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The Annex Reviews, 6/24/00
by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com)
Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh OR
http://home.aol.com/ladycyrrh
I would like to thank everyone who wrote to me about the Dejanews
problem. Things may get worse, but at least they are working, in a way,
for now. Also, last week's story "Highjacked Sorority Initiation" was
mistakenly credited to Matthew. The real author of the piece is Gym Dog
(gym_dog@hotmail.com)
One my readers has also pointed out a problem to me. Sometimes I put
down ASSG (alt.sex.stories.gay) when I really mean ASSGM
(alt.sex.stories.gay.moderated.) So if you have read a review of a gay
story and went to ASSG to find it, try ASSGM instead, or the ASSGM
archives (http://www.assgm.com). I never pick up stories from ASSG
these days and probably never will again. So, sorry for the mistake.
The stories:
The Private Party, Part 1 (Snake): M/F, couples, exhib
Spaceways 1 and 2 (Cryptococcus): M/M, teen, twins, first, SF
Time Raper 1 and 2 (Storysman): M/F rape, SF
What I Loved About Barbara (Abelard): F/M+, rape, BDSM, wifeslut, snuff
The Yard Dog's Fantasy (Mastrkink): F solo, mast, D/s, anal, exhib,
self-punish, voyr
The Private Party, Part 1 [A-]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: May 2000
Author: Snake
Address: snake138@hotmail.com
An attractive married couple in their thirties receive an invitation to a
swanky party on gold-embossed paper. Right away they realize this is
no ordinary party, as when they call the number provided to RSVP, they
are informed that they have been "specially chosen" and are given
passwords. As a reader of a lot of sex stories, I thought, "Hmmm" and
chances are, you would too. Anyway, they get all dolled up, go to the
mansion, and meet the three other couples who have also been chosen
to attend. Strangely, their host is not present. After dinner, they settle
down to watch a young man and woman dressed as newlyweds have sex,
then musical chairs begins with the wives, each moving from place to
place to "get acquainted" with the male guests as the sex show continues.
Of course, everyone is gorgeous, fit, and/or distinguished looking.
From the first part of this story, I'd say much more sex is in store, of the
swinging and interracial variety (one of the couples is black) and if you
like such stuff -- in an elegant, upscale setting I'll add -- then you'll
like
this. I would have liked to see less stiffness in the prose and more
character, but overall this was a worthwhile read.
Spaceways, Parts 1 and 2 [A/A-]
Where posted: ASSGM
When posted: 6/19/00
Author: Cryptococcus
Address: cryptococcus@mailcity.com
In Earth's future the human lifespan has been expanded by hundreds of
years and the "gay gene" eradicated from the human genome. (Whether
this brave new world is a utopia or dystopia is up to you.) These
expanded lifespans make people very leery of taking physical risks, and
also makes them a less horny, and the scarcity of the "gay gene" leads to
some unforeseen complications...leading to a chronologically old but
physically young couple discovering that their unborn son is a gay
throwback. Since there aren't any other gay people around for him to
pair off with, the couple opt to have the zygote split into twins so they
won't have to go it alone. If you think this sounds like a juicy setup,
you're right, and in Part 2 the twins, now teenagers, try to puzzle out
their sexuality. They are fated to be space explorers, and more of this
story is promised.
I thought this SF/sex story was well written and had some nicely-
thought out speculations; however since it was a sex story, I would have
liked to see some more *talk* about sex in these beginning chapters, if
not physical sex. I know that many times in a longer work it takes a
while to get around to the sex; this I understand. But sensual language, a
kinky set-up, or dirty talk, if done right, can really whet the appetite,
and give us an idea of what is to come.
Time Raper, Parts 1 and 2 [A+]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 6/15/00
Author: Storysman
Address: Storysman@aol.com
Website: http://storysman.web1000.com/storyshm.htm
Like the above, this story dealt with SF...but an "Outer Limits" type of SF
where an otherworldly invention/event/alien pops into real-life small-
town America and creates moral complications among the characters.
In this story, the otherworldly invention is time travel. A piggy,
sexually frustrated guy invents a device that lets him travel 10 minutes
into the past, and not being able to attract women by normal means, he
uses his new ability to rape them:
The flesh of the girl's delicious legs moved enticingly out from
underneath the short, peach skirt as she walked. Brian watched her
from across the street, wanting her.
The girl continued happily on her way for another block or so,
smiling as the occasional passerby turned his head as he passed. She
liked this little town. The people were friendly, and the rustic
atmosphere helped her ...
Her thoughts were cut-off as she was sharply jerked off the walk.
Brian threw his prey into the alley. She fell to the ground with an
exclamation of pain and fear, her panties flashing from underneath the
short, peach skirt. He fell onto her, grasping the strap on her right
shoulder that held up her matching sleeveless top. He flashed her the
knife he held in his other hand.
The girl was about to scream, Brian slapped her hard across the face,
then ripped down her shirt, exposing the right cup of her bra.
"Don't make a sound, bitch!"
"Please don't! Please don't!"
After the rape, he resets the device to the time just before the assault,
and goes on his merry way with the victim none the wiser.
But for all the unlimited access to attractive (and otherwise unavailable)
women this gives him, he still desires Jennifer, a neighbor girl whom
he grew up with, who let him see her thirteen-year-old tits on one
golden summer day. But the glimpse turns out to be the hero's downfall,
because he becomes obsessed with her even though she sees him only as
a friend. He carries the obsession for years, torturing himself by
thinking of the many men she's fucked, and when he hears she's
getting married, he decides to use the device to rape her.
I have rarely seen a story on ASS that moves as well as this does, very
spare and clean without an ounce of unnecessary detail...very very
readable. And it kept you reading, just to see what would happen next.
This is why I gave the story an A+ despite its numerous typos and
missing words, its cliches, and the inexplicable change of the hero's
name from "Rick" to "Brian." In a piece this good, what's a few goofs?
Also deserving of an A+ was the way the author caught to a "T" the
interior life of a bitter, sexually frustrated male adult who is turned on
by women and women's breasts, but infuriated they won't give him the
time of day. This is eerily similar to the psychosexual profile many real
rapists have -- that all hot, attractive women are theirs to use, as if their
frustration gives them entitlement to take what they want. I can see
how such a man with a time machine would act just this way, and how,
in the arrested emotional development it implies, he would carry a
hopeless obsession for years or even decades. The rape scenes
themselves were realistic too, with the guy even yelling out "Oh baby!"
and "Oh you fucking bitch!" as he revels in the sex like a pig wallowing
in a feeding trough. If all this was intentional, I think the author was
saying some very deep and unpleasant things about male sexuality, male
anger, and male hatred/idolization of women. They were not pretty, but
by god they were true. (Lest you flame me, for *some* men, not all.)
If the story ran with the setup the author gave it with a full head of
steam, and ended with the consequence of the hero's actions -- he
forgets in the frenzy of the moment to reset the device, and is caught, or
realizes the futility of rape and comes to some conclusion -- it might
have been a true masterpiece. But the author's insight and irony, if
insight and irony they were, failed in the last quarter of the story. After
raping his childhood love, the hero realizes it's love he really wants
from Jennifer, not rape. So he backs time up to the moment of the
attack, but instead congratulates her on her upcoming marriage, and
goes off to invent a new device that lets him go back into tome even
further, into his thirteen-year-old self, so he can start off the
relationship with Jennifer on the right foot. This time, instead of
merely glimpsing her tits, he finagles a fuck out of her, the idea being
the first frustration -- denial of his sexual heat -- caused all the others,
and that now he's had his fantasy fuck, he will gain her undying love.
I had a big problem with this the ending. It was pat and sentimental,
and negated all the insight and danger of what went before...it was a
cop-out. It seems to say, if only we could turn back time and be a little
bolder, everything will be fine. But the story wasn't about the
individual characters and their fulfillment and lack of fulfillment, it
was about universal human nature. I fully expected the hero to be just
as piggy at thirteen as he was as an adult. Really.
What I Loved About Barbara [A]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 6/16/00
Author: Abelard
Address: Abelard_fra@hotmail.com
This story also dealt with taboo subject matter: rape, heavy childhood
sexual abuse, and the effect that sexual abuse has on one's sexuality, and
one's husband.
The narrator begins by stating he married his wife, Barbara, because of
her "quiet, haunted look" which arouses his protective instincts; she's
also a callow 18, while he's 25. They make gentle, tender love for a few
months, then she drops a bombshell: she's been sexually abused by her
uncle and father for years, and that it is really abuse that turns her on,
not normal loving sex.
The narrator is flabbergasted, but tries to oblige her, rationalizing that
perhaps it is something she has to work out of her system, and that after
she does so, things will once again be OK between them:
All of this kept her happy for about another six months or so, and I tried
to slap her and hit her where the bruises wouldn't show, but it began to
take more and more to get her off. I'd have to throw her onto the floor,
and fuck her ass hard, and then cum on her face while I was pinching
her nipples...and still, sometimes, she couldn't have an orgasm. But
simple, gentle, loving sex...which was beginning to look better and
better to me...just left her absolutely stone cold...and even contemptuous.
I longed for the days when we crooned to each other, and kissed a lot,
and were loving with each other. She, on the other hand, began to
make fun of me for wanting it that way. And it began to piss me
off...After that, my attitude toward Barbara began to change. No longer
was she the pretty shy little girl I had married, or even the pretty, shy
little wife with a major fetish. I began to see her really as a slut, a
whore, an object to be used.
Eventually Barbara suggests a threesome with the narrator and his
friend Ralph, the men taking on the roles of her abusive father and
uncle. Things get rough but she comes and comes. Afterward, the
narrator thinks:
...I could tell that [Ralph] was feeling a little uncomfortable too. The
experience had been pretty intense, and not altogether positive...even
for him. I don't think he liked what he had learned about himself very
much. And I was beginning to feel depressed too. I had had an intense
orgasm, gone into outer space even, but, I mean, where the hell did we
go from here?
The author does a very fine job of contrasting the narrator's desire to
help his wife by participating in some violent and unpleasant sexual
acts with the fact he gets unwillingly turned on by them ( "[She was] a
little fuck doll, a hot, wet piece of meat to fuck and throw away. I loved
her and I hated her. She disgusted me and attracted me. I felt the need
to come IN her and ON her and OVER her and even THROUGH her. I
wanted to kill her and to save her." ) Here the narrator sets out to "save"
the virgin/whore from
herself, whereas in "Time Raper" the hero was trying to "kill" her; both
stories, read back to back, gave an excellent window into the male mind.
The story continues with the wife getting into heavy BDSM (with
meathooks and scars) and, like an addict unable to control herself,
progresses from bondage and physical punishment to talking dirty on
the phone and taking out ads in the swingers' section ("Fuck my wife
while I watch. Anything goes. Come in her ass. Tie her up. Beat her. All
races, either sex. Bring the gang") without her husband's knowledge.
Unable to stop herself from speeding downhill, she's doomed. One day
the narrator comes home to see...well, I'll let you read that for yourself.
The story concludes with a trial-like ending statement asking for
leniency from the court.
While some women abused in childhood try to put the pain behind them,
I have read that some attempt to re-enact it in an effort to exorcise it, as
the woman does in the story through BDSM, role-playing, and
dangerous sexual activities. Like "Time Raper" this story had some
unpleasant things to say about male sexuality, but said unpleasant
things about female sexuality as well.
The Yard Dog's Fantasy [A-]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 6/15/00
Author: Mastrkink
Address: mrledft@aol.com
Gwen, a young suburban wife, gets rid of hubby and kids for the
afternoon to attend to some serious D/s play from her email Master. She
goes into the bathroom, which has a large picture window, apparently,
giving Lester the lawn care guy an eyeful. He's come to do some weed
whackin', but by the end of the story, it's more than weeds, as she first
inserts a buttplug into her rectum, then smacks her ass with a ruler as
she masturbates.
This was a pretty hot fantasy -- the woman's part, that is; Lester's
alternating reactions seemed kind of superfluous, though not without
humor. But I felt more could have been done with the story. For
example, the admittedly hilarious notion of a pretty suburban housewife
falling under the spell of an internet dom could have been developed
further. I also fully expected the wife and lawn care guy to meet at the
end, in a humorous or embarrassing way; an exceptionally witty payoff
might have pushed the story to an A+ for me. But I guess the author is a
new one, or not quite sure of his or her style yet. Anyway, this was a
fun read.
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