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Date: Sun, 16 Apr 2000 05:10:11 -0400
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The Annex Reviews, 4/15/00
by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com)
Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh OR
http://home.aol.com/ladycyrrh
The stories:
Floating (Rino Rino): F/F, SF, sexfight
If You Spank Me...(Lady Casaloma): M/F spank
Professor Octagon's Wild Ride (Ludwig Octagon): M/F, Siamese twins,
toys
Titanic: Gentleman's Agreement (little Alex): M/m, movie (Titanic)
The Saga of Blanche, Parts I, II, and III (Saynesberry) M/F, fairy tale
Floating [A+]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 3/23/00
Author: Rino Rino
Address: rino149@yahoo.com
This is the first time I've seen a story labeled as "sexfight." I thought it
might be similar to "catfight" where two sexy women try to beat the
crap out of each other; if there's sex in a catfight, it's the D/s or rape
kind, with the spoils going to the victor. But sexfight, as I understand it
from this story, is a kind of role-play recasting sex as a battle, with the
victor being the one who creates the most pleasure in their partner.
Sounds positive to me.
This story also caught my eye because it was SF, and the sexfight takes
place in zero gravity on a space station. Cynthia and Katherine are two
gorgeous, substantially-built (so nice to see a description of women with
meat on their bones) mission specialists who are conducting a torrid
affair aboard the International Space Station. When their supervisor
orders them to get some exercise, they use it as an excuse for the kind of
sex that they love, beginning with a strip:
Cynthia lazily removed her shorts and panties. Her bush was a soft light
brown patch that clearly showed the lips of her sex, turgid and moist.
She split her legs slowly, and the pink nubbin of her clitoris winked at
Kat.
The story was more encounter than plotline, but this didn't bother me
because it was so well done. If people had sex in zero-G, it *would* be
like this, and for that it gets an A+ -- that and the creative use of
language, especially that winking clit.
Here a novel move is attempted that leaves one chick twirling on the
fingers of the other like a six-shooter:
Kat ducked between Cynthia's legs, and spread them apart. Then she
pushed hard, and started spinning Cynthia like a naked top on her
outstretched hand. She held her hand straight out, and laughed loudly.
Cynthia, her arms and legs spread wide, twirling slowly, the fingers in
her cunt like a pivot for a gyroscope. She moaned with increasing
loudness as the orgasm built.
If you like SF or F/F, give this one a look.
If You Spank Me...[A]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 3/6/00
Author: Lady Casaloma
Address: lacey95@hotmail.com
Website: http://www.geocities.com/Broadway/Balcony/9519
A businesswoman daydreams during a boring meeting of the spanking
her husband gave her that morning. That's it, but this was pretty hot
stroke that goes into detail:
She felt him pinch the other nipple. He increased the pressure,
squeezing his finger and thumb together harder and harder. Lacey felt
the pain start. She did her best to not to cry out and to let him do
whatever he wanted to her. He pressed harder and harder.
Lacey moaned.
Pulling the nipple outward, he again start pulling it further and
further out. Lacey could feel the skin of the breast itself stretch
as he continued the steady pressure outward. There was an excitement
growing inside of her at the same time. She had read stories about
this type of game and she was determined to play it out. Despite the
pain, she was feeling very excited.
"Tonight, I am in charge," Mark said. "Your body is all mine!"
Soon follow multiple **Swat**s and **Whack **s as Lacey is turned
over his knee, followed by anal sex that was also pretty hot.
Recommended if you want something consensual, but hot and nasty.
Professor Octagon's Wild Ride [B+]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 4/4/00
Author: Ludwig Octagon
Address: ludwigoctagon@my-deja.com
Professor Ludwig Octagon is a Doctor of Sexology and a rather befuddled
old gent. He's also an inventor, working hard on a patented Fuck
Machine. When two young neighbors of his, identical Siamese twins (!)
stop by after church, he invites them to try it out. Apparently they're
all had good times together before, and have no qualms about having a
good time again after Confession:
"How does it work?" asked Molly.
"Just sit here," I said, pointing to the saddle. "The machine will do
the rest. Get up on it, that's a good girl."
She slowly sat on it, letting the point of the hard rubber head slide
deep inside her, both she and Sally gasped as it filled Molly's pussyup
[sic].
"It's not as big as you are," sighed Molly, "but it still feels
good..."
"I want one, too!" pouted Sally.
"Okay," I sighed. "I should've known better than to not build the two-
headed model just yet.
This was an interesting idea, but it felt very truncated to me; I had the
feeling the author hadn't developed it as much, or gone as far with the
idea, as he or she could have. The story *was* pretty short, even for a
continuing series, which this seems to be. I suggest to the author that
they round out the character of the Professor AND his playmates a little
more.
Titanic: Gentlemen's Agreement [B+/A-]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 3/30/00
Author: little Alex
Address: alexmountain@hotmail.com
Having been to so many fanfic sites lately, I snapped this up right away
when it appeared on ASSM. Though fanfic is fairly common on this
newsgroup, seeing slash -- as this piece is -- is fairly rare, and seeing
slash based on "Titanic" is rarer still. In about 60 sites, I've come across
only 3 or 4 other stories.
Anyhow, the story begins when Jack Dawson -- Leo DeCaprio -- is
handcuffed to a pipe below deck as the ship is sinking, but when Roses's
evil fiancee Caledon Hockley comes in to gloat ("Was she good?") the
story takes a radical departure -- he rapes the kid as the price of his
freedom, then reneges on it.
The author handled the scene well. I've seen the movie, and could
actually imagine the characters acting this way, which is the point of
good fanfic, and you could tell the author enjoyed wallowing in the
pathos of the scene and the negative emotions involved. But. What seems
like a good idea is often not strong enough to make a good story, and
that's the problem with a lot of the fanfic I see. The authors are being
storytellers, as if they are seeing the story on a movie screen in their
heads and are telling it to a group of like-minded friends rather than
writers who seek to hook readers and draw them into their private
worlds by any means necessary. The former assumes the audience will
always be attentive and friendly; the latter, that the audience is
indifferent or hostile. It's a big difference, and leads to a certain
blandness and sameness on the part of the fanfic. All the stories sound
alike, as if they were written by the same author for the same audience,
whereas for non-fanfic erotica it's very easy to tell, say, an Ann Douglas
story from a Dimitri one, even though both may be about Batgirl, take
place in a comic-book world, and have the same plot.
Another thing that got on my nerves were the ever-changing tags for
the two men involved. Leo was boy, blond, Jack, Dawson, young man.
Evil fiancee was thirty-year-old, Cal, older man, Caledon. There's only
two people present. Make up your mind. And since when to rapists pause
to lube up their victims? Even if Leo *does* wind up enjoying it...
That said, I do admit I read the story to the end, and it may be of interest
to fans of boy rape stories, even though the rape is somewhat
romanticized.
The Saga of Blanche, Parts 1, 2, 3 [A+]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 4/7/00
Author: Saynesberry
Address: Saynesberry@aol.com
Coyreen, the Porn Queen, is a fading-fast triple X movie star who rose to
fame because she was underage (think Traci Lords); she's all ego, lips,
and toilet mouth. One day she is offed, and it's up to the detective
narrator of this story to figure out why. Clue: Coyreen was insanely
jealous of a beautiful rival named Blanche Snow, and has a computer
that tells her, in a cappella gospel harmony, she's "the finest queen
we've ever seen..."
If all this sounds like a certain fairy tale, you're right, and the fun in
the story came from the transposition of the traditional elements to
modern Los Angeles. There's a woodsman analog who sounds
suspiciously like Arnold Schwarzeneggar (he even drives a humvee)
and instead of a dark, creepy forest there's Watts, complete with a boys
n' the hood gang called The Devil's Dwarves And let's not forget the
Chandleresque tone of the narrator, which adds to the cartoony mood of
the piece. All this adds up to a very enjoyable read. Here Coyreen puts
her henchman up to the task of getting rid of her rival:
Coyreen parted her lips slightly, and allowed his cock to pop out of her
mouth. She immediately wrapped both of her tiny hands around the 9-
inch shaft, and began to move them up and down slowly, gently, almost
imperceptibly. She rubbed the head of his cock against her soft,
freckled cheek and crooned, "Oh, Vasily, you're such a good friend. And
you're such a big man! You'll do whatever little Coyreen asks, won't
you?" Before he could reply, the tip of her tongue was darting in and
out of the gaping hole at the tip of his penis. "Ahhh!" he gasped, "Y-
yes, Meestress, you know Vasily leeves to do your beeding!" Coyreen
moved her head down and nibbled at his balls, then sighed, "Oh, but
Vasily, this is such a big favor! I shouldn't even ask....." And now her
tongue and slipped beneath his balls, and was moving wetly toward his
asshole. "Oh! Oh, yesss, Meestress, I do eenythink for you, eenythink at
all! Vasily will invade Afghanistan for you
eef you ask!"
Loads of fun, and a good mystery too. I'm looking forward to the next
chapters.
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