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Date: Sun, 9 Jul 2000 01:10:09 -0400
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The Annex Reviews, 7/7/00
by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com)
Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh OR
http://home.aol.com/ladycyrrh
The stories:
Alvi's Inspired Daydreams 05010 (Dr Mentor): M/F, F/F+, D/s, bond,
tickle, fantasy
Brother, Busted, Parts 1 and 2 (Dr. Wu): Ff/m, femdom, teens, bond, cbt,
tease
Untitled (Tc): M/M, teen, athletic, cockfight
Website Review: The Big Gulp Story Page
Alvi's Inspired Daydreams 05010 [B+/A-]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 6/19/00
Author: Dr Mentor
Address: dr_mentor@redneck.gacracker.org
This story came with a long, rather stern foreword warning us: "This
may count as a "stroke" story, or not. Actually, I deliberately started out
to do that. The whole idea of the "Daydreams" was to have an excuse to
write short, hot vignettes. The characters seem to be taking on a life of
their own. In any case, I plan to have a high ratio of erotic content
over character development and plot. Live erotically, and tell those who
excite you that they do! The caution in the subject line is because this
story includes women who have undergone surgical genital
modification, though the surgical event is not described here. No
knives, blood, or gore here. You just get to see the fun they have with it
after it has been long healed." So immediately I thought this was going
to be one of those ultra-bizarre piercing/tat/kidnap/sex slave tales, and
of course I went for it like a duck goes for water. Imagine my surprise
when it turned out to be more like an English children's fantasy gone
D/s -- it had the preciousness of "The Hobbit" and the otherworldly feel
of Narnia and Madeline L'Engle, but without all the magic and talking
animals.
Alvi and Robbyn are two highly sexed sisters who live in the cutely
named "town of Sheauxville, a suburb of New Domington, in the
province of Biyendee in the People's Republic of Genitamia" which
exists in "Multiverse 915.807 + 836.808i /bis, now LIVE on the
OmniversalRealityWeb." Aside from the punny names, it's actually a lot
like Earth, with dress shops and school buses and everything. Anyway,
young Alvi has a thing for daydreaming about D/s and bondage
scenarios involving ropes stretched tight across women's crotches, and
the story is, in fact, a story-in-story about the daydreams that occur to
her as she binds herself the same way:
[She] became quite aware of the friction of the seam of her shorts
rubbing on her lacy panties. It generated a subtle vibration on her
outer labia, just enough to be a pleasant tickling. She needed to pay
attention to suppress a giggle. Now that she was paying attention to it,
the vibration seemed to get stronger, inspiring her to imagine spending
the whole day in a kind of tickle torture. She wondered, and almost
hoped, that it would arouse her with a sexual hunger, so she could have
the experience of the woman in the story. That imagined fate further
fueled her erotic interest, making her both eager and nervous about
her day at school.
The story continues into another fantasy where she's tied and tickled by
members of the "Sisterhood" and forced to wear a dress with burlap
patches rubbing against her sensitive parts.
How well you like this story depends on how much you're into being
scratched, tickled, rubbed, or irritated by various objects. As the author
said, no real plot, but the tickling/bondage scenario was well done, and
the "surgical modification" rather mild (clit hoods have been notched to
allow access more readily). Despite the warnings, it was all rather
inoffensive and polite. So if you like tickling, check this out.
Brother, Busted [B+]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 6/23/00
Author: Dr. Wu
Address: jim@caddell.net
I was of two minds about this story. On the one hand, it was written well
and had a good ear for dialogue; on the other, some of its assumptions
were fairly ridiculous, and the POVs were poorly handled.
Kyle Lowe is masturbating as he listens to a Britney Spears CD with his
sister Kim's dirty panties over his face when his trim, "ball-busting"
Aunt Viv catches him in the act. Kinky thoughts immediately flash
through her head. She threatens to tell his Dad -- who will respond by
taking away the $40,000 red BMW he uses to drive to school -- unless he
obeys her orders. Telling him to strip and wait at attention, she takes
aside 13-year-old Kim and gives her instruction in what they are going
to do next:
"Now there are two ways to control men," Viv explained. "First, you
can be a cock tease. I know you've heard the term. It means getting a
boy
all excited, but then not letting him have an orgasm, so that he gets
very frustrated. Do you know about boys and orgasms, Kim?"
"Aunt Viv, duh! I'm not a baby!"
"Of course not, honey. And the second way to control a man is through
causing him pain, specifically pain in his testicles. A boy's balls are
unbelievably tender and sensitive, and sometimes even a little tap at
just the right angle can be very painful. But Kyle is in a position where
he has to take whatever is dished out, so he may get much more than a
little tap tonight. Now tell me honest, Kim: If I set it up, can you kick
your brother in the nuts so hard that he thinks he's gonna die?"
Kim swallowed. God, she didn't know what to say. She'd never even
considered it. But then suddenly she did know what to say. "You bet I
can! I can make that bastard sorry he ever stole my panties. When I get
done with him, his poor balls are gonna be permanently stuck in his
stomach!"
The story then proceeds as a nicely handled cock n' balls n' asshole
teasing tale, with bondage.
The feelings of the young man were the highlight of the piece -- a must
in a D/s story, which one usually reads to experience the thrill of
submission without the messy real-life complications -- but the
viewpoints of the sister and aunt, though also well done,
overcomplicated the story, and destroyed the surprise of what was going
to happen next to the male teenager, because the two have already
discussed it amongst themselves. It would have been much better to tell
the story only from one POV, the aunt's, Kim's, or Kyle's. And though the
dialogue in the story felt true-to-life, other elements defied credibility
-- like a teenager who is of driving age needing a babysitter, or the
same parents buying the kid a $40,000 car...or that high school girls
would be more impressed by a red BMW than a shiny red sports car.
There was also the question of exactly why Aunt Viv is so into femdom.
If the story was just in the kid's POV, it wouldn't have mattered; but the
since the story purports to know what makes her tick, too, it's a big
shortcoming.
I've always held that D/s blackmail stories should either have a light,
cartoony touch or a heavy, serious, over-the-top one; in both cases
realism is for the most part unimportant, because the D/s'ing is the
thing. But this story tried very hard to be "real" and that's where it fell
slightly short, for me at least, because it wasn't quite real enough.
Untitled [B+]
Where posted: ASSGM
When posted: 6/27/00
Author: Tc
Address: eneffbhlen@yahoo.com
There being no male equivalent of catfight that I know of, I decided that
this story's subject matter was cockfighting. I couldn't find a title in the
file.
Two athletic young men, Johan and Shoun, are kidnapped and taken to a
sinister gym to be trained for the illegal sport of "caging" which means
trying to rape each other without inflicting permanent damage. ("It is
not wrestling, for you only win with a coupling pin. It is not fighting,
because drawing blood is forbidden. All efforts must be made to keep
your opponent intact.") The two are surprised at first, but then take to
the concept. All the men are young, hung, and go around naked; both
sex and fighting is encouraged. Junk food is available 24 hours a day
and beds are everywhere and in full view of everyone else. And there
are so many different places to see and cocks to ogle!
This story seems to be based on the same premise behind the movie
"Fight Club" and it shows promise. The writing was rough at first, but
improves when the two arrive at the complex, and there seems to be a
budding romance as well. The author doesn't dwell on the unpleasant
aspects of being kidnapped (fear, anxiety, hunger, missing family and
friends, etc.) and instead shows the protagonists curious and interested
in learning about their new situation. Chances are the readers will be,
too.
Website Review: The Big Gulp Story Page
Address: http://www.casti.com/big-gulp/
Contact: biggulp@transwarp.com
Date reviewed: 7/1/00
This website has been around for a while -- at least as long as I've been
on the net -- and as far as wacky sexual fetishes go, it's one of the
wackiest. In a nutshell, the site is devoted to stories where one
male/female/thing swallows another male/female/thing. Aficionados
call it vore (short for voracious.) Every once in a while the genre crops
in ASS, and even more rarely in mainstream fiction (British writer
Clive Barker includes a vore scene in his fantasy novel Imagica, where
a man and woman simultaneously devour each other.) To the average
reader of neterotica, however, it's probably pretty novel and offbeat.
As a fetish, vore is very broad. The stories range from overtly sexual
(complete with orgasms) to no sex at all. They can have het, homo, or bi
leanings and often incorporate elements of mind control, D/s, and
bondage to coerce the victim into being eaten and immobilize them via
the mouth cavity, lips, and tongue. Vore can be androgynous as well.
The hapless victim usually winds up being engulfed, normally a
"female" act, but in an aggressive way that seems male, and they are
often penetrated by the tongue on the way down, a traditionally "male"
act -- both sexual possibilities neatly combined into one.
This archive features roughly 200 stories, broken down into the
categories of who eats who (female eating male, male eating male, etc.,
with "ambiguous" as one of the genders.) To give my critique I picked
seven stories from several different categories. In style they ranged
from horror to humor; many had SF, fantasy, and furry themes. On the
whole the stories were literate and care was taken with their creation.
Many had a distinct British or European feel as regards style and
grammar, which leads me to believe the website is based in Europe, or
that vore is a fetish that appeals more to Europeans (as lovers of fine
food in general?) Because it's a given from the intro to the site that
someone or something is going to wind up eaten, the entertainment
value of the stories comes from discovering how and why.
In "Babysitting" the victim is a young woman who accepts an offer from
a well-to-do yuppie couple to look after their daughter. The kid turns out
to be a Lolita with "full lips, glossed red" who drugs the heroine, then
seasons her in a hot tub, and, well, eats her:
She tried to kick but Michelle had her feet firmly in her mouth. The red
pouting lips began to suck as Amy was pulled inexorably forward. Her
calves followed and then Michelle's lips were at her thighs. Her tongue
caressed each part as it moved, tasting, titillating. Amy thought she was
too large to be eaten this way but watched as Michelle continued to suck
her in. Her thighs had disappeared and the tongue was again at her
pussy. It teased and tasted and despite the terror, Amy came again.
Michelle's hands came up and caressed Amy's soft basted buttocks.
The writers of these stories know full well the impossibility of what
they write -- victims aren't cut into bite-sized pieces and chewed, but
swallowed whole like python bait -- yet on the whole the premise works,
sort of, considering the act of eating is an extended metaphor for sex,
and the tone is a magic realism/horror one.
Another story, "Tasty Justice" by Angel, concerns a female angel of
mercy who eats a male criminal to save his soul (he's about to be
apprehended and shot to death by the police) her rationale being
"inside me you will have plenty of time to repent before you die. Then I
will digest your sweet body and bring your soul to heaven, instead of
hell." Like most of the victims in these stories, he's digested pretty
quickly. This seems to be an integral part of the fetish -- no one sticks
around long enough to make it into the small intestine -- and may
express a desire for oblivion, or a sub's wish to merge completely into
their dom, losing their identities forever. In Pi-Zero's "The Hungry
Quarterback" the act of eating is also an act of dominance -- the
quarterback of the title maintains his star standing by eating his
teammates, absorbing their vitality into himself. (This story was one of
the more sexual ones -- he buttfucks the victim on the way down his
throat. Don't ask me how.)
Vore fans are not without humor. Geoff Balme's "How to Swallow a
Woman" tells us how to do just that, in three increasingly difficult
swallowing maneuvers (The Slider, the Dive, and the Hippo) assuming
the girlfriend is willing, of course. And EnVeloper's "The Shower" is
cinematic horror kitsch of the highest caliber as a showerstall eats, and
digests, a nude girl. (As with all of these stories, what sounds gross is not
as gross as it actually reads, because the physical sensations are
hypothesized for sensual pleasure, not pain, even though the victim is
unwilling.)
In a website this size, however, it's inevitable there are going to be dogs.
In Argon15's "The Cheerleader's Revenge" the gals are pissed because
their jocky boyfriends have been being mean to them, so they cook up a
substance in the school lab to shrink them down to snackable size. This
one was the most poorly written of the bunch and the most mean-
spirited, approaching a kind of vore femdom as the guys get coralled by
pillows on the bed and eaten one by one.
The best of the bunch, at least for me, was Kimniki's "Lord Coil" which
began as an excellent fantasy story in the vein of such Brit goth writers
as Storm Constantine. Earth has been invaded by extra-dimensional,
devil-like creatures called Imps and Annette, a young guerilla from the
human side, has been captured by them for a strange ritual that will
end the Imp-human war. Up to that point it was A+ material for the
writing quality and fantasy background alone; what pushed into the
stratosphere for me were the orgasmic delights the heroine experiences
as the ritual proceeds (she's being swallowed by a giant sentient snake
the size of an oil pipeline):
I TAKE YOUR STRENGTH....I TAKE YOUR BODY INTO MY OWN....YOU GIVE ME
YOUR VERY SOUL WOMAN.... Lord Coil's voice now matched her own for
pleasure and passion, and she could feel his heart hammering in a
massive pounding rhythm that shook them both. Then she felt him
tighten again, and he swallowed once more.
"aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhh!!," Annette cried out as
she felt her breasts pulled into his throat. Instantly they were pressed
hard against her chest, the warm wet muscles pressing on every single
cell of her tits, seeming to suck on her rock hard nipples. She felt his
lips slide past her underarms and her arms were forced straight up by
the pressure of his mouth. She felt no pain....only a sense of tension in
her shoulders which faded quickly as another burst of warmth flooded
into her soul and a wave of weakness shuddered up her body. Her
fingers came unlaced, too weak now to hold each other. The cinnamon
spice order of his breath was now very strong. Then she felt his tongue
moving at the back of her neck, and felt its tip touch her face.
Read this; you may discover a fetish you never knew you had.
The site has grown a lot since I first discovered it. It now boasts a staff
of
six, a message board, two chats, and a listing of IRC addresses for various
"characters" if you want to do some online vore role-playing. The entry
page is fairly simple and easy to navigate -- though I'd prefer
something more sophisticated and less clinical than that animated
cartoon mouth -- but it gets the job done, and you don't have to click
around a million times to get to the stories. Each story has a helpful one-
sentence descriptor telling you who gets eaten and how, and there's also
a large gallery of scans and artwork that frankly didn't pack much of a
punch for me. But then I'm an art major and get impatient with
amateurs anyway.
If you want to see how much fun vore can be, check this out.
Interface: B+
Content: A
Will I visit again: Yes.
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