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Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} The Annex Reviews, 5/31/00
Date: Wed, 31 May 2000 03:11:26 -0400
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The Annex Reviews, 5/31/00
by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com)
Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh OR
http://home.aol.com/ladycyrrh
The stories:
Rashid and kira (Viking Boy): M/F slave, hist
Blue Whale of a 'Fish Story' (mdkarl): f teen, zoo, pedo, preg
Civilized Society, parts 1 and 2 (Joe Camp): M/b cons, fantasy
Mom's Dirty Dancing (AnjingAnak): M/F inc
Jomadi: _To Explore Potential_ (Pseudonym Jomadi): F/m teen, BDSM, tort
Rashid and kira [B+/A-]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 5/24/00
Author: Viking Boy
Address: vikingboy50@hotmail.com
This story, which seems to be the third in a series about the same
characters, is set in the perennially popular mythical Middle East (see
the 5/27/00 Reviews for particulars) where slaves are fiery yet
submissive and Masters harsh, but fair. Rashid is a Greek officer in the
Sultan's guard and he returns after a long trip expecting to be rewarded
with kira, a slave whom he fancies. He gets her after a few minor
problems, and the rest of the story is devoted to whipping and all that
other good stuff.
This story was a little different than the usual run of the slave mill in
that the author tried to give the language an Arabian Nights feel:
He pushed on, until the three months were complete and He could fly
back to the Harem, back to her, to His reward for faithful service. He
beat His mounts, going through three strong stallions. He rode through
the nights, sleeping in the oases during the heat of the day, taking little
refreshment as He went. He was dust covered, road weary, yet
exhilarated, for every second, every league, He was closer to His kira...to
her coal black eyes, her luminous skin, her dusky pink nipples, her
cleft flowing with honey.
Throughout the story Rashid was Master, He, and His to denote his status,
while kira was uncapitilized, to denote hers. While fairly common in D/s
slave role-playing circles, in a story it annoys me. I can see how a story
told from a slave's point of view might deify the Master and grant him
the almighty capital 'M', but this one story wasn't told from any
particular POV, so therefore, why?
Blue Whale of a 'Fish Story' [B-]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 5/25/00
Author: The Depraved Canuck
Address: mdkarl@incentre.net
The Depraved Canuck seems to be a new writer on the scene intent on
taking up the M1ke Hunt gauntlet of fast-talking, humorous, in-and-out
heterosex, but with pedo and pregger leanings. Twelve year-old Angela
Collins has been knocked up by a blue whale while trying to liberate it
from the local aquarium in a "Free Willy" type scenario, and the
narrator of the story gives us the dirt on it as a roving reporter for
"Action News Team" which lets him simultaneously write the story and
leeringly comment on it (here he's throwing the girl's halting
statements back to her):
"You had no choice but to hold onto the boy Blue Whale's ten foot cock
with your arms and ride it as he fucked it and you into and out of the
girl Blue Whale's slippery, wet cunt. Even though the girl Blue Whale's
cunt was big, you still got a very rough ride out of it and your entire suit
was shredded off of your body so that you became completely naked."
Ooooo-kay.
It's an interesting way to tell a story, but frankly it was wasted on a plot
like this. Granted, the author says it wasn't his idea, but the story was
still idiotic and insulting rather than humorous, and retro in an R. Crumb
way...I
could almost imagine seeing it in one of my brother's old National
Lampoons. Of course, it *is* humor and not intended to be taken
seriously, but successful humor depends on how real and plausible you
can make an otherwise outlandish event, and this story hardly tried at
all...the mechanics of whale mating, for example, will ring false to
anyone who's had even a passing acquaintance with the Discovery
channel (the kid gets sucked into the female whale's vagina and
everything.) And outside of a gene-splicer, there's no way a human
female could get pregnant by a whale anyway.
So I didn't find the story very funny, and in fact, when I finished
reading it, I was very sorry I had, and felt kinda PO'd. But then I'm a
female, and being forced to birth a 200-pound whale calf is something
I'd rather not think about at *all.*
Civilized Society [A]
Where posted: ASSGM
When posted: 5/21/00
Author: Joe Camp
Address: idc90@hotmail.com
This story handles underage sex more respectfully. First in a series, it
sets up the existence of "Civilized Society," a sort of secret ruling
subculture with roots in the distant past. (Think Masonry.) Members of
the society are uplifted without being snootish about it, and have long
been major powerholders in business and politics. The twist comes with
how they maintain their moral purity, so to speak. Underage sex is
frowned upon, but only between males and females. Both young girls
and young boys are paired with same-sex adult mentors from about 8
onwards whose job is it to guide them into being adults, and that
includes sexually. This concept is introduced with the introduction
ceremony of Peter, a young teenager, to his mentor David:
"Citizen David Knight, do you wish to adopt Peter Morgan as your
Student?"
"Yes." I responded,
"Do you promise to continue training him in the ways of the Civilized
Society? To instruct him in the true history of the world? To love and
protect him into adulthood?"
"I do." I responded.
"Peter Morgan, is it your wish to be adopted by David Knight as his
Student and for him to become your Guide?"
"It is." Peter informed the gathering in his clear voice.
"Do you promise to diligently study and follow the ways of the Civilized
Society? To love and honor David until adulthood?"
"I do." he responded in a voice as clear as a bell.
"Citizens and young members, it is my honor to now enter the name of
Peter Morgan into the book as a full citizen under the protection of
David Knight. His name will be sent to all the Guardians of the Truth in
the world, to be entered into their books as a citizen of the Civilized
Society."
The plot is obviously a boy-love one, but the theme was handled evenly
and without exploitation, and may have been a kind of wish-fulfillment
on the part of the writer. The setup was almost science fiction in its
thoroughness, and I'm betting as the series continues, political thriller
elements will pop up as well. For that I recommend it.
Mom's Dirty Dancing [A-]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 5/20/00
Author: AnjingAnak
Address: anjinganak@aol.com
This story was one of those first-person "This really happened" ones. A
young man comes home from work to find alkie Mom in her Chinese
silk pajamas waiting up for him. They're both a bit on the white-trash
side (in the story, it's played for fun) and when son asks Mom's advice
on being on exotic male dancer, she shows him how it's done:
At this Mom gave my face a very light, playful slap. "Stay right there."
she said. The song was ending and she went back in the living room
and started it again. It took her a few extra moments to come back, and
when did I saw that she had changed out of her pajama bottoms and into
some panties. They were a light cotton material and high cut at the
hips. The panties were tight and I could see the outline of her pubic
mound. She looked so sexy I thought I would come in my pants right
then.
"How's this, Mr. Critic?" she said.
"Wow!" was all I could think to say, but it must have been the right
response because Mom smiled from ear to ear, then turned around and
bent over, tossing her long hair back and forth to the beat. The cotton
fabric strained against her pussy and I could see that her lips were
large and swelling just like my cock. She obviously enjoyed putting on
a show.
The setup was outrageous, but as the story progressed it became more
and more believable, until both son and Ma were doin' the dirty on the
living room floor, and yes, it was pretty hot. Kudos to the author for the
plentiful and realistic detail; with a plot and traditional story structure,
this could have been A+ material.
Jomadi: _To Explore Potential_ [B]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 5/23/00
Author: Pseudonym Jomadi
Address: mr_asher@hotmail.com
A teenage boy entraps a near-middle age female through a kinky
internet chat room. When she goes to meet him in person, he kidnaps
her and tapes her to a chair in his basement, intending to enact some
Master-slave BDSM fantasies, without her consent. That's how the story
starts, and after some menacing talk and preliminaries, the teen and his
friend start in with the clothespins and forced "yes Sir's" from Ms. Wet,
as they have renamed their victim.
This story tried really hard to be a dark cautionary tale--a woman goes too
far with her fantasies, and gets caught for it--but it wound up being
mean-spirited and overdone. The teens act more like suave juvenile
clones from "American Psycho" than real high school boys who would
snicker and use slang, which would have upped the story's anxiety
factor considerably: how could real teens do something like this? But
instead things proceed as in any other nonconsensual BDSM tale: the
dom always knows the right thing to say, the victim always comes
against her will. As a story it was acceptable, but missed the mark on
adding a new and truly scary twist.
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