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Date: Mon, 28 Feb 2000 02:10:03 -0500
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The Annex Reviews, 2/29/00
by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com)
Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh OR
http://home.aol.com/ladycyrrh
Hah! I fooled everyone, coming out with two reviews this month.
Hopefully I can keep up the pace.
The stories:
Help Desk (Chew Toy): M/? mc, hyp, mast
The Tickleopps Tourist Attraction (Orestes): M/F, bond, tickling
Ciphering (Lawdron): M/m, rape
Life Cycle of the Kaelen (Artie): M/F, SF
A Smart Girl (Orestes): M/F, D/s
Website Review: The ASSTR Archive
Help Desk [A]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 2/24/00
Author: Chew Toy
Author address: wellgnawed@hotmail.com
Poster: Caeser
Poster address: caesarSPAM@asstrFREE.org
Poster website: http://www.asstr-mirror.org/~CAS/
The late, great Chew Toy contributes this brief story, which is told
entirely in dialogue.
A confused person (who may be either male or female, there are
no tags) calls a software help desk to solve an email problem. The
exchanges are banal at first -- "What sort of trouble?" "My email
won't work" -- but changes as a spiral-shaped loading cursor
appears on the screen (think Netscap's spinning globe) which
hypnotizes the victim and gets him, as it transpires, in the mood
for some phone sex:
"Are you hard for me?"
"Yes..."
"Good. Pull your cock out so it sticks straight out in the air for
me. I love to see a hard naked cock poking out in the air. And I
love to watch a guy jack off, knowing that he's thinking about
me. I
want you to come for me soon. Can you do that?"
The story ends with the hint this strange power of the technician
lets him or her get their way in other areas of life, too.
Chew Toy has written a very enjoyable piece here, almost perfect
in its brevity and shift from the mundane to the fantastic, and I
was a little surprised because the last Chew Toy tale I read didn't
impress me much. A big plus to this story is that, aside from the
clueless computer user's comment that the technician has a "low,
sexy voice" the technician could be either male or female, as
could his/her next victim Sasha, as men usually don't compliment
other men for their sexy voices, even if they are gay. However, I
admit could be wrong about this. Can any gay readers enlighten
me?
I also humorously suggest the writer adopt "Brokensqueaker" as
an email moniker rather than "Wellgnawed." It's a little more
evocative.
The Tickleopps Tourist Attraction [A+]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 2/15/00
Author: Zawackyj
Address: zawackyj_1@hotmail.com
Website: http://ZawackyjStories.web1000.com
Two travel agents, Briget and Mark, meet at a conference. Mark
specializes in "special" tours of the kinky sort and tells her so (in
veiled language) then invites her up to his room. When the door
is locked, Briget finds herself naked and bound on the bed, the
apprehensive yet willing future victim of one of Mark's clients,
who has booked a night to tickle a naked, bound female to the
point of hysteria.
This was a fun and very well-written story, and I enjoyed it
immensely. In tone it was soft-core and naughty rather than
explicit, yet the softness somehow made it more kinky than a lot
of hard-core BDSM I've read, because the characters were so
shocked (yet turned on) by their naughtiness. The writer also
comes up with a couple of sexually philosophical passages, such
as this one (Briget is lying trussed on the bed):
There was a pinkness about her feet which was highly alluring
to him. It suggested not merely a cleanliness about her, but was a
clear sign of her wariness about having them handled in any
way. He cupped the big toe of her right foot in his hand just to
feel it's form in his hand. He held it for a second, twisting it
gently to force Briget's foot into a position where he could see the
subdued red gloss on her toes. He congratulated himself silently
for having been accurate with his first impression of Briget. The
nails were neatly trimmed and the application of the red polish
revealed things about her he knew she probably didn't even
realize herself. He didn't have to imagine her sitting in her room
earlier in the day, rubber spacers holding her toes widely spread
while she applied the gloss, being thoroughly careful to paint it
on evenly and without spillage on her toes. He knew she was too
innocent yet to understand, but the ritual of painting her nails,
especially in making her toes attractive, was a manifest sign of a
desire to have them tickled and caressed. It was also true, Mark
knew well, that a girl who'll let you touch her feet will let you
touch her anywhere.
The above was the most erotic passage about feet I've ever read.
Who knew toenail polish conveyed so much.
Ciphering [B]
Where posted: ASSGM
When posted: 2/21/00
Author: Lawdron
Address: lawdronNOlaSPAM@yahoo.com.invalid
The author calls this "a perverse little morality tale."
A teenage boy living with his single mom discovers his mother's
boyfriend is a recovering pedophile. Oddly, mom doesn't mind one
bit. The boyfriend then tells her an old acquaintance of his who
is also a pedophile is coming over to visit. No sweat, says mom,
asserting her 14-year-old son can handle the sticky situation
himself. Right, mom. The conjunction of the two chickenhawks
brings out the teen's own budding (gay) sexuality, and he soon
winds up seducing his erstwhile "stepfather" who later commits
suicide over what he has done. The old acquaintance then turns
up to enact a revenge on the boy.
The author's ambition was in the right place here -- he was
obviously trying for a psychological suspense tale with gay
overtones, of the kind Michael Gouda does so well -- but it fell flat
in execution. It wasn't the writing that was bad, but the
plausibility of it all. What mother would blow off a lover's
confession of child molestation, even if the narrator admits "I
don't hate my mother: I simply don't give a damn about her. Our
relationship is mutual that way?" Some evidence of mental
instability should have been shown, or a messy addiction. The
story bombed again when the 14-year-old evinces thoughts and
behavior that are way too sophisticated for a 14-year-old. At least,
show the kid pouring over gay mags, figuring out how such a
seduction could be done. He had no absolutely motivation for the
act; he doesn't even realize that his sexuality is different. On the
other hand, the seduction scene itself was well portrayed,
particularly the messy physicality of it (bloody underpants, et.
al.)
In sum, this was a good idea for a story that was not handled well.
If the writing was mediocre, you could blow it off as cheap
entertainment. But I think the author meant for it to mean more,
and unfortunately, that means more work.
Kaelen [A]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 1/22/00
Author: Artie
Address: artie@netgate.net
Website: http://www.very.net/nikolai/erotica/pheromoa.htm
In Part 1 of this 4-part series, a husband-and-wife team of
planetary explorers set down on Island, a planet whose culture
and inhabitants are reminiscent of Polynesia. The natives share a
strange symbiosis with the Kaelen, foot-long, gemlike insects
with musical calls, and it is this symbiosis the pair intend to
investigate. The first two-thirds of the test are devoted to the
explorer's preparation and landing on the planet, in language
that would make an anthropologist proud. When they are
seemingly settled in, however, the couple starts to experience an
increasing amount of horniness, which is tied to the presence of
the Kaelen. Thus the mystery is set up.
Apart from the talk of probes and AIs, story was more like a
textbook anthropology case than an SF tale ("...some may decry
the intense sexual content of this report. Indeed, many who knew
us closely at Survey may find it difficult to believe") but to me it
was readable rather than dense. At the end of the first chapter, I
felt I knew the explorers as people and wanted to find out how
their adventure winds up. But then, I've always liked reading
about intepid encounters with strange tribes in those old
textbooks.
A Smart Girl [A]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 2/2/00
Author: Orestes
Address: orestes007@hotmail.com
A well-off college guy at a well-off college hires fellow student
Maria to tutor him in algebra. Used to dating WASPs, he doesn't
know what to make of her half-Mexican heritage and welfare-
class origins. But she is smart, very, very, smart, and passive by
nature, so she doesn't resist his boorish frat-boy advances, and
serves him sexually in any way he asks without demanding
anything for herself. When she asks to move in, he lets her (with
the caveat she sleep in the laundry room so his rich blonde dates
don't find out) and soon she's doing the housework, handling his
finances, cooking, doing all his homework, AND sleeping him
with him when he can't get anyone better. The ideal (for the
guy) situation continues until he makes the mistake of telling
her she must let his friend fuck her in the ass, and pours a can of
beer over her head when the act is done.
This treatment pushes her to edge, for when the asshole wakes up
he's tied to the bed, and Maria is tormenting his balls with her
fingers, declaiming:
"I love you James, and I'm going to take good care of you. Trust
me. I've learned a lot from you. I've learned what kind of power
there is in sexual dominance. Even as I served you, and enjoyed
being used, I always knew that there would be a day that I would
change the balance in our relationship...I already control your
bank accounts. With my help, college will be a breeze. All you'll
have to do is be a good slave. "
Smart, very smart indeed.
This was one of those "biter bitten" stories, and the class conflict
(rich asshole vs. Miss One-step-from-the-ghetto) lent it extra
spice. At the end of the story, Maria gloats that not only will she
dominate the narrator (his reactions let us know his body will
like it, at least) but his WASPy girlfriend Trinity, too. (Is that a
real name, or has the author watched "The Matrix" too many
times?). Class revenge has never been so sweet.
The only thing that kept the story from perfection for me was the
revelation that Maria needed a helper to abet her transformation
to domme, namely the pal of the narrator's who brutally fucked
her in ass, who is revealed to be a secret master of domination
himself. This I don't quite get. How nice it would have been for
the "Smart Girl" to one-up the narrator by herself. But this was
still a very good story.
Website Review: The ASSTR Archive
URL: http://www.asstr-mirror.org
I've wanted to check out this site ever since the "new" ASSM was
launched last November.
It didn't disappoint. Very extensive, cleanly designed, and chock-
a-block with collectors, writers, FAQs, guides, and other general
information, the site bears many repeat visits. First of all, there's
the 200+ author listing, some with on-server websites, some with
FTP directories, ranging from old favorites like Dulcinea to newer
ones like Sidney Durham. The listings for authors are free, with
none of that nasty spam we've all gotten used to. Not only that,
there are about 20 collector sites, including a mirror for the Nifty
Archives site, and the salvaged archives of Ole Joe, Kristen,
Caeser, and others. There's also a search function, a necessity in a
site this big, and many links to other archives and story sites for
you to explore.
I found the layout clean and professional with everything
divided into neat tables, and if it seems too sterile, the tone of the
FAQs and welcome material is warm, congenial, and encouraging.
In sum, a must-see site and much-needed resource.
Interface: A
Content: A+
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