scary sex story) 10, 10, 10 http://baird.pair.com/baird/predat11.htm "Queer Halloween" by Vickie Tern (transgender revenge) 10, 8, 8 http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1998/16795.txt http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1998/16794.txt http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1998/16793.txt "Ghost" by Wgnmkr (ghostly masturbation) 9, 9, 9 http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1997/1538.txt "The Body Swap" by Dawn (TG witchcraft) 10, 10, 5 http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1997/2870.txt "Private Tasting" by Artie (witchcraft) 9.5, 7, 7 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/artie/www/PrivateTasting.html "All Souls Night" by Marawuti (erotic gothic novella) 10, 10, 10 http://www.brainkick.com/~marawuti/soulnite.html "The Fearless Vampire" by Poison Ivy (vampire sex) 10, 10, 10 http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1997/5192.txt http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1997/5191.txt "Love You Forever" by Rahul L Iyer (Halloween romance) 7, 6, 6 "Masks -- A Horror Story" by Tom Bombadil (Halloween) 10, 10, 10 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Collections/ASSTR_Collection/Tom _Bombadil/Tom_Bombadil.The_Masks.txt "Meeting Amanda" by Backrub (sex with a vampire) 10, 10, 10 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/BitBard/www/forray/backrub/amanda.html "Intimate with the Vampire 2.0" by Rocket88 (vampire sex) 10, 10, 10 "The Warlock" by Rocket88 (witchcraft & whippings) 6, 9, 9 "Diana" by Mary Anne Mohanraj (mysterious outdoor sex) 10, 10, 10 http://www.mamohanraj.com/Stories/diana.html "Wet Dreams" by Backrub (mind control & dreams) 10, 10, 10 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/BitBard/www/forray/backrub/wet.html "Tales of the Seeding" by Wollstonecraft (Primitive sex rituals) 10, 10, 10 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/BitBard/www/forray/wollstonecraft/seeding. html "Porno TV: The Munsters" by Shelby Bush (sitcom parody) 10, 9.5, 9.5 http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1997/194.txt "Bed and Breakfast" by RC (ghostly sex) 9.5, 9.5, 9 http://www.rcwrites.com/bedbrk.html "Night of the Wolves" by Lysander (bestiality) 10, 9.5, 10 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/World_of_the_Darkside/F avorites/lysander.txt "Princess" by Parker (TG Halloween Party) 10, 9.5, 9 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Collections/Old_Joe%27s_Collectio n/TG/Princess.txt "The Addams Family: Eddie Comes to Visit" by Shelby Bush (sitcom parody) 10, 9.5, 9.5 http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1997/195.txt "Halloween" by RC (vampire sex) 10, 9, 9 http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1998/11948.txt "Boo!" by PleaseCain (mutilation station!) 10, 10, 10 http://members.aol.com/pleasecain/hackhous.htm "Brown Mountain Incident" by Charles Baudot (mysterious Mm encounter) 10, 9, 9 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Collections/nifty/gay/adult- youth/brown-mountain-incident "Temptation" by PleaseCain (poetic meditation) 10, 10, 10 http://members.aol.com/pleasecain/eden.htm "True Love" by Dafney Dewitt (murder on Halloween) 10, 9, 9 http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Collections/ASSTR_Collection/Dafn ey_Dewitt/Dafney_Dewitt.True_Love.txt "Haunting Memories" by Gaetana (haunted house) 9.5, 8, 6 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=540988616&fmt=text "Goodnight Kiss" by Ben Zonah (vampire sex) 8, 8, 8 "Ghost: The Long Goodbye" by Unknown Author (ghostly sex) 4, 3, 3 ===================== Here are the Reviews: ===================== "The Music of the Night" by Tiramisu (tiramixu@yahoo.com). http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Rui_Favorites/www/Halloween/the_music_of _the_night.htm The husband has taken his wife to Paris to see The Phantom of the Opera as a special Halloween Treat. At Intermission, she wanders through a mysterious door and has phantasmagoric sex under unusual circumstances - or did she? Here's a good example of a grammatical imprecision: "At 42, she still looked good, and she knew it.... Even better than when they were married, he would say." Question: Are they still married? The author could have clarified this by saying, "Even better than on the day they were married." Genuine opera aficionados might give this story higher ratings than I did. The story tries to catch the mood of the opera, but I really can't tell you how effectively the author succeeds. Ratings for "The Music of the Night" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 "Witches" by Maria Gonzales (maria1971@aol.com). http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/MariaGonzales/www/ I have drawn a conclusion about this author. Either she (1) has done her research very thoroughly for this story, (2) she is an extremely creative person, or (3) she is a witch herself. I say this because what she describes in this story is EXACTLY the way real witches operate. The judges got it wrong at Salem, and the stuff about brooms and wiggling the nose is baloney. What Maria describes in this story is the most accurate description of real witchcraft that has ever been published. I'd tell you how I know this, but then I'd have to put a curse on you, and you really wouldn't like that at all. To put it briefly, the narrator of this story (Amber/Bunny) is the Pre-Ordained One, who is to lead the other witches in battle against the Unspoken One. That's about it, but it makes a lot more sense in the context of the rest of the story. Let me just comment on one Principle that is exemplified in this story. I call it the Batman Principle, in honor of its main exemplar. Whenever an Evil Villain would overpower Batman and Robin, the villain would set up an elaborate Rube Goldberg device that would kill the Heroes after the Evil Villain had gone his/her way. Inevitably, the Heroes would alter the Rube Goldberg sequence and escape. The Batman Principle has been applied elsewhere, most notably in James Bond movies and in the old Lone Ranger television shows. The earliest known example occurs in Beowulf, and the most recent example occurred during the Republican vendetta against Bill Clinton and the lovely Ms. Lewinsky. In the present case, Amber/Bunny teleports to safety just before she can be eaten for a snack by the rottweilers that the Unspoken One left to carry out her Evil Plan. As you may have guessed, the secret is not to get fucked by a banana. Ratings for "Witches" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "Halloween Party" by artie (artie@netgate.net). http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/artie/www/hpv01.html Alex goes to a Halloween party with Jill, a sexy lass whom he has just met at his Silicon Valley place of work. The party consists of him plus six sexy women, clothed in white robes and nothing else. That's the dress du jour - white robes and nothing else, except that Alex gets a blue robe with his nothing else. Alex is your basic good ole techy. He even washes his hands absolutely every time he goes to the bathroom. If you ever get invited to a Halloween party at which the six sexy women get you naked and tie you down to what appears to be an altar in the middle of the room in which they all disrobe, become suspicious, especially if the newly naked and nubile women start chanting. Ratings for "Halloween Party" Athena (technical quality): 9.5 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "Eternal Rest" by Jack of All Trades (jackofalltrades@post.com). The story begins with fifteen-year-old kids studying "The Telltale Heart" in English class. As you probably know, this story by Edgar Allen Poe is the best short story ever written. In a macabre mood from the story and after the moral equivalent of a double dare, the friends decide to spend Halloween night in the local Eternal Rest Cemetery. They plan to sit around and tell ghost stories and cook marshmallows until they fall asleep. I personally know one very short ghost story. Two girls were walking past the graveyard one Halloween night. "Do you believe in ghosts?" said one. "No," said the other, and vanished. In the present story, after the other three guys scare them, Doug and Molly go off to a separate part of the cemetery and kiss and practice being more grown up. Turns out, Molly has been lusting after Doug since 5th Grade Sex Ed. Not quite adults yet, they interrupt their sexplay to go and throw a cherry bomb to scare the other three. They split, and..... <heh heh heh> Ratings for "Eternal Rest" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "A Wife's Gift: A Halloween Romance" by Redman (redman@seductive.com). The author refuses to use story codes with this story. Good for him. Story codes are an oversimplification, and they would certainly have been misleading in this case. Here's the deal. Robert and Janet meet and fall in love at a Halloween party. They have a baby daughter and then are blissfully happy for twenty years, at which time she dies during a botched operation. Robert is deeply distraught, but then comes Halloween. You can either try to guess the ending or just go ahead and read this story. It's a bit melancholy, but quite good. Ratings for "A Wife's Gift" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9.5 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5 "Succubus in Blue Checks" by DrSpin (drspin@newsguy.com). The dog dies shortly after the mysterious child walks in, wearing a blue-checked uniform dress and sandals. The girl, that is, not the dog - wearing the blue-checked uniform dress and sandals, that is. I don't really understand the rules of succubae. Heck, for that matter, I don't understand why a female succubus isn't a succuba, with a plural of succubae. To compensate for my ignorance, I longed onto my computer and entered the URL www.succubus.com. The computer churned away for several seconds, during which I had the vague feeling that someone was watching me from inside my computer. "Host unknown." Right. Unknown is not the same as non-existent. I mean, I entered www.god.com and got the same message. Now, this next part is hard to believe. I entered www.devil.com and found myself transported to GoTo.com, with an offer of assistance. This author has amazing power. I don't know how he did this to my computer. Just read the damn story, or something worse may happen to you. This is one spooky story. Before I leave this story, let me add some final notes. Wondering what kind of a world I had gotten myself into by reading this story, I tried a few more web sites. To my immense relief, www.pussy.com still took me to a page that showed two barely legal teens licking each other's tongues; but even there they wanted my credit card number before they would activate the bathroom cam for me. In desperation, I tried www.incubus.com and got a message that said, "connection refused." Thank God - if anyone can find him or his host. I'm not one to belabor a point, but after the experience described above, I felt the need for redemption. At www.redemption.com I discovered that redemption came through a card game that involves bondage. So I sought forgiveness, only to find out that I had to write my life story into a little box and press the return key. Right. What kind of fools do these people take me for? Ratings for "Succubus in Blue Checks" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9.5 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5 "Welcome To the Hotel California" by Mr Slot (dalech33@optusnet.com.au). Frank Malone has been accused of child abuse by the ten-year-old daughter of the police chief of Black Rock. Of course, Frank proclaims his innocence; the humble schoolteacher would never do such a thing. But his reputation has been ruined, and so he must leave town. During his exodus he stops for the night at a lonely hotel. "Welcome To the Hotel California," says the young girl. Welcome, indeed. Although this is really a generic horror story, I'll grant that it at least peripherally hits the Halloween theme. The words to the Eagles' song, "Welcome To the Hotel California," will have a clear and specific meaning for you after you read this story. Ratings "Welcome To the Hotel California" Athena (technical quality): 9.5 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "Dark was the Path" by Delta (delta@nym.alias.net). http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Delta/Dark%20was%20the%2 0Path This story reminded me of Nathaniel Hawthorn's style. I think Hawthorne would have enjoyed Halloween, although I don't think he celebrated it. At least the people he wrote about didn't celebrate Halloween. The Puritans took their witches and goblins and mysterious elements of the night seriously. Celebrating Halloween the way we do would have been a sacrilege for them. Some readers and authors recently held a discussion on a.s.s.d. about whether location makes a difference in a sex story. The answer, of course, is both yes and no. No, if the author wants to focus so heavily on action that the location really plays no role; but yes, if the author chooses to make the ambience an important part of the tale. In this case, the location is almost the whole story - which is interesting, because as we read the story we don't have the slightest idea where that location is. The mysterious atmosphere makes us wonder what is going to happen; and even after it happens, the atmosphere leaves us wondering what really happened. In most cases, if a reader says that she doesn't know what happened in a story, that means the story really sucked - in the negative sense of the word. In this case, it means you should check the story out yourself. Ratings for "Dark was the Path" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "Only in My Dreams" by Pami. http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Pami/www/only_in_my_dreams.html Kathryn has been having unusual dreams lately. Therefore, she has begun keeping next to her bed a notebook in which she can record the events in the dreams, so that she can reconstruct and analyze them later, and a dildo, so that she can bring the dreams to resolution and get back to a more blissful sleep. This recurrent dream thing eventually starts wearing Kathryn out. This is because the notebook is still blank, but her assortment of sextoys has expanded considerably. Masturbation has, as the Bard put it, gotten out of hand. And that can wear a girl out. Dreams merge with reality, and eventually Kathryn has a real but mysterious lover for Halloween. A large number of details go unexplained. A major difference, however, between this and the preceding story is that the absence of explanations created more of an annoyance to me than a sense of interesting mystery. What IS the connection between the lover and the dreams? What's the connection with Halloween? Why does Kathryn suddenly undergo a personality transformation? The story is by no means awful; it's actually pretty good. All I am saying is that it would be a better story if we felt that there were answers to these questions, even if we don't know what those answers are. As it is, I was left with the gnawing feeling that the author had some interesting ideas and just couldn't quite find a way to tie them together into a really coherent story. Ratings for "Only in My Dreams" Athena (technical quality): 9.5 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 "Gamma: A Tale From The Dork Side" by JVB http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/jvb/www/ Since the title of the story lists the main character's name as Gamma, I was a little perturbed to find her referred to as Gemma throughout the story. I would have expected Gamma to be constant in a story like this. OK. If you didn't notice that the preceding paragraph included a really clever pun, then you'll have to rely on the witty repartee in the dialogue in order to enjoy this story. Basically, two college kids dress in Halloween costumes and then guess what the other's is supposed to represent. The guy is Spidey, but the girl's is a little more abstract. Indeed, I'm not sure it's even rational. As I said earlier, stick with the clever repartee. It's a pretty good story. Ratings for "Gamma" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 "Home in Time for Melrose" by Pariah Dog http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Rui_Favorites/www/Halloween/home_in_tim e_for_melrose.htm First off, this story presented me with a problem about which my students often complain. When I tell them to look up the correct spelling of a word in the dictionary, they say, "But how can we look it up, if we don't know how to spell it?" Usually, the answer is to guess at logical possibilities. However, this author refers to the use of a "ball pain hammer." Now first, I'd like to point out that most guys should stay away from people who seriously believe that this sort of tool is somehow associated with balls and pain. Ouch! But seriously, although I knew what a "bawpeen" or something like that hammer was, I had no idea how to spell it. So I found an online hardware store and perused their catalog under hammers. There it was, between wood hammers and cross pein hammers. The correct spelling is "ball pein hammer." Or maybe Ball Peen hammer or Ballpeen hammer or maybe something else. It turns out that not even the hardware stores know how to spell the words. I'm going to stick with what I learned from the Blacksmith's Gazette, which calls it a "ball pein hammer." The pein on the hammer, the Gazette tells me, is shaped like a half sphere or ball, hence the ball pein designation. The face of the ball pein is generally a slightly rounded form, which pushes metal in all directions when the smitty strikes the soft metal with it. Geometrically, the face is a segment of a very large sphere, while the pein is the shape of a much smaller sphere. The ball pein is very good for texturing the surface of the metal, and the pein may be used when you are simply thinning a piece of metal and you want it to move out in all directions while becoming thinner. Previously, I had heard the term ball pein hammer used only once, and that was by a gangster in a movie, whose stooge used the instrument to destroy the knuckles of a person who had fallen behind in his loan payments. I asked my husband if he had one, and he told me he liked to rivet with his ball pein. The ball pein hammer is probably the most common smith hammer available. It is commonly used by auto mechanics today, and it can often be found in the second hand stores and junk shops. I found a set of three on eBay, with bidding starting at $4.75. The advertisement said that they had been used to tame some rowdy cowboys. Does that sound kinky, or what? It's a good idea to have a range of sizes of ball pein hammers. The Gazette said they are probably one of the most basic hammers you'll ever use. In the present story, the use of the ball pein hammer is ill defined, except to say that the protagonist used it to destroy his dashboard while getting his radio to stop playing rap music. Other tools play bigger roles, as the guy goes berserk and wreaks serious havoc. Equally disturbing are the man's thoughts about his wife and his boss, which involve a buzzsaw and some problems of marital infidelity. Normally, I don't enjoy mindless violence; but hey, this is Halloween, and this is a good insight into how the mind of a severely dysfunctional mass murderer might work. Note: There's really not much sex in this story, unless sex is what accounts for the sticky stuff on the ball pein hammer. Ratings for "Home in Time for Melrose" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "Halloween" by Lyndon Brown (indysheets@hotmail.com). http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Rui_Favorites/www/Halloween/halloween.ht m The well-hung teenager takes his "little sister" to the Halloween play. He's called into action, serving as a substitute pantomime horse. Because of size restrictions, he's forced to go without underpants. For whatever reason, several of the moms are without similar accoutrements. The moms learn to appreciate Deadeye Dick for the devotion he shows for Erin, as well as for some of his other characteristics. In fact Erin and her brother have a full social calendar for the next three months, but nothing on school nights. Ratings for "Halloween" Athena (technical quality): 9.5 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 "The 70th Sin" by Shon Richards http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Rui_Favorites/www/Halloween/the_70th_sin .htm The year when I was in eighth grade in a Catholic elementary school, the nuns decided that we should celebrate Halloween "the right way." That is, we were required to each dress like a saint. The next year I understand they refined the rules, and I can understand why. Several boys came dressed as girls - one, as a remarkably seductive woman whom he said was the foundress of a religious order, shortly before she got religion. We had no idea who he was. The only way we eventually identified him was by ruling out every other member of the class, one by one. My best friend dressed as a prostitute - actually, as Mary Magdalene. What I remember most, however, is that I enraged her with jealousy, by dressing as a nun. I was normally shy, but the costume emboldened me; and I flirted shamelessly. You have to keep that in the perspective of a Catholic elementary school of the late sixties. My friend the whore flirted too. The simple fact the boys responded more warmly to the nun's flirtations than to the prostitute's was a revelation to both of us. But back to the present story, which has nothing in common with what I have said so far, except that it's about a fallen nun. The present story takes place around the beginning of the 19th century. The narrator of has been assigned to interview the poor woman before she will be burned as a witch at dawn and to record her sins. The fallen nun explains in scintillating detail - much of it in summary fashion -- all 69 of her sins. Then she commits her 70th sin. You'll have to read the story to find out what the 70th sin is. Note that each sin is counted only once. Thus, having oral sex with a hundred guys would count as only one sin. What this means is that this is not a Catholic nun, because that would have been a hundred sins, according to Sister Mary Vindicator., who was born around the beginning of the 19th century and who taught me about sin. {Actually, it would be more than a hundred sins, if you later reflected with pleasure upon the experience.} This is an extremely well-written, erotic, and thought provoking story. Ratings for "The 70th Sin" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "Threefold Return" by Dreamfire (ddamanita@hotmail.com). Lynn is hot for Bill, a premed student who won't give her the time of day. Coincidentally, Lynn is also Cailyn, a witch-in-training. Therefore, with the help of a co-witch, Cailyn casts a love spell on Bill. Of course, she has to follow the rules for witches, which are surprisingly similar to Asimov's rules for robots, with a slightly greater emphasis on nubile nakedness. Plus the threefold return. I don't know much at all about witches. In a final disclaimer, the author points out that covens don't really work this way, and that magick doesn't really work this way either. But that still leaves us with an interesting story. I think I would have enjoyed it more had I known a little more about covens and magick. Ratings for "Threefold Return" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 "All Hallows Eve" by blankpage (blankpage1027@hotmail.com). http://x65.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=686654545 Halloween stories cover a wide range. It's astonishing to see the variety of thoughts and emotions that people associate with Halloween - ranging from maniacal murders to ghost stories to romantic longings for union with lovers who have gone away. This one is a poignant love story about a woman who longs for the woman upon whom she had depended for love, comfort, and protection. It's difficult to explain. If tender FF love is your thing, then this may be your special Halloween story. Ratings for "All Hallows Eve" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 "Come With Me" by Tiramisu (tiramixu@yahoo.com) http://x60.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=686759092 Once upon a time, on Halloween in 1950 to be exact, a young man and a young woman consummated their love. At that time, they made a pact to meet again in fifty years, no matter what else might happen. And they do. This is an excellent romantic story. Ratings for ""Come With Me" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 ===================== Reposted Reviews: ===================== * "From Whose Bourne No Traveler Returns..." by Trey Gallant (vargas111@yahoo.com). http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=540838211 Like many stories, this one begins with a traveler stranded on a country road on a dark and stormy night. Fortunately, there is a stately home on the nearby hill. Even more fortunately, the person who answers the door is a black-haired beauty with fair, almost pale skin and mysterious eyes. Unfortunately, she is a succubus on the prowl. I know very little about succubae, except that I think a single one should be called a succuba, if she is female, as most of them tend to be. The most serious flaw in this story is the statement that the woman had been "watching discretely." That should be "discreetly." We English teachers know things like that, and it makes us just barely pre-orgasmic when we find somebody misusing a word like this. If the woman were watching discretely, she would look for a while, then stop, then look again, then stop, ad infinitum or nauseam. Also, note that "ad nauseam" ends with "am," not "um." That's because "nausea" is a first declension noun. Also, if I were writing this story, I would replace Lilith's "And it is so hard to get good help these days" with "And it is so good to get hard help these days." But that would probably alter the mood of the story. Ratings for "From Whose Bourne..." Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Masks" by Ann Douglas (ann_douglas@hotmail.com). http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Ann_Douglas/www/masks.htm This is an interesting idea for a plot. A woman experiences a seizure at the beauty shoppe. Her beautician's assistant saves her life; and since the woman will be indisposed for a while, the young beautician's assistant decides to go to the Halloween Ball with the tickets that woman will be unable to use. This young woman is a straight, staid hetero who has been dissatisfied with her love life, and she discovers that the Ball is a lesbian party. Things heat up considerably. The only further detail I'll give you is that she goes to the Ball dressed as a devil, and rightly so. Ann does her usual good job of integrating character development and normal people with hot sex scenes. Doubtless, Ann is a harmless, heterosexual schoolmarm in real life, but she certainly has a flair for making ff sex sound like a lot of fun. In addition, she does a good job of introducing interracial sex without degrading people by imposing stereotypical sex drives on ethnic minorities. The main flaw in this story is some careless grammar. Ann's style and timing are excellent. She just fucks up her grammar from time to time. But as they say, what do you want, perfect grammar or great sex? Ratings for "Masks" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "The Kiss: A Ghost Story" by Desdemona & Poison Ivan (desdmona22@aol.com). http://members.tripod.com/files/Authors/poisoniv1/www/ or http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Desdmona/www/ Caroline is a young lady who sleeps around like there won't be a tomorrow. But her life is somehow incomplete. She hears a voice calling her in the darkness. It's a ghost, who wants her to kiss him so that he can become real. Will Caroline kiss this voyeuristic apparition? Of course she will. Read the story for more details. The dialogue is especially well done. Always be careful when you have promiscuous sex in a house that has recently been purchased from the estate of a man who disappeared under mysterious circumstances. And be nice to your mother when she calls on the phone - no matter what you happen to be doing at the time. Ratings for "The Kiss: A Ghost Story" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "A Night at Indian's Hollow" by Shon Richards (lordshon@aol.com). http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2000/26360 Often it's best that I not tell you specific details from a story. But in this case I can tell you exactly what happens, because after I do so, you still won't know what happened. So here's the deal. The narrator has just turned 21, and so he is eligible for the town's Halloween lottery for the first time. And he wins - that is, he gets to be Fertility Wolf while the Lesser Gods make their rounds on Halloween. Of course, this pairs him up with the Moon Harlot; but, as you know, that doesn't mean that he's allowed into her pants or anything like that. At the first several houses they visit, the residents choose the bane, but eventually one chooses the blessing, and so the narrator is allowed to extend his blessing to the lady of the house. I hope this all makes sense to you. It was a very nice story. Ratings for "A Night at Indian's Hollow" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Trick or Treat" by Saucy Wench (wenchsaucy@aol.com). The two friends crash a Halloween party -- one as a red-haired witch and the other as her sexy black cat. Their goal is to see who can be the naughtiest. Three scenes are described in detail, several others in passing. In real life you shouldn't do the things they do. You should also take your Halloween candy to the hospital and have it xeroxed -- er, x-rayed -- before you eat it. For a simple Halloween Fuck Odyssey, this is pretty good stuff. The two ladies don't get stopped by the cops or hook up with truckers or a motorcycle gang or have car trouble and get help from a farmer's daughter on the way home. They don't get back to Brandi's and make frenzied love until sunrise. No, they scrub off their makeup, take showers (alone), brush their teeth, and go to bed (also separately). But they both sleep with big, satisfied smiles on their faces. For an explanation of the smiles, read the story, even if Halloween is already over. Ratings for "Trick or Treat" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Trick and Treat: Halloween 1980" by Celeste (Reposted by Bookman Archives). http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1997/5020.txt This story is by the OTHER Celeste, not by the prominent sex goddess who writes reviews on a.s.s. Here we have a story about three college women living together. One has been down in the dumps because of a recent break-up; and then right before the Halloween party, the sexier chick becomes suspicious about the fidelity of her boyfriend. So the first woman is going to dress like the Invisible Woman and try to seduce the boyfriend of the second woman -- one of those soap opera moves that so often work out well. Anyway, the guy takes her to the attic and fucks her brains out, but the other woman fails to show up; but who cares? Some of the scenes from the seduction are unusual and interesting. For example, how would you react if a woman you were flirting with filled her celery stick with dip, ripped a whole in her costume, and inserted the snack into her pussy? Anyway, a good time is had by all. Ratings for "Trick and Treat" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Halloween Party" by WifePose (wifepose@aol.com). The husband has been begging his wife to wear in public her cute little French maid uniform. His cock practically jumps out of his pants when she agrees to wear the costume to the Halloween party and to let nature take its course with the other merrymakers. Things go pretty much as planned, and she makes it with Robin Hood and his roommate while her husband watches. They never see these two men again -- but maybe next year at the party they'll get equally lucky. Ratings for "Halloween Party" Athena (technical quality): 7 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 * "Costumes" by Lord Malinov (malinov@mindless.com). http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1997/5182.txt The author does an excellent job making the lewd and lovely, lithe and lascivious Diana seem eminently fuckable long before the real action commences. Rarely a day goes by when Diana doesn't surprise the narrator, and today she has decided to brighten their daily ambiance with a simple but tasty -- er, tasteful -- orgy. However, the main action occurs in her retelling of her first multiple- partner debauchery, while the narrator stimulates her to orgasm. In fact, if you are currently taking a course where you are required to report on a story that runs parallel to the Canterbury Tales, this one might be a good selection. The tail within a tale takes place at a Halloween party during which inhibitions have disappeared and people are using sexually explicit tactile clues to guess the identities of the still-masked people. As usual at such fictional parties, a good time is had by all. The titillation of sex with known-but-unknown sexual partners is extremely well done. The author has orchestrated an orgy in a manner that would make Mark Aster and the Allen Sisters proud to participate. Ratings for "Costumes" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Going Home" by Kim (kim@nym.alias.net). http://baird.pair.com/kim/home.htm This romantic, sentimental story may not score high on the peter meter; but it's a very well written, touching story that takes a serious look at what life after death may be like for the dead person and the loved one who is left behind. There's really not that much to say about it. You should read it not when you're looking for an orgasm, but when you're in the mood for a serious thought or two. Ratings for "Going Home" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Predator: A Tale for Halloween" by The Bear (thebear@io.com). http://baird.pair.com/baird/predat11.htm Gary is seated at a bar on Halloween, looking around at all of the people in costume. He himself is wearing a rubber mask of Quasimodo, but not the kind and gentle Quasimodo of the insipidly revisionist Disney film. This mask shows a tortured, scarred, angry face -- the face of Quasimodo as he must have looked when he murdered his master, and when he went into the charnel chamber to die with the dead Esmerelda in his arms. Gary likes the mask, because it makes him look on the outside the way he often feels on the inside. Gary is a dysfunctional person. But he is safe, because in his back pants pocket he has a very large knife. Finally, Gary sees The Girl for tonight. Her smile reminds him of his sister, a real slut whore who had always smiled like that before that one night. How do we get from here to a small, brown cat going unnoticed out through the dance club to the street? Well, it's Halloween! You'll have to read the story to find out. Ratings for "Predator" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Queer Halloween" by Vickie Tern (VickieTern@aol.com). http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1998/16795.txt http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1998/16794.txt http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1998/16793.txt Jerry is a fucking, two-timing son of a bitch. Or at least he WAS. However, Jerry has a wife who doesn't just get mad; she gets even. And in a Vickie Tern story that means Emasculation Station! The revenge unfolds at the company's Halloween party, to which she forces him to go as a gay man, while she goes as a shameless slut. This author is a genius at transgender complications and clever ways to humiliate and subdue wandering husbands; but this story didn't catch my fancy as much as some of the author's other stories. On the other hand, it's still a very creative Halloween story. Ratings for "Queer Halloween" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 * "Ghost" by Wgnmkr (Wgnmkr@aol.com). http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1997/1538.txt A guy goes into a haunted hotel room; and while he naps, a ghost with a raging hard-on possesses his body and gives him erotic dreams. When he wakes up, he jerks off. It's a simple but interesting story. Ratings for "Ghost" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 * "The Body Swap" by Dawn (dawn_tg@hotmail.com). Guest review by BillyG. {Note from Celeste: http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1997/2870.txt This was sent to me as a text file. The title on the story in this text file was "The Body Swap," with no author listed. After BillyG wrote this review, I tracked the story down in DejaNews, where it was listed as "The Switch: A Bewitching Tale of Gender Reversal by Dawn <dawn_tg@hotmail.com>. PLEASE put your name and the title of the story with your manuscript - preferably on the top two lines. Otherwise, people will simply be unable to find your stories.} It has happened to me several times that I've wanted to experience what it was like to be a woman. These have always been in those tender moments of sexual ecstasy and transportation when ego lines were blurred, when I lost definition of where I ended and my lover began. In those moments, I've wondered what it would be like to experience such sexual bliss as a woman. When Celeste gave this story to me for review, I thought it might approach such light- hearted and sensuous considerations. I'm sorry to say, that was not the case. At the outset, let me say that this story is well written with a strong plot. A plot, I might add, that grows increasingly dark and for me, a little disturbing. It is not a sexy story -- in fact, there's almost no sex in it at all. In brief, it's about a strong- willed woman, Erica who is, as it turns out, a witch and her less- than-strong husband, Steve. The witch proposes a body swap, just for the experience. The resultant new Erica, the former Steve, turns out to be an ultra feminine who delights in her new status and more, becomes totally submissive and dependent on the new, super-male Steve. The story takes on a darker side that for me, was not attractive. Those males who would rather be female might not understand that those of us who are content in our maleness might find the obvious direction of this story unsettling. At the conclusion of the story, it had become evident that it was a modified transgender story with elements of non-loving domination. For all of that, it's compelling and moving. Ratings for "The Body Swap" Technical Quality: 10 Plot & Character: 10 Appeal to reader: 5 (Marks off for the uncaring and manipulative tone of the story.) * "Private Tasting" by Artie (artie@netgate.net). Guest review by Mike Hunt. http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/artie/www/PrivateTasting.html Psst. Wanna read a story about wine tasting? It could be educational, depending on your level of knowledge about wines and, uh, witches. Yes, there's a bona fide witch here in the story, who drugs and seduces and turns the taster into the tastee. But the story goes from Point A to Point B, with none of the interesting side trips that either the wine tasting or supernatural themes could present. Too bad. OK, so I'll cut the writer a little slack, because Halloween approaches, and drugs and witches are encouraged this month, at least in my church. But really, in the other 11 months, who would care about a pedestrian story that glosses over the magic that could be witchcraft while plodding through a sequence of "I obey" "You obey?" "I will obey" (repeat 3 times) that makes the Nutritional Content Chart on the back of my Rice-A-Roni box look positively interesting by comparison. I'm being too harsh. It's a decent story, but falls into all the obvious traps: the physical description of the female comes in the opening set-up. There's no cloak and little dagger in the story. Convenient appliances just happen to be available (the witch even has a handy blood-testing unit to scan for herpes! --not to mention an electric wine-chiller in the cottage in the hillside.) Just saying someone's a witch doesn't make them a witch; it's up to the writer to paint it all in. The writer, artie, didn't. Uh, what was that twinge in my shoulder? Ratings for "Private Tasting" Athena (technical quality): 9.5 Venus (plot & character): 7 Mikeus (appeal to reviewer): 7 * "All Souls Night" by Marawuti [novella] (Reposted by Bookman Archives). Guest review by Green Onions. http://www.brainkick.com/~marawuti/soulnite.html {Note from Celeste: Wulf is a recurring character in this author's magic and sorcery stories. I gave "Night in Vosgraad" high ratings in CR 89.} "My name is Wulf . . . and I am what might generously be called a creative freelance contractor. What this means in real terms is that I lie, cheat, and steal (usually from people who deserve it, mind you -- I have some integrity) to make a living." Sounds like the beginning of a classic Bogart movie, or a Chandler piece, right? Our Hero's not exactly what you'd call a 'gentleman'-- he's been through his ups and downs and just doesn't fit too neatly into the mainstream of middle-class Litharnaian life with its grimy inns, busty barmaids, rusticated yokels, ancient traditions, overweening central governments and just about every imaginable Weird Creature this side of H.P. Lovecraft. Have you ever wondered what would happen if Robin Hood had been crossbred with a curious mixture of Bogart, Marlowe, and James Bond and the resulting swashbuckler's DNA got accidentally spliced in with that of the sheriff in Mel Brooks' 'Blazing Saddles' (don't forget to add the obligatory Eye of Leslie Nielsen and a tiny pinch of Alfred E. Neumann's giggle)--just before our _potpourri_ protagonist falls into a time tunnel transporter and gets unexpectedly beamed back into the world of _Dracula_ because the transporter's operator was too busy masturbating and reading a.s.s. on her laptop to pay any attention to the controls? I bet you have. And if so, then this witches' brew of harmless erotic literary fun is for you ("_Bon Appetit_!"). Um . . . did I say "harmless?" Well that doesn't mean that our friend doesn't occasionally end up tied to the bedpost overhearing one tall, busty, blond vampiress (think Brunhilde masquerading as Dolly Parton--or is it vice-versa?) explain in a suitably sultry voice to her companion: "Human blood is an exquisite intoxicant, and blood taken when a human is at the height of ecstasy is the finest you can consume. The master spared this one so that you could have him, and see how passion can make the blood hot and delectable." But I'm getting ahead of myself. The story begins on its namesake of 'All Souls Night' in Litharnia, whilst our hero is out not-so-innocently plying his questionable trades when he meets Khaera, a young (but not _too_ young) barmaid "with a graceful, wavy cascade of ravenswing hair, and dark, wicked eyes that latched onto mine as tightly as a dwarf's fist around his last gold coin." Therein begins a chain of bizarre, violent, sexy, scary and satirical circumstances which eventually (in the tradition of J.R.R. Tolkien and Monty Python) take Our Hero on a Great Quest. Like James Bond, he's accompanied by a female sidekick (Livia) whose life he's saved in the natural course of being a superhero. It's hard not to notice that Livia bears a remarkable physical resemblance to the young Mia Farrow ('Rosemary's Baby'). <RRRRRRRRR---IIIIIII-----PPPPPPP> (That's the sound of a record being scratched as the phonograph is suddenly stomped on by a lurking raven.) Actually this is the nineties and we don't have record players any more, so those descriptions were way off base. In this gender- swapping modern equivalent, it's _her_ quest, she rescues _him_, and he's *her* sidekick. ("'Ye Gods. Save a man's life and he thinks he's your frigging husband!'") To learn more about their travels, travails and triumphs, you'll have to read this story for yourself--but if you don't mind violence and enjoy any of the genres involved (humor, gothic, satire, horror, fantasy, adventure, or just plain erotica), you'll like this extremely funny, ironic, dynamic, vivacious and well-written sexy novella. I usually like to annoy authors by ending my reviews with a few officious remarks regarding possible improvements to the work, but in this case I fear that I am almost certainly dealing with someone whose magical literary powers might turn me into a silent pillar of quivering bloodspattered salt were I to even conceptualize a mere monosyllable of such blasphemous blarney. So I ain't gonna misbehave: instead I'll save my sin and head for the Chronicles of Litharnia--a place wherein I'd advise Ye, O Hallowed Reader, to tread most carefully in deed. Ratings for "All Soul's Night" Venus (plot & character): 10 Athena (technical quality): 10 Green Onions (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "The Fearless Vampire" by Poison Ivy. Guest review by Mike Hunt. http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1997/5192.txt http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1997/5191.txt I've seen enough of them, and I've hated almost every one. Stories told in present tense, I mean. "I feel your hands on my body. You move to kiss me. Our lips touch." That sort of melodramatic nonsense. There's something that just doesn't ring true about 'present tense' stories, but authors who write that way say "I just type at the keyboard and describe what's going through my head, so it's in present tense." I remember someone (Celeste?) saying the trouble is that the reader isn't sitting in the author's imagination in the present tense, so while it may be interesting for the writer it rarely works for the reader. I don't often get past the first couple paragraphs of these stories, frankly. In fact, I HATE them. So why did I love this story? Poison Ivy lets me inside her head. Really inside, believably inside, and I begin to feel what she feels as she suffers life's daily mundanities. I'm reminded of Taria's "Walls Have Ears" where the kid is going "Fuck fuck fuck fuck, I have to take out the garbage" except in this story it"s fear in the elevator, loathing the fat coworker, waiting for the 5:00 whistle, or any number of other everyday moments brought to life. Here, somehow, present tense works, and it's a refreshing change. The title sets up an expectation which doesn't pay off until the last 10% of the story, however, and I couldn't help being distracted wondering when the supernatural, or the horror, or whatever would finally appear. When it did it was somewhat of a letdown, especially considering how much I enjoyed the first part of the story. That said, it's a dandy, and if you're in a semi-Halloweenish mood, try this one on. To give you a summary would be fruitless; the title doesn't quite guide you either. "The Fearless Vampire" is mostly story, a little sex, not too much vampire, and sort of fun for a cold dark night in October. Ratings for "The Fearless Vampire" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Mikeus (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Love You Forever" by Rahul L Iyer (Rahul.L.Iyer@rose- hulman.edu). The guy's fiancee dies in a car crash two days before Halloween, but she returns from the dead on that Great Feast to make love to him. This story needs a lot of development. Ratings for "Love You Forever" Athena (technical quality): 7 Venus (plot & character): 6 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 6 * "Masks -- A Horror Story" by Tom Bombadil (stbush@iglou.com). http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Collections/ASSTR_Collection/Tom _Bombadil/Tom_Bombadil.The_Masks.txt This story arrived the day after I posted my Halloween Special Issue of Celestial Reviews; but better late than never! The story begins with a John contemplating his imminent demise -- that is, he is waiting to be killed as part of some kind of ritual that evening, after being held in chains for a year since last Halloween. We don't initially know the complete rationale, but it sure sounds spooky -- and morbid. In stark contrast, this first plot alternates with another in which Wally and Jennifer are participating in a festive soiree being conducted by some student athletes on the eve of All Saints Day -- that is, some football players are having a Halloween beer bash. A vampire countess and a beautiful witch crash the Halloween party. Needless to say, these two are the real McCoy. The connection between the two plots is that the party crashers are recruiting for their next cycle of human sacrifices. This story is certainly vivid and well written; but it's not for the weak of heart -- or stomach. Don't say I didn't warn you! Ratings for "Masks" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Meeting Amanda" by Backrub. http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/BitBard/www/forray/backrub/amanda.html Here we have what my psychology professor referred to as an approach-avoidance dilemma. (When the prof told us about it, she talked about pigeons; but I'm pretty sure I still have the idea right.) I had never read a Backrub story I _didn't_ like; but I had never read a vampire story that I _did_ like. The tension alone, of course, would have made a less sophisticated woman cum in her panties; but I was wearing none. Therefore, I boldly went where I had never gone before.... What I like most about Backrub is his/her use of language and imagery: "From twenty feet away she looked like a living statue, weathered brown but taut and strong. Her short black hair barely moved with her movements." That's beautiful. The yet unknown woman was coming to life for me, but remaining mysterious. The imagery remained vivid as the story got hotter. To find out more, you'll have to read the story. I still don't plan to look for vampire movies, but I do plan to read more Backrub stories. And for some reason I just remembered it's about time for me to give blood again. Ratings for "Meeting Amanda" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Intimate with the Vampire 2.0" by Rocket88 (rick84@ mindspring.com). A story like this has two strikes against it when I start reading it. Strike one: I don't like senseless pain as a part of sexual relations. Pain and violence are reasonable under the right circumstances; and I'll even grant that there are occasions when it can be pleasurable to be either the giver or receiver of pain. However, I think people who enjoy being tortured by another person often have serious emotional problems. And so I expect the author of a story that involves pain or violence to show me that there is a point to this activity. Strike two: I don't believe in vampires. I find "Dracula" so boring that I have never watched the entire movie. I think the notion of vampires is generally silly. Under these circumstances you may be surprised to know that I really liked this story. Strike two evaporated first: lots of things that are generally silly can become interesting if I suspend my disbelief and if the author does a good job of presenting the story. That's what science fiction is all about. For that matter, that's what most of this newsgroup is about. My other objection evaporated just as easily: sure, there was pain and violence in this story; but it occurred in a surrealistic context that seemed to have a point to it. If I granted that there may be preternatural beings that have the power to seduce people and steal their souls, then this kind of activity made perfect sense. If the author's goal was to give me nightmares or to make me live in fear or anticipation that things like this might happen to me, then he has failed (I hope!). However, if he wanted to entertain me with a damned good story, then he has succeeded. Now, here's my favorite part: this story was originally submitted about two months ago. Here's what I said about it in CR 45: "As I have said before, I am not an aficionado of vampires, werewolves, witches, or other preternatural forces. Nevertheless, I think this story has considerable potential --especially for people who understand the ground rules of vampires better than I do. The problem with this story is that it lacks even rudimentary proofreading. The author is obviously intelligent, and so he/she attempts to use fairly sophisticated ideas and sentence structures to convey his/her plot. But the mistakes are so glaring as to convince me that the author simply doesn't want to spend the time to make the story reader-friendly. I mean, does the author really think that it makes sense to "lye" in a motionless embrace? Lye is a chemical that cleans my plumbing. And then near the middle of the story I read these lines: "The fire grew more intense. MailFirst....Save As... She said. MailTheres pleasure.Save As... And with out another word she opened her mouth and gently covered mine." This garbled writing may be the result of a faulty mailer rather than poor writing skills; but it certainly is annoying. In addition, throughout the story the verbs are frequently screwed up. As I said earlier, the author is obviously intelligent; and so he/she sometimes starts using a past perfect tense or the subjunctive mood correctly, but then all of a sudden we're in the present tense and indicative mood. There are several instances of misplaced modifiers, like this one (which also contains a comma splice): "It was if she never used these feet to walk, scented and soft, I put her toes into my mouth using my tongue to wet them." Literally, this sentence means that the guy sucking the toes smelled nice and was soft; and I doubt that's what the author intended. A few lines later we hear about "the beating of her hart." A hart is a male deer. What does the author really mean here: "...my mind soured as I clung tightly as the sweat that gummed my body to hers was causing my arms to slide." I think the guy's mind "soared", but the sentence clearly says that it turned sour! Here's one more that I kinda liked: "My flesh was ripped and I needed to explode, I wanted orgasm, I started to beg to her. Mailplease dont stopSave As..." Finally, I think a succubus is a ghostly visitor that goes under the person being visited; this critter sounds more like an incubus. {Note: I was wrong about this; the author was right. I checked.} "I don't derive sexual satisfaction from making fun of authors' mistakes, and I don't mean to give the impression that I want to humiliate this author. For me to say that a vampire story has potential means that it _really_ has potential. I myself recently spelled "waist" incorrectly in Celestial Reviews (although I was actually copying the words of a different writer). Mistakes happen. But when mistakes accumulate, readers get annoyed and wonder why the author hasn't gone to the trouble of preparing the text properly. Creative ideas are the most important part of a story, and I think this story may have creative ideas. But there's no reason why creative ideas cannot be presented more coherently than this. "It's not just English teachers who get upset at this. English teachers may be the only ones who know why they're upset; but readers in general will find this presentation to be annoying. I urge this author and others like him/her to take advantage of my offer to find free volunteer proofreaders. This could possibly have been an excellent story if the author would have given it the care it deserves. (Rating: 4)" As you will notice from the title, this author accepted my invitation to receive proofreading assistance; and that's why this is labeled version 2.0. There are two major differences between the present and the previous version of this story. First, the grammar and style no longer stand in the way; the reader can now react to the ideas of the author and can feel the emotions that the author wanted the reader to feel. Second, I don't know this for certain, but I imagine the proofreader challenged the author by asking him to clarify some of the ideas that originally seemed unclear. It is important to point out that these improvements are not just something that please English teachers. Ordinary readers - no, I'll go further -- even borderline imbeciles who themselves communicate only by grunting and yanking on their penises would have been mainly confused by the original version but will enjoy this story in its present format. If this sounds like an advertisement for my proofreading service, so be it! Ratings for "Intimate with the Vampire" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "The Warlock" by Rocket88 (Rick84@mindspring.com). An immediate problem that I had with this story was that the text was full of enigmatic characters that were symbolized by squares on my screen. These were very distracting. I used the global replacement function on my word processor, and I quickly and automatically changed them all to open quotes, end quotes, and apostrophes. I encourage you to do something similar to minimize distractions when you read this story. This story involves witchcraft and the "black arts." I view witchcraft as it is treated in this story to be a form of fairy tale. Because I have not been excited about fairy tales since my early childhood, I have lost touch with many of the assumptions that underlie witchcraft stories. My most current knowledge of witchcraft is derived from Elizabeth Montgomery, to whom I am deeply indebted for indirect sexual pleasure, because that enchanted creature has often improved my husband's mood while he has watched reruns of "Bewitched." I have some sincere friends who say they are witches and practice a pagan religion, and they object to stories that focus on magical black arts. I guess that's more than you need to hear; my point is that I am reviewing this story as an outsider -- a non- enthusiast who is generally unimpressed with spells and arcane ceremonies. I am reviewing this story primarily because the author emphatically asked me to do so. Because of the reservations stated in the previous paragraph, I approached this story with considerable trepidation. I was pretty sure I either would not understand it or I would hate it. The story focuses on Gina, an attractive woman, and Louis, a visiting professor at the University of Chicago with a specialization in antiquities. Louis is really a warlock (a male witch). Gina is especially fascinated by his whips. I found the description of how Gina got interested in spankings during her childhood to be interesting and realistic. Louis needs to administer a ritualistic beating to a consenting female human in order to achieve some sort of rapture and return to a different world. He attaches the willing Gina to an unusual torture device and administers the beatings, which she enjoys immensely. Rapture comes, and poof! he is gone and she is transported back to her home in Rockford, Illinois. Actually, I was fascinated by the story. I achieved a zero level of pre-orgasmic moisture, and I don't recommend that anyone actually participate in such activities; but I was fascinated. I think bdsm enthusiasts will enjoy this story, and it enabled me to achieve a better understanding of sadism and masochism. As with many other stories, however, I am still struck by the constant repetition of silly, distracting grammar errors that could easily have been removed prior to posting. Not a bad story. (Rating: 7) * "Diana" by Mary Anne Mohanraj (moh2@midway.uchicago.edu). http://www.mamohanraj.com/Stories/diana.html The young man, just a few years out of college and a bit disillusioned with the way his life has gone, has gone off for a couple of days of hiking in the Berkshire forest. Thinking he is alone, he is surprised to hear the sound of a woman's voice; and when he follows that sound he comes to a clearing in which there are seven blonde women and one red-head -- all beautiful and all naked. What has he stumbled onto? He realizes that he won't be welcome, and he starts to retreat; but suddenly he is summoned to join them. Does this sound interesting? Then read this well-written story. If you're familiar with Robert Frost's poetry, you'll probably get a little more out of it than you would otherwise. And it won't hurt to recall that Diana was the Roman goddess of the hunt and of the moon and the protectress or women. I love this author! I'm tempted to make my students read this story for English class, but then I'd have to explain where I got it. Actually, it will be easier simply to forbid them to read it; they'll enjoy it more that way. Ratings for "Diana" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Wet Dreams" by Backrub (BCKRUB@aol.com). http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/BitBard/www/forray/backrub/wet.html The protagonist in this story has the power to sense out women's dreams and their thoughts that occur when their senses are not fully awake. He is able to have wakeful sex with them and yet leave them with the feeling that it was all a dream. (The author doesn't explain how the protagonist prevents conception; but that may be expecting too much from an a.s.s. story.) The story describes in vivid detail one specific encounter. Would this kind of power be a blessing or a curse? You read the story and decide. The author does a great job of combining a sense of the mysterious and the realistic throughout the story. It's almost like a dream itself. Oh, no! Maybe I'm dreaming right now. Maybe HE's controlling this dream! You don't think that warm feeling I'm getting in my pussy.... (Rating: 10) * "Tales of the Seeding" by Wollstonecraft. http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/BitBard/www/forray/wollstonecraft/seeding. html This is a set of narratives from the different perspectives of people who are extremely unsophisticated in their sexual knowledge. We could be dealing with cave dwellers, with people on a remote island not yet conquered by "civilized people," or with aliens whose sexual accouterments resemble those of humans. What is fascinating is that the descriptions all refer to sex (sometimes in very graphic terms) without ever using either the formal (intercourse, vagina, etc.) or informal (fuck, cunt, etc.) terminology that we normally encounter in such stories. The author does an amazing job -- I caught only one mistake, where the author used the word "come" to describe an orgasm. In addition to playing with words, the author does an excellent job of building anticipation and creating a mood of mystery. I loved it. This is a really creative, ingenious story. (Rating: 10) * "Porno TV: The Munsters" by Shelby Bush (stbush@iglou.com). http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1997/194.txt The author simulates an episode from the old Munsters TV series. There are three separate plots, which blend together, just like on TV: (1) Herman and Lilly get it on with the electrodes connected to the generator in the headboard, (2) Grandpa turns into a bat and gets some pussy, and (3) Marilyn loses and regains (!) her virginity. I have reviewed about a thousand stories, and this is the first one in which a woman REGAINS her virginity. Ratings for "The Munsters" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9.5 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5 * "Bed and Breakfast" by RC (74734.271@compuserve.com). http://www.rcwrites.com/bedbrk.html A man arrives at a New England bed and breakfast inn; the owner assigns him to a back room; and the owner's daughter becomes visibly upset over this assignment. What's her problem? I always tell my students that when the author catches their attention like this, they should try to guess what might happen next. Then as new information emerges they should adjust and modify their initial guess to suit the new context. I have done this in the past with Deirdre's stories, and so I'll try again here. So what's the problem? One possibility is that the room is simply adjacent to the daughter's own room. She might be a shy lass, and having a well-hung stud next door might make her nervous. That hypothesis sounds dull. Or the room might previously have been occupied by someone near and dear to the girl -- perhaps her first true love who subsequently died under unfortunate circumstances. This hypothesis sounds good. Or the room might be haunted. The second hypothesis sounds best so far. I'm glad I mentioned that last possibility, because Abigail (the daughter) grabs the visitor and warns him that when the place was first built, the owner's daughter resided in that room. She had been arrested and executed. Her ghost still haunts that room. Our foolhardy boarder laughs gently and resolves to stay. It's time to revise my hypotheses. It's almost certain that a ghost will appear. One possibility is that the ghost will have her merry way with our wayfarer and send him happily on his way. {Since the narrator lived to tell the story, he probably won't die during sexual ecstasy.} Another possibility is that Abigail will join in the festivities. A third possibility is that Abigail IS the ghost. I like this theory; but I'd have to see her naked to verify it. More likely, Abigail might be intimately involved in some way with the ghost. Soon we find out the ghost's crime: having sex with another woman. Colonial New Englander's frowned on that practice, which was akin to witchcraft. Interestingly, at his point I had to pause: was the boarder a man or a woman? I glanced back over the earlier text. Although I had assumed this was a man, the text didn't tell. A few lines later I read that bras and panties from the suitcase were strewn about the room. So we have either an unusual man or a woman here. I'll go with the woman theory. This forces a major shift in my thinking: we now have a (presumably) middle-aged woman, an attractive young woman, and the ghost of a young woman who had been executed by Puritans for lesbianism. I'm going to stop telling the story now. As you know, ghosts operate under different rules in different stories; and part of the fun of a ghost story is finding out what those rules are in the current tale. All I can tell you now is that this ghost is capable of engaging in sexual activities that are extremely satisfying to human females. Ratings for "Bed and Breakfast" Athena (technical quality): 9.5 Venus (plot & character): 9.5 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 * "Night of the Wolves" by Lysander (lysander@vnet.net). http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/World_of_the_Darkside/F avorites/lysander.txt "You'll be fine, Judith. As long as you let your instincts guide you." The band of women have been engaged in an orgy of dancing and sex with one another; but all this is simply a preparation for the arrival of the wolves. The monthly ritual consists of the women fucking with the wolves from the time of the animals' arrival until the moon goes down. I have never been an enthusiast of bestiality stories, but this one was interesting -- to say the least. Before I read this story I knew, of course, that Romulus and Remus (and probably Wolfman Jack) had been raised by wolves, and I had read "Call of the Wild," but my knowledge of wolves as potential sexual partners was limited. Now I am much better informed. The story is well written. The author says this is his most popular story. However, I don't think it is his best; I think "Summer Dreams," "Grey," and the unfinished "Droit du Signeur" are all better. Nevertheless, this is an excellent story. While reading it, I found myself mumbling internally, "This is silly! Why would a wolf act like that?" This is exactly what the author wanted me to think. By the end of the story everything had fallen into place. Ratings for "Night of the Wolves" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9.5 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Princess" by Parker. http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Collections/Old_Joe%27s_Collectio n/TG/Princess.txt This is listed as Parker25. It has been posted recently, and so it should be available on Deja News. I hope someone will repost it quickly on a.s.s. Stephen is a computer geek who has been invited by Janice Sweet to be her date at Cindy Parker's Halloween party. Janice is the most beautiful girl in the school, and she has just broken up with the most handsome jock. Stephen is tempted to back out when he finds out that Janice wants him to dress like a girl while she dresses like a guy; but Janice is very persuasive. She promises him lots of sex later on; and she's not lying about that! The costume goes on very nicely; Stephen has become Stephanie. Janice hurries off to help Cindy prepare for the party, and Stephen arrives alone at Cindy's house in time for the party. Only it's not a costume party! He's the only one dressed in a costume; but nobody notices, because he looks like a real girl in normal clothing. There's no way out; so he continues to play the female role. It turns out that Janice is simply using Stephen to get even with Biff the football jock for dumping her. Use your imagination. How would a pretty little bitch use a dork dressed up like a cute little girl to get even with her brutish ex? That's right! And pretty soon he finds himself doing the entire football team. At least he gets to be a cheerleader. Ratings for "Princess" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9.5 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 * "The Addams Family: Eddie Comes to Visit" by Shelby Bush (stbush@iglou.com). http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1997/195.txt This story is actually a combination of "The Munsters" and "The Addams Family." Eddie Munster comes to visit the Addams children. After some enjoyable torture, Wednesday Addams gives head to her brother Pugsley. Just as Eddie is about to get the thrill of his life from Wednesday, the full moon takes effect; and Eddie runs off to the bathroom, where he turns into a werewolf -- actually, a werewolf cub. Although she's a bit distressed at Eddie's disappearance, Wednesday takes the cub to her room. Since this is a sitcom episode, Morticia and Gomez are engaging in raucous sex in the background; and Uncle Fester is jerking off somewhere in the shadows. Gomez has a French fetish. Morticia speaks imperfect French. "Manger moi. Respondez s'il vous plait" is close enough for Gomez; after all, this is a sex fetish, not a French language lesson. Meanwhile, Wednesday has taken Eddie the Werewolf to bed, thinking he's a stray puppy. When she starts to masturbate, Eddie behaves in a beastly manner. Meanwhile, Cousin Itt joins Morticia and Gomez for a "menage e'tois." I don't know if incest is a meaningful concept in a family like this. What could be the logic behind an incest taboo in a family that could only be improved by genetic mutations? Kay Sarah Sarah, as the French say! If you know absolutely nothing about the monster shows of the 1960's, you might get lost in this story. But I enjoyed it immensely. And there's more to come! Ratings for "Addams Family" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9.5 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5 * "Halloween Story" by RC (74734.271@CompuServe.Com). http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1998/11948.txt Diane goes to a Halloween party dressed as a sexy maid. She is the center of attention until she meets the woman dressed like Elvira the vampire. She can't help herself. She leaves with the vampire, and then strange things happen to her. Ratings for " Halloween Story" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9.5 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 * "Boo!" by PleaseCain (pleasecain@aol.com). http://members.aol.com/pleasecain/hackhous.htm Warning: This story contain gratuitous sex and violence. But hey, what would Halloween be without gratuitous sex and violence? It's an interesting setup; I'm surprised I haven't seen it on this newsgroup before. The young man is playing the part of a vampire and the young woman a witch at one of those haunted houses that spring up around Halloween to traumatize and thrill the little children of America. Business is slow, and the boss closes early and tells the vampire and witch to lock things up when they leave. One thing leads to another, and pretty soon the sex gets steamy, and then she decides he wants him to act like a real vampire. And that's only for starters! Next comes the gratuitous sex and violence. Ratings for "Boo!" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Brown Mountain Incident" by Charles Baudot (wboyden@freenet.vcu.edu). http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Collections/nifty/gay/adult- youth/brown-mountain-incident This story combines a placid man-boy sexual encounter with a ghost story -- actually with an old urban legend theme. The man is traveling through the mountains and comes upon a 10-year-old hitchhiker who is cold, wet, miserable, and lost. He takes the boy in. The sexual contact is so innocuous that only a person who has an allergic reaction to any mention of sex with an underage child would react with hostility. Nevertheless, the guy probably is technically guilty of sexual abuse of a minor -- except that it's hard to prove a case against a guy who has had sex with a ghost. I plan to look for more stories by this author. Ratings for "Brown Mountain Incident" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 * "Temptation" by PleaseCain (pleasecain@aol.com). http://members.aol.com/pleasecain/eden.htm Hmmm... What kind of story is this? A lovely woman is sleeping beneath a tree. She is a part of the beauty of nature, and a disembodied voice caresses her and meditates on her loveliness. Nothing really happens. It's all anticipation. This is a completely different kind of story -- perhaps more a poem than a story; but it's very nice. Ratings for "Temptation" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "True Love" by Dafney Dewitt (ii361@cleveland.Freenet.Edu). http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Collections/ASSTR_Collection/Dafn ey_Dewitt/Dafney_Dewitt.True_Love.txt This is not really a sex story. It's really a story about true love gone wrong on Halloween; but since it's written by a regular author of sex stories, I thought I should include it in the Halloween issue of Celestial Reviews. The boy is being interrogated by the police about the murder of his girlfriend. She died from a blow to the head from a shovel in a cemetery, and her body was buried there. The boy claims to be innocent. Read the story for details. Ratings for "True Love" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 * "Haunting Memories" by Gaetana (gaetana@aol.com). http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=540988616&fmt=text Two adolescent boys and a girl sneak into a house that they consider to be haunted. They find no ghosts, but they do discover that some transients have been living there. They steal a few items and run home, where they are severely punished by their parents. Nobody has sex with anybody else; but some pornographic magazines are among the stolen items they steal, and the girl gets a severe spanking from her father. Since this story was cross-posted to alt.sex.spanking, I suppose the spanking is supposed to be the erotic part of the story; but no own reaction was that there was no sex at all in this story. I won't deny that some spankings can be sensuous; but it doesn't make sense to me to believe that it's a sexual experience every time a child gets a beating from his or her parents. This child broke a rule; she experienced pain; and she pretty much decided not to repeat the offense. If this were all there is to sex, then it would be a lot easier to convince kids not to do it until they grew up! Ratings for " Haunting Memories" Athena (technical quality): 9.5 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 6 * "Goodnight Kiss" by Ben Zonah (benz@fan.net.au). Through some sort of confusion, this story has not yet appeared on alt.sex.stories. I hope the author tries again. A young woman who has been lost in the forest is saved by a mysterious young man. As a reward for his kindness, she makes love to him in his rustic cabin. Since this is a special Halloween issue of Celestial Reviews, you would be correct to assume that there is an element of mystery to this story. However, since this story depends partly on surprise, I cannot tell you what that element is. You'll have to read it for yourself. Ratings for "Goodnight Kiss" Athena (technical quality): 8 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 * "Ghost: The Long Goodbye" by Unknown Author. The guy has died in an auto accident; but as his spirit leaves the body, it decides to stop off and say good-bye to Rachel, his one true love. Unfortunately, when the ghost scoots into Rachel's window, she is making love to someone else. So he goes into the other guy's body and has sex with Rachel, but he finds this experience to be unsatisfactory; and so he goes back to the hospital and enters the body of a woman who looks like Rachel and makes love to an insipid intern. Then he goes into somebody else's body and calls Rachel on the telephone and tells her to come on down to the hospital, because he's dying. She comes, but he isn't dying after all, and she remembers him making love to her in the other guy's body, but then he dies. I think. My impression is that there's a creative idea in here someplace, but it's hardly worth the trouble to look for it. Authors should proofread and polish their stories a little bit before they post them. Ratings for "Ghost: The Long Goodbye" Athena (technical quality): 4 Venus (plot & character): 3 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 3 <end> -- Pursuant to the Berne Convention, this work is copyright with all rights reserved by its author unless explicitly indicated. +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+ | alt.sex.stories.moderated ----- send stories to: <ckought69@hotmail.com> | | FAQ: <http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/faq.html> Moderator: <story-ckought69@hotmail.com> | +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+ |Archive: <http://assm.asstr-mirror.org> Hosted by Alt.Sex.Stories Text Repository | |<http://www.asstr-mirror.org>, an entity supported entirely by donations. | +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+