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Message-ID: <25501asstr$964559410@assm.asstr-mirror.org> From: nexuswilson@nightmail.com X-Original-Message-ID: <20000725193604.28746.qmail@box211.nightmail.com> Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} {REVIEWS} Nexuswilson 1 Date: Tue, 25 Jul 2000 17:10:10 -0400 Path: assm.asstr-mirror.org!not-for-mail X-Is-Review: yes Approved: <assm@asstr-mirror.org> Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories,alt.sex.stories.d Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d X-Archived-At: <URL:http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2000/25501> X-Moderator-Contact: ASSTR ASSM moderation <story-ckought69@hotmail.com> X-Story-Submission: <ckought69@hotmail.com> X-Moderator-ID: newsman, gill-bates ckought69@hotmail.com {ASSD}REVIEW - NEXUSWILSON 1 All the reviews in this file may be used by the authors, their webmasters or other agents in order to promote the relevant story provided that the credit is given to me using the 4 lines at the end of this file. ArthurGThomas@aol.com $3000 NUDE PHOTOS Read it before anything else I downloaded today and was not disapointed. Did you just write this or are you taking them out of the can? Fantastic stuff, can't wait for the next one! Scores (of 10) Reading enjoyment ********** Style ********* Spelling/Grammar ********** Storyline ******* Originality ********* Wood Factor ****** Kristen078@Hotmail.com Coming To America This is a very nice story, and well written, but 2 points jarred for me and spoiled it somewhat, both easily cured without affecting the story. 1. Nikki may be a peasant but is educated and would most certainly have locked the door to the Lear jet toilet before masturbating. 2. Rachel should not be black. Nikki would never have met a black person before and would be scared stiff of her. I assume you are american and have always lived with blacks in close proximity. I have a lot of experience of people meeting blacks for the 1st time and fear is always the first barrier for them to overcome. Overall a very appealling story and enjoyable. Scores (of 10) Reading enjoyment ******* Style ******* Spelling/Grammar ********* Storyline ******* Originality ******* Wood Factor *** Pleasure Cruise -- Dessert artie@netgate.net This is a very jumbled story, and confusingly written, almost as though the writer is recounting a story from real life, but is forgetting to include some vital elements he knows but we don't. It may possibly have more appeal to those who are specifically part of the scene described, if it actually exists anywhere. The second half of the story is much more coherent and would make quite a good stand alone shortie without the opening jumble. Ursula seems to be the main charcter of the story but just disappears half way through. The characters on the stage seem to move in and out of the story almost at random, some might as well never have been mentioned. At quite a few junctures I found myself thinking 'why was that mentioned - what is the significance'. Reading on the answer appeared to be that there was none. Overall confusing, but improving to the end. Scores (of 10) Reading enjoyment *** Style *** Spelling/Grammar ****** Storyline **** Originality ******* Wood Factor ** The True Story of Goldilocks and the Three Bears (m/f, M/m, zoo, spank, sex, n/c) From: YLeeCoyote@lycosmail.com para 2 wandered is the first of a raft of spellcheck errors. Try writing sentences with more than 12 words! The story has all the fluidity of a machine gun. A bit more plot development and attention to the humourous element would not go amiss either. Overall a fairly original idea and story with massive scope for improvement. Scores (of 10) Reading enjoyment *** Style *** Spelling/Grammar ***** Storyline ******* Originality ******* Wood Factor * Significant Others From: Kristen078@Hotmail.com This is probably the least enjoyable story by this writer I've read. The style is terrible, flitting from one person to another without warning. The storyline is boring and unbelievable. The character motivation bits are very weak. The only interesting bit is where Henry uses his hand on Kims balls, who then just sits back totally failing to repay the compliment. Overall, very unappealling and not very enjoyable. Scores (of 10) Reading enjoyment *** Style * Spelling/Grammar ****** Storyline *** Originality ** Wood Factor **** Restless (F/teenMM) (1/5) {ASS} NEW STORY From: <mystory@inet.att.net> A couple of stupid proof reading errors and a few poor choices of phrase spoil this slightly, and the dream bit has been well and truly done to death but for all that this is a really easy read, and very erotic. The attempt at self justification on the part of the lady is a nice touch, but the boys get a bit self indulgent once they have her in her daughters room. Up to that point they are in a 3 way thing, after that it is very much her and them. I suspect many women will find this enjoyable. Makes a fine story as a stand alone. No obvious follow on, so I look forward to a repost of the other 4 alleged parts! Overall a very appealling enjoyable story which left me right in the mood to do something similar. Unfortunately (or not depending how you look at it, I suppose) I did that about 3 hours ago and she's 'not a sex machine, you know'!!! Scores (of 10) Reading enjoyment ******* Style ****** Spelling/Grammar ****** Storyline **** Originality ** Wood Factor ******** CONFESSIONS {of rape and murder!!!} or love-in-the-sixties Mkarl2000@hotmail.com This is a very viscious and nasty story, but well written, with an excellent and frankly believable storyline up to the point where they leave with the 2 girls. The last couple of paragraphs are totally unbelievable and out of synch with the rest of the story and should be re-written. If you can read snuff and incest stuff without negative physical reactions then this is one of about the best of the genre I've read so far. But then most of them are utter crap pure stroke shorties. Overall a very appealling story and enjoyable. Scores (of 10) Reading enjoyment ***** Style ******* Spelling/Grammar ******** Storyline ******* Originality ******** Wood Factor **** Beth Nese's Mornings regressing@Hotmail.com The writer says "Please help me add to and finish this story. I need ideas. I have writer's block." Frankly the best help you can give this poorly written drivel is with the delete key. What a complete pile of poo! If you like stories of women in puddles of cum with no psychological insite whatsoever you will probably still hate this. Overall, total crap, unworthy of the penny or so it took to down load. Scores (of 10) Reading enjoyment * Style Spelling/Grammar *** Storyline ** Originality * Wood Factor ** America's Most Em-BARE-ASS-ING Home Surveillance Videos: The PILOT mkarl2000@hotmail.com This story had the potential to be extremely erotic or funny or both but was ruined by all the totally unbelievable female hatred and pregnant with puppies bollocks. It would surely be much improved if she was treated like any other victim of such a show is, and co-operates nervously with her exposers, trying to make the best out of a bad thing. As it is the story is probably only enjoyable to people with a bit of a problem! Overall, not very erotic, abusive and definately for the minority who despise women. Scores (of 10) Reading enjoyment ** Style **** Spelling/Grammar ********* Storyline **** Originality ********* Wood Factor * Wife Husband and Bi Guy cr4ubi@hotmail.com This is a very naievly written story, of the tens of ejaculations and orgasms variety. It does not ring particularly true, but this is not helped by the writing style which gives the impression of someone whose english is pretty atrocious and who knows how to use a spell checker, but is unfortunately unable to tell which of the choices it offers is the correct one! The whole story needs a damn good proof-read. There is a fair bit of repeating and some bits could do with a re-write to get over what the writer obviously intends. Having said that the story is somewhat unusual subject wise and reads fairly well. It even seems to have a point, but whether the story is bait for the writers fantasy encounter or a straight plea to relive the story as claimed is for the respondant to judge. Strangely I found it very erotic, despite not being that way inclined myself! Overall a story that could attain much higher marks with more work. Scores (of 10) Reading enjoyment ***** Style ***** Spelling/Grammar *** Storyline ******** Originality ********* Wood Factor ******* TRUE STORY From: anon_x@my-deja.com Definately one for the lover of supremacy and humiliation between males! Spelling good with no checker errors but grammar a bit suspect. Some very odd lines in places. However story runs smoothly enough and is quite believable. I imagine this would be a great ego boost to any man who feels he has been discriminated against in real life! Overall a very, enjoyable read. Scores (of 10) Reading enjoyment ***** Style ***** Spelling/Grammar ****** Storyline ***** Originality **** Wood Factor ****** The $50,000 Sister Threesome (MFF, Bond, Reluc, Greed) From: ArthurGThomas@aol.com A small little store? (para 2) Need should be needed when Belinda licks Michelle. Another great story but $50,000 seems a bit excessive even by AGTs standards! He should definately get more for the money! I also felt that the sisters decision making process was a bit rushed. In previous stories AGT prides himself on keeping to his side of the bargain and I felt that he forced them further than the deal allowed this time. I think a slight injection of originality is required for the next story as I had a pretty good idea what would happen after the first 3 or 4 paragraphs of this one. Overall another masterful insight into the mechanics of greed, but with symptoms of being rushed out. Please take your time with the next one! Scores (of 10) Reading enjoyment ******* Style ******* Spelling/Grammar ********* Storyline ***** Originality ****** Wood Factor ******* This review is by nexuswilson@hotmail.com if you would like a free read then the reviewers stories are on his site at www.pornoz.com/alterotica ________________________________________________________ Get Your Free, Private Email at http://www.nightmail.com *********************************************************************** Nightmail is sponsored by Friend Finder Personals. With over 5.0 million free personals ads, Friend Finder is the largest personals site on the Internet. Get your free ad and meet people today at http://www.friendfinder.com Never forget a date again! 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